You should keep writing, and try to make it a little longer. Also, a little more description would help. And, you seem to capitalise a lot of words that don't need capitalising.

It's hard writing original stuff. I'm speaking from experience xD FF's are a lot easier, but you should give it a try anyway.

Thanks guys ^.^ All feedback is appreciated :D I can reveal that chapter one takes place during Patrick's baptism of fire on Harvest. Halo Wars characters will make cameo's.

Prologue: Hat Yai    “Clear to drop!” The pod thudded as the clamps were released, and the small entry vehicle plummeted towards the planet. One hundred Orbital Drop Shock Troopers zoomed towards the main continent of the planet named Hat Yai. The ships in space continued to fight, but a single cruiser noticed the pods, and ...

As someone who doesn't really fit in there, I will take your offence, and raise you one new FF! I finally finished the prologue, longest thing I've wrote. So, if I could get some readers, I'd love you all forever.

Wow, a lot more than I thought. And the Mirratord is strange :/

Oh yeah, because we all loved Aloy!

I noticed ^.^ I started writing another Halo FF. Gonna have the Prologue up soon. I have 5 and a half pages on it so far. I'm just wondering if there would be anyone to read it :/ And good to see someone still here, anywho.

Anyone? Helloooooo?

King of Halo Wars? Oh, lol.