Anders and the Arbiter

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  •  07-13-2009, 5:39 AM 652797

    Anders and the Arbiter

    Story closed. Point proven...


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  •  07-13-2009, 6:20 AM 652806 in reply to 652797

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    Sounds good, but when you say "Where once stood the Mega Turret that had for five hundred and five years prevented Covenant forces from Pelicaning in reinforcements"

    How do the covenant pelican in troops, they use phantoms, the UNSC use the Pelicans. Was this intended?


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  •  07-13-2009, 6:27 AM 652807 in reply to 652806

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    In 2451 the Covenant cannibalised the UNSC Pelican and modified their Phantoms accordingly. Soon after the name Pelican caught on with the Covenant also once they became familiar with Earth wildlife.


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  •  07-13-2009, 12:16 PM 653037 in reply to 652807

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    The story makes no sense...
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  •  07-13-2009, 11:43 PM 653584 in reply to 653037

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    I stand by what I said about iEchoic's story. These "genre" of cross-species romances are absolutely awful. I hate to sound conceited, but even the writing is sub-par. Especially since they're bordering on pornographic, they need to STOP. Comedy FF's I can stand, but this is just ridiculous.

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    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

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  •  07-14-2009, 3:23 AM 653693 in reply to 653584

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    I don't understand how Anders lived to be over 400 years old...

  •  07-14-2009, 6:35 AM 653737 in reply to 653693

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    She was knelt and her hands and legs were shackled with the shackles that the Covenant had designed to imprison the Prophet of Sadness in 2021

    Sub-par? I don't think so!

     

    Also, pornographic? Get out of your bubbleshield, please...

     

     

    BTW Anders did not live to be 400 because in actual fact as you will find in the next installment of my 23-piece series, the Arbiter created a robot version of her. Duh.


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  •  07-14-2009, 6:44 AM 653742 in reply to 653737

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    I thought it was a really good story. I wasnt aware that Cpt Cutter lived in a castle, but I guess thats explained in teh actual books that ive not read yet. I love the way teh Brute is shown in the story, it made me laugh.

    10/10!


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  •  07-14-2009, 7:10 AM 653747 in reply to 653742

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    You should write erotic novels

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  •  07-14-2009, 7:51 AM 653759 in reply to 653737

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    TrUe SkiilL TM:

    She was knelt and her hands and legs were shackled with the shackles that the Covenant had designed to imprison the Prophet of Sadness in 2021

    Sub-par? I don't think so!

     

    Also, pornographic? Get out of your bubbleshield, please...

     

     

    BTW Anders did not live to be 400 because in actual fact as you will find in the next installment of my 23-piece series, the Arbiter created a robot version of her. Duh.

     Oh right, since the answer is to be found in an installment I haven't even read yet, it should have been completely obvious.

  •  07-14-2009, 8:56 AM 653778 in reply to 653759

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    OhSoDeadly:[

    Oh right, since the answer is to be found in an installment I haven't even read yet, it should have been completely obvious.

    Perhaps you should buff up on the Halo canon before posting here
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  •  07-14-2009, 10:12 AM 653806 in reply to 653778

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    Uhg... another one of these.
    Do you people have anything better to do then write these ridiculous excuses for comedy?
    1: You tried to hard, it's not funny.
    2: The set-up is just stupid
    3: Research? Right... you really did that
     
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  •  07-14-2009, 1:32 PM 653960 in reply to 653778

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    TrUe SkiilL TM:Perhaps you should buff up on the Halo canon before posting here

    Says the person who has an Elite falling in lust with a human. While they may have respect for the UNSC, the Sangheili would never, I repeat never inter-species breed with humans. There wouldn't even be any "sex-toy" robots modeled after Humans. The Sangheili are a race of blood and honor, not sex and machoness like humans are. You're absolutely discrediting the species as a whole.

    Now; there was no "Prophet of Sadness" in any known Halo canon. There are:

    • The High Prophet of Restraint
    • High Prophet of Tolerance
    • Prophetess of Obligation
    • High Prophet of Mercy
    • High Prophet of Regret
    • High Prophet of Truth
    • Prophet of Supposition
    • Prophet of Pity
    • Prophet of Disdain
    • Prophet of Objection
    • Minister of Etiology

    That being said, the only notable fact placed in Halo canon on 2021 is the International Society of Civil Engineers was established. Nothing about shackles made to hold some Prophet. What you're writing isn't Halo canon, it's what you've made up.

    In fact, what you're writing contradicts Halo Canon. How did the Arbiter- who I can only assume is Ripa 'Moramee- live until 2931? For that matter, why would he be concerned if his Ellen Anders sex-robot wasn't eating Grunt bits? Then, you say that the Covenant "canibalized" Pelicans- which is gramatically incorrect it would be retro-fitted or repurposed or even adopted- in 2451 and updated their Phantoms accordingly. Never mind the fact that the D77-TC Pelican wasn't introduced until 2525, and Phantoms weren't introduced until 2531, well after you say their being used.

    Now, moving on to this lovely quote:

    TrUe SkiilL TM:

    She was knelt and her hands and legs were shackled with the shackles that the Covenant had designed to imprison the Prophet of Sadness in 2021

    Sub-par? I don't think so!

    Allow me to rewrite this to make it sub-par. Anders struggled in protest as Brute Chieftain brought her forward. She was cast mercilessly to the ground, her hands and ankles bound with the shackles the Covenant had constructed to retain the Prophet of Sadness in earlier Eras.

    Now, it's sub-par.

    Moving on.

    TrUe SkiilL TM:

    Also, pornographic? Get out of your bubbleshield, please...

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    TrUe SkiilL TM:

    The Brute Chieftain left them alone with an awkward cough as he saw the lusting expression that the Arbiter gave Anders...

    'She's kissing him!' Gallomk squeaked. 'And - oh boy - oh, wow!'...

    The question triggered the Grunt's memory and he vomitted violently on himself. 'He wasn't hitting the demon girl, he kissed her. Oh God.' The grunt swayed. 'And then-'

    The Brute recoiled. It was as he had expected!...

    I rest my case. 

    As a final annoyance, you said that Ellen Anders wasSergeant John Forge's daughter. Wouldn't that make her Ellen Forge? Never mind the fact that he's 29 and she's 27. He's old enough to date her, not be her father.

    TL;DR?

    While it sounds harsh, your writing on this topic sucks, as does the topic itself. You've done no research to even make it vaguely canonical, and it needs to stop.


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    ODST: Hellbound

    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

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  •  07-14-2009, 3:59 PM 654136 in reply to 653960

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    ^^

    But that stuff really doesnt matter.

    This is a Fan Fiction. He is a fan, and he wrote some fiction. Last time i check fiction is made up, and fake.

    This story losely set in the Halo verse, so its in the correct place. I thought i was funny and entertaining. Who carse the dates are out, or when a pelican was made?

    This is a place for people to write stories, or short pieces of writing that have been inspierd by halo. Your not a very welcoming crowed for new writers. You should be ashamed for how negative you have all been about it. It was a nice story that made me laugh thinking about a castle or the arbiter.

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  •  07-14-2009, 4:06 PM 654139 in reply to 654136

    Re: Anders and the Arbiter

    I found this story half amusing.

     

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