The Family.

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  •  10-28-2008, 10:48 PM 396212

    The Family.

    The cold drink stung his burnt hand. Arby stood alone, a solitary figure on the mansions rooftop. Cold winds blew trough Arby’s hair. ***, the family is falling apart, the very thought could get Arby killed. We only have the Mansion left. The police, the Calbraxisis, they’re taking everything. Our caches, our weapons, and our safe houses. He exhaled deeply, shook his head, took a drink, and stepped down from the roof. Arby climed in through his window to find Bacon standing by his door.

    “What the hell is this?”

    “Just a visit, well, that and to make sure your drunk ass doesn’t fall of the roof. Horrible mess to clean up” He smiled a wide grin. “How’s the weather up there?”

    “Winds picking up, now cut the small talk. What’s up.”

    “Nothing! Like I said just a visit”

    “Well then, this visits over, I have a hangover to look forward too”

    “Very well” and with that Bacon left.

    =                             =                             =                             =                             =                             =                            

    The next morning Arby awoke with a grueling hangover. His left temple felt like a nail had been driven through it. The entire right side of his brain was on fire. A heavy knock on the door sent millions of tacks driving into his brain.

    “What”

    “Open Arby”

    “Dammit, captain I got a hangover”

    “I know” Arby reluctantly rose and opened the door. As soon as he unlocked it Cazador, Chuckless, and Rock came bursting through the door, Guns raised.

    “Hands behind your head Arby” Arby laced his fingers behind his head.

    “What the hell is this?”

    “We got a tip you’re a Calbraxisis spy”

    “And you seriously believe that!!!”

    “Arby, you know we can’t be too carful” Chuckless opened Arby’s dresser, rummaged through it, and pulled out a paper. The top was titled hit list, in Arby’s handwriting. Following the titles were pictures of high ranking officials in the family. An red X ran through the picture of Omega who had died not to long ago. “So, Arby, now I ask you. What the hell is this!” Arby could only stare at the paper, dumbstruck.     


    VIVA LA FAMILIA

    wanna see somthing funny read through the first two pages of this thread http://halowars.com/forums/thread/318933.aspx
  •  10-28-2008, 10:56 PM 396218 in reply to 396212

    Re: The Family.

    Again? Don't you get tired of doing this Family thing? I'm not criticizing you, but I think it's lost it's purpose. Again, no offense.
  •  10-28-2008, 10:57 PM 396220 in reply to 396218

    Re: The Family.

    glad to see you got this back up

    I've been waiting you know

    :P


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  •  10-28-2008, 11:00 PM 396222 in reply to 396218

    Re: The Family.

    No offense taken. Most of the time when i write these is to try and revive the Family. Bring it back to its former glory. anyways what do you think of the writting its self.
    VIVA LA FAMILIA

    wanna see somthing funny read through the first two pages of this thread http://halowars.com/forums/thread/318933.aspx
  •  10-28-2008, 11:06 PM 396224 in reply to 396222

    Re: The Family.

    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    No offense taken. Most of the time when i write these is to try and revive the Family. Bring it back to its former glory. anyways what do you think of the writting its self.
    It's interesting. It's okay if you're into it. I just never cared for the thread. It's excellent righting though. I wish you would apply that to some other fan-fictions.
  •  10-28-2008, 11:11 PM 396227 in reply to 396224

    Re: The Family.

    Legendary Halo:
    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    No offense taken. Most of the time when i write these is to try and revive the Family. Bring it back to its former glory. anyways what do you think of the writting its self.
    It's interesting. It's okay if you're into it. I just never cared for the thread. It's excellent righting though. I wish you would apply that to some other fan-fictions.

     

    i plan too. im currently working on another FF called Humaniteis(sp) Lost War


    VIVA LA FAMILIA

    wanna see somthing funny read through the first two pages of this thread http://halowars.com/forums/thread/318933.aspx
  •  10-28-2008, 11:18 PM 396229 in reply to 396227

    Re: The Family.

    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:

    Legendary Halo:
    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    No offense taken. Most of the time when i write these is to try and revive the Family. Bring it back to its former glory. anyways what do you think of the writting its self.
    It's interesting. It's okay if you're into it. I just never cared for the thread. It's excellent righting though. I wish you would apply that to some other fan-fictions.

     

    i plan too. im currently working on another FF called Humaniteis(sp) Lost War

    I'll look forward too reading it. Right now, I have to get some sleep. It's 12:17 PM.
  •  10-28-2008, 11:18 PM 396230 in reply to 396220

    Re: The Family.

    awsome117:

    glad to see you got this back up

    I've been waiting you know

    :P

    And i keep waiting for you to update your Fanfic. :Evilface:

  •  10-28-2008, 11:26 PM 396232 in reply to 396230

    Re: The Family.

    UNSC Dusk:
    awsome117:

    glad to see you got this back up

    I've been waiting you know

    :P

    And i keep waiting for you to update your Fanfic. :Evilface:

    no not the evil face!


    VIVA LA FAMILIA

    wanna see somthing funny read through the first two pages of this thread http://halowars.com/forums/thread/318933.aspx
  •  10-28-2008, 11:41 PM 396237 in reply to 396232

    Re: The Family.

    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    UNSC Dusk:
    awsome117:

    glad to see you got this back up

    I've been waiting you know

    :P

    And i keep waiting for you to update your Fanfic. :Evilface:

    no not the evil face!

    ?

  •  10-28-2008, 11:49 PM 396240 in reply to 396237

    Re: The Family.

    UNSC Dusk:
    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    UNSC Dusk:
    awsome117:

    glad to see you got this back up

    I've been waiting you know

    :P

    And i keep waiting for you to update your Fanfic. :Evilface:

    no not the evil face!

    ?

    OMGWTFBBQ!!!


    VIVA LA FAMILIA

    wanna see somthing funny read through the first two pages of this thread http://halowars.com/forums/thread/318933.aspx
  •  10-28-2008, 11:52 PM 396242 in reply to 396240

    Re: The Family.

    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    UNSC Dusk:
    Arby: Soldato for the Corleone's:
    UNSC Dusk:
    awsome117:

    glad to see you got this back up

    I've been waiting you know

    :P

    And i keep waiting for you to update your Fanfic. :Evilface:

    no not the evil face!

    ?

    OMGWTFBBQ!!!

    Explain your self. What does OMGWTFBBQ mean. Tell me.  Or Else.

  •  10-28-2008, 11:58 PM 396246 in reply to 396242

    Re: The Family.

    LOL

    k i'll see you later headin to bed


    VIVA LA FAMILIA

    wanna see somthing funny read through the first two pages of this thread http://halowars.com/forums/thread/318933.aspx
  •  10-29-2008, 12:12 AM 396257 in reply to 396212

    Re: The Family.

     Finally! I have waited a long time for this. I'm going to assume that Arby was set up. I reckon it was me...

    I saw a couple of errors. I'll point them out.

    1. Dam, the families falling... Dam should be ***, and families should be family's.

    2. climed in through...  climed should be climbed.

    3. Remember, at the end of each bit of speech, there needs to be punctuation. For example:
    "Horrible mess to clean up." He smiled...
    "can't be to carful." Chuckless opened...

    4. door. Guns raised.  I think it would be better if you replaced the full stop after door with a comma and made it one sentence.

    5. be to carful...  It should be written as: be too careful.

    Good work, Arby. Keep it up.


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  •  10-29-2008, 7:53 PM 396722 in reply to 396257

    Re: The Family.

    Two things

    1: Why do you always start drunk?

    2: How come I'm always dead? =P

    Great to see ya again Arby!


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    -5 STM
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