THE WAR OF EAYN (FF)

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  •  10-10-2008, 11:31 PM 380595

    THE WAR OF EAYN (FF)

    Sorry for the lack of a prologue but it is 5:30 in the morning and I do not feel like writing... so You all can expect a chapter tomorrow. or today whatever... So as you can see by the title, this is set on the jackals home planet of Eayn. And it is set in the far future. a long time after when new beginnings is set. so the UNSC is a lot better and bigger this time around so be expecting a lot of battles against the jackals.
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  •  10-10-2008, 11:39 PM 380608 in reply to 380595

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    Offensive, please include something

    i'd rather just have you post it tommorrow than have you give me an empty wrapper ;)


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  •  10-10-2008, 11:57 PM 380634 in reply to 380608

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    You will not be dissapointed.


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  •  10-11-2008, 12:42 AM 380737 in reply to 380595

    Re: THE WAR OF EAYN (FF)

    offensive bias:
    Sorry for the lack of a prologue but it is 5:30 in the morning and I do not feel like writing... so You all can expect a chapter tomorrow. or today whatever... So as you can see by the title, this is set on the jackals home planet of Eayn. And it is set in the far future. a long time after when new beginnings is set. so the UNSC is a lot better and bigger this time around so be expecting a lot of battles against the jackals.
    WHy do you FF Writeing always use the tactic like this to tease me? ;p

     

    *is fan-fic hungrey*

  •  10-11-2008, 10:43 PM 382131 in reply to 380737

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    THE WAR OF EAYN.

    PROLOGUE

    Location: Eayn; Kig Yar homeworld. 0534 Hours, 28th September 2654 (Military calendar) Nubian province, Frontline…

    Private Jacky sprinted for the cover of a large boulder. Plasma tore shreds out of a tree near him. He dived to the floor as a piece of Artillery landed close by. He felt a stitch coming on and knew he couldn’t carry on. He ran past a wounded comrade with a hole in his chest. He was crying out in pain as rain dropped into the wound. Jacky kept running. He had to. An explosion landed close to him. He felt pieces of rubble bounce off his armour. He was covered in dust now. Thunder streaked across the sky and illuminated a Wraith. It was firing the artillery at him. “***! ***! ***! ***!!!” That was all that went through his mind as the Wraith turned on him. It whined and spewed a great ball of plasma forth. He dived and landed behind the boulder. He felt the impact shake the ground around him and he thanked God for the boulder. It was huge. More like a mountain. He was safe… For now at least. He felt rubble slide off the boulder. There was only one opening. He turned towards it with a look of horror on his face as the entrance was blocked with debris. “***!!!” He screamed. He felt for his torch. He felt something crunch as he grabbed it. He felt around and inhaled sharply as he cut himself on the broken bulb. He shoved his finger in his mouth and sucked it. It was a deep cut. Blood oozed from the wound and trickled slowly down his glove. He had to get out of here but he couldn’t see anything. He could hear the distant rattle of gunfire and the thump of explosions. He pulled a flare out of his pack and lit it. He put it the middle of the floor and looked around. This boulder covered a huge cave. He saw the mouth of it. It was terribly dark and he knew he had to take the flare with him.

    After stumbling around for what seemed like hours, he came to a small wooden door. He saw light creeping out from underneath it. He extinguished the flare and silently opened the door. Inside was a Jackal. It had no weapon in it’s hand and no shield either. It was standing over a table with a bunch of papers. It squawked and banged the table with frustration every now and then. Jacky slowly pulled out his combat knife and advanced on the Jackal. He grabbed it by the head, pulled it’s head back and slit it’s throat in one quick motion. Blood gushed over the knife and his wrist as the Jackal went limp in his arms. He dropped it and sheathed his knife. He saw a door that he assumed led outside. He opened it and found himself facing an army of Jackals. They all turned to face him. He turned around to run but heard the whine of discharging plasma. He was almost through the door when he was hit square in the back and his world went black…


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  •  10-11-2008, 11:26 PM 382194 in reply to 382131

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    Oh come on people...
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  •  10-11-2008, 11:35 PM 382203 in reply to 382194

    Re: THE WAR OF EAYN (FF)

    If I must you know some people just like to read Fan Fics.

    Well my comment is that I wish their was less narration and more actual dialouge. Other than that it is pretty good.

    What happens to the guy does he die? Getting hit with plasma does not always kill you.    


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  •  10-11-2008, 11:53 PM 382217 in reply to 382203

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    KingKTiger123:

    If I must you know some people just like to read Fan Fics.

    Well my comment is that I wish their was less narration and more actual dialouge. Other than that it is pretty good.

    What happens to the guy does he die? Getting hit with plasma does not always kill you.    

    I didn't want my character talking to himself now did I? And you will find ot what happens to him in a few chapters time. It is suspense.


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  •  10-12-2008, 2:26 PM 382948 in reply to 382217

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    nice story. well done as always
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  •  10-12-2008, 2:28 PM 382953 in reply to 382948

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    Yay! Yam, yu have control of my fleets for a few minutes until I get back, remember, do not do anything war like unless provoked and well I will be back soon so just look after my faction for a while.
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  •  03-08-2009, 12:25 PM 494492 in reply to 382953

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    I'm sure most of you are aware of OB returning to the forums in the guise of Kuribayashi but I'm sure you will all have forgotten about this. While I wait for my PC to fix, I will have to put A Tadamachi Kuribayashi Original Fan Fic on hold, and carry on this one on the laptop. So, it is with great pleasure that I announce The War of Eayn, open!

    CHAPTER ONE: THE ASTEROID BELT

     

    Location; Asteroid belt around Eayn, 1841 Hours, 14th September 2723 (Military Calendar) On board UNSC Earthworm.

     

    Jacky dropped the spoon in his half eaten soup and walked off hurriedly toward his bunk. He had a roommate. A fellow Private named Sheppard. He was very hyper and eager to be sent out fighting the Jackal bases in the Asteroids. “Hey Jack, how long till they send us out you reckon?”

    “I don’t know Shep but it’s gotta be soon. My gun is getting restless!”

    “Yeah, your gun!”

    “That’s what I said numbnuts.

    “That would have been so much funnier, if you hadn’t said it.”

    “Lighten up Shep, we’ll be killing aliens soon. Sending trophies home to our families.”

    “Yeah, I promised I’d bring my little sister a gun back.”
    “That’s a little dangerous isn’t Shep?”

    “Nah! I’ll take the battery out.” Jacky lay on his bed and closed his eyes. Shep did the same.

    “Night Shep.”

    “Night Jack.” They soon fell asleep.

    16 HOURS LATER…

    Jacky launched his duffel bag onto the back of the Wolf. He sat down next to a Corporal with a nasty looking scar down his face. “Umm Sir? If you don’t mind me asking, how’d you get that?” The Corporal wearily looked at Jacky and drew out a captured enemy plasma pistol. He pointed to his face and then down at the gun. Jacky winced. The Wolf’s engine started up with a roar and Jacky was taken from one side of the ship to the other. It was a shame Shepherd had been assigned to a different battalion but they would meet up again. Jacky knew it. There was a Falcon loaded up with 30 troops. Jacky looked around the docking bay and saw a glimpse of Shepherd, but he was quickly lost from sight by the hundreds of troops awaiting departure to a nearby asteroid. He had simply argued with a Lieutenant why they couldn’t just blow them up. His reply was: “Kid, those Asteroids house Jackals. Jackals with valuable information. If we can figure out the lay of this planet and their defensive positions, why; we would win it within weeks. So stow it Private! And finish your gruel…”

    The Falcon shook as it lifted from the bay. They were protected from the vacuum by oxygenised thermal battle suits. The Falcon lurched out into space. Jacky felt nervous now. What would he be like under fire? Would he fight back? Would he win? Or lose…? “Land in 5!” The pilots voice boomed through his helmet speakers. He lay his head back against the wall and listened to the hum of the engines. He was drifting off to sleep.

    He was lay face down in the dirt. He sat up, coughing and spluttering. He spat handfuls of mud out and felt around for a weapon. He saw one. It was the alien gun he had seen on the lieutenant. He ran towards it, but was tripped. He turned around and saw eyes looking into his. “Shep? Man am I glad to see you!” Shepherds head dropped onto the floor and rolled away leaving a trail of gore behind it. He looked back and saw a tall shadow. It hefted a gun at him and fired repeatedly at his face.

    “YOU ***! STAY THE *** AWAY FROM ME!” He looked around and saw he was back in the Falcon. The other soldiers were staring at him. “Drop in 1! Get ready!” The soldiers all stood stock straight. Jacky hurriedly stood and smacked his knee on a chair. He sucked in air sharply and held his tongue. The craft lurched and shuddered violently. “Ok, GO! GO! GO!” They all filed out in a line. Jacky lifted his MK58 and followed the man in front of him. They were aware it wasn’t safe to take off the helmets yet. Not until they were deep inside the Asteroid. A captain stood at the front of the line. He briefed the 30 men. “Ok maggots! Listen up! I am not one for speeches, so I’ll keep it short! The Jackals have set up base here shortly after we arrived and they have been filling it for days. We have to find out what they want here.” The Captain cocked his shotgun and turned his back on the others. “Now move it leathernecks!!” The soldiers jogged forward after him. Jacky followed suit. After a few minutes of jogging, they heard distant gunfire. They quickened the pace. There was a door that was blown open. Charred alien bodies lay face down on the floor. Jacky gaped as he saw the creatures for the first time. Bird like, but bipedal like Humans. They were tall and slender and looked very strong. He was hurried along though and soon he wasn’t able to see them. The gunfire was closer. Jacky saw a wounded marine propped up against a wall. He had a hole in his armour around the chest. It was safe to take off the helmets but no one did. A hallway opened up but it was strewn with bodies, Human and alien alike. The gunfire sounded close enough that Jacky wanted to run for cover. A scream sounded. He shuddered. The Captain fired a short burst and yelled. “OPEN FIRE MAGGOTS!” He ran from sight firing his weapon. The soldiers followed him and he soon saw a large group of Jackals huddled in a Turtle formation. Green energy bolts impacted on the various metal crates strewn around the spacious room. Jacky leaned around a crate and fired a short burst into a Jackal’s shield. The bullets deflected harmlessly and the Jackal fired at him. Several plasma bolts slammed into the crate and missed Jacky by inches. A marine yelled as he was pelted by dozens of green bolts. His body fell to the floor, a gaping hole in his suit and smoke rising from the wound. The Captain lobbed a grenade. The Jackals saw the grenade but were too slow backing away from it. The explosion collapsed two Jackals shields and shredded them, while the rest were knocked to the ground by the concussive blast. The Marines saw their chance. Only three Jackals still stood after the grenade but they were quickly flanked and killed before they could regroup. The ones lying on the floor were put down with quick shots to the head.

    Jacky was still shaking from the adrenaline that the small skirmish had instilled in him. Word was they had secured most of the Asteroid and that only small forces of Jackals remained but they were digging in hard and refusing to surrender. Surely they must have realised that they weren’t going to be rescued? They had amazing will but that wasn’t going to save them from a force of 20,000 Marines hell-bent for revenge. His small group rounded a corner and immediately wished they hadn’t. A group of eight Jackals opened fire on them immediately. Two Marines fell under very concentrated fire. Jacky tripped over and the bolt that was meant for him smashed through a Privates visor, sending him screaming to the ground. Jacky crawled back around the corner and saw the survivors. Four soldiers remained. One of them clutched a bloody thigh as his friend tried to bandage it. Jacky peeked around the corner and a plasma bolt flew at him in seconds. He had managed to see them moving slowly up the passageway. “What the *** man? There aren’t supposed to be any Jackals in this sector!” the angry Private slapped a fresh clip into his gun. Jacky looked around the corner again and the Jackals were even closer. One of them was prepping a grenade. “MOVE!” His yell did the trick as the startled soldiers stood quickly and moved further back down the passage. The wounded soldier took a little longer but he was fast enough. A grenade soon flew from around the corner. It detonated harmlessly. Jacky stared intently down the weapons sights as he waited for them to round the corner. The others did the same. A shield peeked around the corner and sidled its way out. Jacky opened fire on it and the others followed suit. The shield collapsed and the Jackal fell from combined fire. The other seven leaped out. They appeared angry. Jacky noticed for the first time that these Jackals had green shields as opposed to the traditional blue and gold. They were angry at the death of a comrade. They charged recklessly into the guns of Jacky and the other Marines. Two marines fell from plasma wounds before the Jackals finally died. Whoever those Jackals were, they were smart and worked as a team. They were enraged at the death of another Jackal and that imposed they were close. Little did Jacky know, these Jackals with the green shields would make the war last more than three years. And Jacky would fight them.

    CHAPTER ONE: THE ASTEROID BELT

     

    Location; Asteroid belt around Eayn, 1841 Hours, 14th September 2723 (Military Calendar) On board UNSC Earthworm.

     

    Jacky dropped the spoon in his half eaten soup and walked off hurriedly toward his bunk. He had a roommate. A fellow Private named Sheppard. He was very hyper and eager to be sent out fighting the Jackal bases in the Asteroids. “Hey Jack, how long till they send us out you reckon?”

    “I don’t know Shep but it’s gotta be soon. My gun is getting restless!”

    “Yeah, your gun!”

    “That’s what I said numbnuts.

    “That would have been so much funnier, if you hadn’t said it.”

    “Lighten up Shep, we’ll be killing aliens soon. Sending trophies home to our families.”

    “Yeah, I promised I’d bring my little sister a gun back.”
    “That’s a little dangerous isn’t Shep?”

    “Nah! I’ll take the battery out.” Jacky lay on his bed and closed his eyes. Shep did the same.

    “Night Shep.”

    “Night Jack.” They soon fell asleep.

    16 HOURS LATER…

    Jacky launched his duffel bag onto the back of the Wolf. He sat down next to a Corporal with a nasty looking scar down his face. “Umm Sir? If you don’t mind me asking, how’d you get that?” The Corporal wearily looked at Jacky and drew out a captured enemy plasma pistol. He pointed to his face and then down at the gun. Jacky winced. The Wolf’s engine started up with a roar and Jacky was taken from one side of the ship to the other. It was a shame Shepherd had been assigned to a different battalion but they would meet up again. Jacky knew it. There was a Falcon loaded up with 30 troops. Jacky looked around the docking bay and saw a glimpse of Shepherd, but he was quickly lost from sight by the hundreds of troops awaiting departure to a nearby asteroid. He had simply argued with a Lieutenant why they couldn’t just blow them up. His reply was: “Kid, those Asteroids house Jackals. Jackals with valuable information. If we can figure out the lay of this planet and their defensive positions, why; we would win it within weeks. So stow it Private! And finish your gruel…”

    The Falcon shook as it lifted from the bay. They were protected from the vacuum by oxygenised thermal battle suits. The Falcon lurched out into space. Jacky felt nervous now. What would he be like under fire? Would he fight back? Would he win? Or lose…? “Land in 5!” The pilots voice boomed through his helmet speakers. He lay his head back against the wall and listened to the hum of the engines. He was drifting off to sleep.

    He was lay face down in the dirt. He sat up, coughing and spluttering. He spat handfuls of mud out and felt around for a weapon. He saw one. It was the alien gun he had seen on the lieutenant. He ran towards it, but was tripped. He turned around and saw eyes looking into his. “Shep? Man am I glad to see you!” Shepherds head dropped onto the floor and rolled away leaving a trail of gore behind it. He looked back and saw a tall shadow. It hefted a gun at him and fired repeatedly at his face.

    “YOU ***! STAY THE *** AWAY FROM ME!” He looked around and saw he was back in the Falcon. The other soldiers were staring at him. “Drop in 1! Get ready!” The soldiers all stood stock straight. Jacky hurriedly stood and smacked his knee on a chair. He sucked in air sharply and held his tongue. The craft lurched and shuddered violently. “Ok, GO! GO! GO!” They all filed out in a line. Jacky lifted his MK58 and followed the man in front of him. They were aware it wasn’t safe to take off the helmets yet. Not until they were deep inside the Asteroid. A captain stood at the front of the line. He briefed the 30 men. “Ok maggots! Listen up! I am not one for speeches, so I’ll keep it short! The Jackals have set up base here shortly after we arrived and they have been filling it for days. We have to find out what they want here.” The Captain cocked his shotgun and turned his back on the others. “Now move it leathernecks!!” The soldiers jogged forward after him. Jacky followed suit. After a few minutes of jogging, they heard distant gunfire. They quickened the pace. There was a door that was blown open. Charred alien bodies lay face down on the floor. Jacky gaped as he saw the creatures for the first time. Bird like, but bipedal like Humans. They were tall and slender and looked very strong. He was hurried along though and soon he wasn’t able to see them. The gunfire was closer. Jacky saw a wounded marine propped up against a wall. He had a hole in his armour around the chest. It was safe to take off the helmets but no one did. A hallway opened up but it was strewn with bodies, Human and alien alike. The gunfire sounded close enough that Jacky wanted to run for cover. A scream sounded. He shuddered. The Captain fired a short burst and yelled. “OPEN FIRE MAGGOTS!” He ran from sight firing his weapon. The soldiers followed him and he soon saw a large group of Jackals huddled in a Turtle formation. Green energy bolts impacted on the various metal crates strewn around the spacious room. Jacky leaned around a crate and fired a short burst into a Jackal’s shield. The bullets deflected harmlessly and the Jackal fired at him. Several plasma bolts slammed into the crate and missed Jacky by inches. A marine yelled as he was pelted by dozens of green bolts. His body fell to the floor, a gaping hole in his suit and smoke rising from the wound. The Captain lobbed a grenade. The Jackals saw the grenade but were too slow backing away from it. The explosion collapsed two Jackals shields and shredded them, while the rest were knocked to the ground by the concussive blast. The Marines saw their chance. Only three Jackals still stood after the grenade but they were quickly flanked and killed before they could regroup. The ones lying on the floor were put down with quick shots to the head.

    Jacky was still shaking from the adrenaline that the small skirmish had instilled in him. Word was they had secured most of the Asteroid and that only small forces of Jackals remained but they were digging in hard and refusing to surrender. Surely they must have realised that they weren’t going to be rescued? They had amazing will but that wasn’t going to save them from a force of 20,000 Marines hell-bent for revenge. His small group rounded a corner and immediately wished they hadn’t. A group of eight Jackals opened fire on them immediately. Two Marines fell under very concentrated fire. Jacky tripped over and the bolt that was meant for him smashed through a Privates visor, sending him screaming to the ground. Jacky crawled back around the corner and saw the survivors. Four soldiers remained. One of them clutched a bloody thigh as his friend tried to bandage it. Jacky peeked around the corner and a plasma bolt flew at him in seconds. He had managed to see them moving slowly up the passageway. “What the *** man? There aren’t supposed to be any Jackals in this sector!” the angry Private slapped a fresh clip into his gun. Jacky looked around the corner again and the Jackals were even closer. One of them was prepping a grenade. “MOVE!” His yell did the trick as the startled soldiers stood quickly and moved further back down the passage. The wounded soldier took a little longer but he was fast enough. A grenade soon flew from around the corner. It detonated harmlessly. Jacky stared intently down the weapons sights as he waited for them to round the corner. The others did the same. A shield peeked around the corner and sidled its way out. Jacky opened fire on it and the others followed suit. The shield collapsed and the Jackal fell from combined fire. The other seven leaped out. They appeared angry. Jacky noticed for the first time that these Jackals had green shields as opposed to the traditional blue and gold. They were angry at the death of a comrade. They charged recklessly into the guns of Jacky and the other Marines. Two marines fell from plasma wounds before the Jackals finally died. Whoever those Jackals were, they were smart and worked as a team. They were enraged at the death of another Jackal and that imposed they were close. Little did Jacky know, these Jackals with the green shields would make the war last more than three years. And Jacky would fight them.


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  •  03-08-2009, 6:00 PM 495170 in reply to 494492

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    Do people on these forums not appreciate writing anymore? Or do they stay here to post annoying topics and repeat threads while flaming anything that moves?
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  •  03-09-2009, 7:27 PM 497288 in reply to 495170

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    Kuribayashi:Do people on these forums not appreciate writing anymore? Or do they stay here to post annoying topics and repeat threads while flaming anything that moves?
    Yes people enjoy reading but some dont take the time to reply, very good fan fic but you psted it twice in the same post. 20,00 marines Huh? You just love your iwo jima crap dont you OB

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  •  03-09-2009, 8:25 PM 497402 in reply to 497288

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    death no more:
    Kuribayashi:Do people on these forums not appreciate writing anymore? Or do they stay here to post annoying topics and repeat threads while flaming anything that moves?
    Yes people enjoy reading but some dont take the time to reply, very good fan fic but you psted it twice in the same post. 20,00 marines Huh? You just love your iwo jima crap dont you OB

    The 20,000 Marines never occurred to me before... Pretty ironic as a few weeks ago, I was listening to War memorial songs over the internet and saluting pictures of my Grandfather. I am aware of the double post thing but that happens sometimes and there's nothing I can do about it.


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  •  03-10-2009, 6:11 AM 498055 in reply to 497402

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    I liked it but some of your other fanfics were better and more well described this one seemed a bit rushed compared to your usual writing but that's just my oppinion.
    thanks to Ryzza for the sig (I wish you saw it while you could still see it)


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