FF Fall of High Charity

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  •  10-25-2008, 2:47 AM 394161

    FF Fall of High Charity

    This is my First fan fic so dont get hatting on me if it sucks and i dont really know what to do for a prologue and i kinda am doing this as a story for an english assignment so give me a break ok. and pleas enjoy if u can and reply.

    Fall of High Charity

    Chapter 1

    Uprising

     

    On board the carrier ship

    Shadow of Intent

    Date 6/7/52

    Time 12:34pm

     

    It was extremely active around the prophet’s holy space city High Charity. It was a war zone. Yesterday at 4pm was when it started the uprising of the elites. It began with the brutes carelessly beginning to assassinate the elite councilors, and then it started an all out war in the city and near it. That was yesterday this is now. Sitting in his chair was Rtas 'Vadum , the commander of the elites in the sector. He was watching the battle between his cruisers and the covenants.

     His two mandibles that are not broken closed tight. 1 day ago he was a loyal special operations commander of the covenant. Now he is second in command of the elite resistance group. "Commander! A brute cruiser is coming from under us! What would you want us to do?" asked an elite warrior. "is the main plasma beam emitter operational yet?" asked Rtas. "yes Commander!" replied the elite.

     "Fire on that cruiser! Send them beast! To their grave! " ordered Rtas. "you heard the commander! Fire!" yelled the elite major who’s Rtas's second in command warrior. The elite major was 1nch shorter than ras and 1 year younger. "thank you char." Said Rtas with a grin. "my pleasure my old friend" said char as he walked towards the monitor screen to view the cruiser below them burn away from the beam.

     Char chuckled at the sight. "stupid brutes! They should have expected that when they came under the main ray in the first place." Said char with a grin. Rtas sat and watched his elites roar in victory but he didn’t join them for he knew it was only the beginning. "Rtas we got a transmission from a nearby brute cruiser!" yelled an elite. Rtas looked startled that the beasts actually tried to communicate. If they were expecting mercy from us than they thought wrong! But might as well listen to their pathetic surrendering speech Rtas thought.

    "Put it on!" ordered Rtas. The screen flickered on. On the screen was a huge brute in gold armor possibly the chieftain. "This is the chieftain of the cruiser juggernaut! I challenge u and your crew to combat! on the docking bays to see whos ship will be overwhelmed first!" Yelled the chieftain. Rtas could hear the brutes in the background growl. What a fool! Rtas thought. How could a chieftain take that suicide of an action? If he docks his cruiser next to the carriers docking bay he would be overwhelmed by our numbers!

     Well thats what he’ll get for being a dumb brute. "Challenge accepted!" Roared Rtas. "you will be a tasty treat when this is over!" growled the chieftain. The screen flickers off. Rtas got up and left to the docking bay along with a large amount of elites. Rtas was a bit confused. Why would a brute as stupid as they were do that kind of action? Rtas thought. It didnt matter cuz he knew that his crew of 1500 warriors can defeat these animals.

    Chapter 2

    Dock Bay B-27

     

    On board the carrier ship

    Shadow of Intent

    Date 6/7/52

    Time 12:41pm

     

    The cruiser Juggernaut was now docking on the carrier. Rtas was in front of his army of elites, grunts, jackals, drones, and hunters. The grunts that he had been able to convince to join his side without having to kill wore armor in the color of their rank with an symbol on it so they can be tell apart for the covenant grunts. The jackals that were also convinced to join that didn’t deny the request to join wore blood red color armor.

     All the hunters Rtas could get he convinced them he would take them back to their home world and protect it if they help him destroy the covenant. They were marked by a symbol. Like a living hive. The drones were convinced more easily. They were marked by a symbol. With his force behind him. He was ready. Armed with 2 duel wield energy swords.

     Rtas was eager to make a blood bath out of the brutes. He watched as a mass of brutes poured out to the carriers docking bay with them were their grunts and jackals. Rtas's grunts were all armed with plasma grenades and plasma rifles. The brute’s grunts were armed with spikers. Rtas's jackals were armed with carbines, needlers, beam rifles, and energy swords.

    The brute’s jackals were armed with the same thing except they also had maulers. Rtas had hunters and drones while the brutes had none with them at this moment.His drones were armed with needlers and plasma pistols. He and the elites had their energy swords, plasma rifles, and fuel rods. The brutes were armed with spikers, maulers, brute shots, spike grenades, and gravity hammers.

    He could see their chieftain was way in the back with his personal fuel rod and hammer. Rtas was expecting a lot of brutes armed with fuel rods but only one had a fuel rod. He grinned. with 350 of his elites, and 200 hunters armed with fuel rods. That this was an easy win. The brute chieftain than roared! All the brutes, grunts, and jackal up front began to charge. Rtas and his elites grinned and chuckled as their grunts threw plasma grenades, their fuel rods firing at them.

    The whole army of brutes scattered and were disorganized. Many fell. When the surviving brutes, grunts, and jackals began to get up. Rtas roared and led the charge. The brutes that got up in time ran for the cruiser. Their chieftain then charged in fuel rod blazing. Rtas ducked so did his comrades. When the chieftain ran out of ammo he tossed it to the ground and pulled out his hammer and charged at Rtas.

    Rtas dodged the swing of the hammer and went for a deadly lunge. But the chieftain turns on his energy shield and punched Rtas in the gut. But he had an energy shield of his own for he got up quick and started dodging the swings of the chieftain. Finally a friendly jack saw Rtas was in need of assistants and pulled out his beam rifle and took out the shield generator on the chieftains back.

    Then when Rtas saw the opportunity he sliced off the chieftains legs. The chieftain screamed in agony for 3 seconds before Rtas took the energy sword to the chieftains heart. Rtas roared in victory!

    Rtas then watched as the cruiser the juggernaut try to flee but the plasma torpedoes of the carrier ript it to shreds. The remaining covenant were immediatly eraticated.

     

    Rtas then watched as the cruiser the juggernaut try to flee but the plasma torpedoes of the carrier ript it to shreds. The remaining covenant were immediatly eraticated.

     

    Rtas then watched as the cruiser the juggernaut try to flee but the plasma torpedoes of the carrier ript it to shreds. The remaining covenant were immediatly eraticated.

     

    Rtas then watched as the cruiser the juggernaut try to flee but the plasma torpedoes of the carrier ript it to shreds. The remaining covenant were immediatly eraticated.

     

    Rtas then watched as the cruiser the juggernaut try to flee but the plasma torpedoes of the carrier ript it to shreds. The remaining covenant were immediatly eraticated.

    Chapter 3

    High Charity

     

    In a room in high charity

    Date 6/7/52

    Time 12:41pm

    sitting on his gravity chair watching the conflict through the monitors was a prophet. His name was shumana(shoe-mona). he was getting impatient with the fact that the elites havent died yet! and the fact that they were winning. Then a grunt walked in. "uh..... Holy one? We got a problem!" said the grunt nervously. The prophet glared then asked.

    "What now?" "uh.... the city is now divided to where we are seperated from half of our comrades with the elites having the west side and the flood having the east side. im not sure how long we could relink with them if they havent died yet." said the grunt.

    The prophet was about to loose his temper on the grunt for he only needed to press one button on his chair to end the grunts poor miserable life at any minute but he sighed and said. " get out of here now!" ordered the prophet. the grunt jumped and then ran out of the room before the prophet could change his mind.

    shumana then pressed a button and says "Brock get in here!" A huge brute comes in the room wearing red chieftain armor looks at the prophet and asks. "what shall i do for you now my holy one?" "i need u to get whatever warriors that are left alive on those ships! back on board high charity now! before they get killed!" ordered shumana. "it shall be done." replied Brock as he bows and then leaves. This is going to be one long day! Shumana thought. then he went to a deep sleep.

    Brock continued throught the hall till he reached the controll room and there he met with his captian Tyrannus. "status!" barked Brock. " We will have the cobat scarabs online in 25 minutes chieftian!" replied Tyrannus. "good." said Brock. "now get the surving crew members off the cruisers and on small vessel to high charity immediatly!" ordered Brock. "it shall be done!" replied tyrannus.

    Brock continued throught the hall till he reached the controll room and there he met with his captian Tyrannus. "status!" barked Brock. " We will have the cobat scarabs online in 25 minutes chieftian!" replied Tyrannus. "good." said Brock. "now get the surving crew members off the cruisers and on small vessel to high charity immediatly!" ordered Brock. "it shall be done!" replied tyrannus.

    Chapter 4

    On board the carrier ship

    Shadow of Intent

    Date 6/7/52

    Time 1:06pm

    Rtas was now in the bridge again. this time there were holograms of the shipmasters, battlefieldmasters, and Spec op commanders. all Arguing about what course of action we take next now that we defeated the brutes in space around high charity. "we should Have wave after wave attacks on the covenant in the north side first before we deal with the flood on the east and the covenant on the south side." some elites said. "no we should take them all on!" said another.

    "no we have to defeat the flood first!" yelled another. "Alright ! Thats enough! All of YOU! Shut  the **** UP! before you all have your mandibles ripped off of your faces!" yelled Rtas. Silence was in the air. everyine was silent staring at ras for further orders. "look we know we all have different opinions but we have to stick together! we are Brothers and for that we shall die fighting along side not killing one another! Never again shall we need to do that!" said Rtas recalling a spec ops mission that he now regrets completing.

     "alright what shall we do my friend?" asked char with a grin. "We will use the scarabs and other vehicles we have and take control of the streets! have spec op teams take care of the Hardpoints we need taken care of. have all but 3 ships stay away for high charitys docks but keep an eye out for any ships that try to escape." ordered Rtas. "til later i dont know what else to do so we do this for now! is that understood?" asked Rtas. All the other elites shook theirs heads in agreement.

    "good We start Now!" ordered Rtas. Then Rtas left the bridge and headed for a phantom with him was char and some other elites. "Do you really know what you are doing old friend?" asked char. "I hope so char." said Rtas with a grim look on his face as the phantom heads for high charity.

    Chapter 5

    Sector 13


    On High charity
    Date 6/7/52
    Time 1:20pm

    13 Ghost Scout through the empty streets in search of any flood. The drivers were elites 10 minors, 2 majors, and an ultra. "Sir we been scouting this sector for hours now! There is nothing in this sector. We should call it in so we can have a decent break while they set up a camp here." asked an impatient minor. "Shut your jaws! You know what might happen if the flood were here and what they would do to our brothers!" said the ultra angrily. The minor then said “yes commander." Then something from the shadows jump and landed in the center of the road. "Everyone stop!!!!!!" ordered the ultra. They stopped. "Don’t fire unless you see the parasite attack! Understood?" asked the ultra. "Yes commander!" replied a major. The ultra walked over to the fallen black object and then stopped. His face dripped tears for this was his most loyal friend he ever had. the elite was missing some of his armor and was now infected by the flood and is getting close to becoming more part of them. "Dra.... Drake?" asked the fallen elite. "It’s me my friend imp here." replied Drake. "I thought I never see you again before I die!" said the elite in tears. "I know so have I." said drake while he pulled out his sword. "You know what to do Drake so do it!" asked the elite. "I will my friend. May you go to the light! The true light!” screamed drake in tears as he forces himself to take the sword through his friend’s heart. The other elite now lie motionless. Drake now made a huge roar of fury. "Commander! Look out!" yelled a minor elite. Drake moved just in time to dodge a flood combat form that had an energy sword. Luckily it was not good at using the sword for Drake stabbed the beast before it could block. Now Drake had 2 energy swords and watched as more flood came at him. He grinned and then started slicing through the wave of them. The other elites started shooting the plasma cannons of the ghosts. When the flood wave was vanquished Drake ordered his warriors to fall back to headquarters and said he'll be there later. They left and Drake then stood there alone. For 35min and then he took one last look at his friends corpse then left. He then made it back to headquarters and there waiting for him was Rtas. "I heard about your friend. I am sorry for your loss." said Rtas. "It’s alright brother. Its not you’re doing my commander." said Drake. Rtas looked Drake in the eye. He could see that Drake was feeling pain inside. Rtas then said "take an hour or 2 off my friend. And don’t return to me for duty till you are feeling better." "Is that an order?" asked Drake. "It’s a recommendation. But don’t worry we can handle it without you. Just relax" said Rtas. "Oh alright." said Drake. "Good. Now I have to go talk to you later." said Rtas. Drake then went to his quarters.

     

    Chapter 6

    City Streets

     

    In a building on high charity
    Date 6/7/52
    Time 2:00 pm

    The chieftain Brock watched from above as his comrade’s fight of the flood while he awaits the combat scarabs to arrive. the flood were nothing but bodies of once living beings now controlled by  parasites and have nothing but spores, tentacles, and spines covering their bodies. Then the chieftain watched as a huge tentacle came out of the ground and swung at his comrades. So this is their might gravemind. The chieftain thought. Then a beam of green plasma struck the tentacle. The creatures screamed in pain the pulled its tentacle back into the ground. The chieftain grinned. "Not so mighty now." said Brock. As he watched the combat scarabs arrive then the flood suddenly retreated into the darkness. Brock didn’t care for the elites shall be the first to die tonight not him not the prophet. "Prepare for combat!" the chieftain roared. He said it now because he needed them ready. "Chieftain!" yelled tyrannous. "Report!" ordered Brock. "Our comrades at the Southside have fell to the flood!" replied tyrannous. "How many?" asked Brock? "About 250,000 of them. From what I know were there at the time." replied tyrannous. Brock was now worried. "Chieftain!" yelled a brute minor. "What?" yelled the chieftain? "The elites are offering a last fight to the death!" replied the minor. "When!?!?" asked Brock. "Tonight at 6:00pm!" replied the minor. "Weapon restrictions?" asked the chieftain. "None! All weapon combat!" but if we try anything that would be considered cheating they would have their ships glass this city!" replied the minor. Now Brock was more worried. But he thought it through and said. "Tell them we accept!" roared the chieftain. When the minor left the chieftain grabbed both his mighty hammer and blade and left.


    Chapter 7

    Cortana


    Ras’s private quarters in high charity.
    Date 6/7/52
    Time 3:56 pm

    Ras was cleaning his white armor and preparing for combat. Then the com went on. "Rtas we have a transmission from a human AI. and it said it would like to speak to you should I allow it access to you hologram terminal?" asked char. "go ahead." replied Rtas for he didn’t really mind now for he might as well do his part in making friends with the enemy of his enemy’s AI. It appeared and it was female. It was bluish colored and about as tall as his plasma rifle. "Hello Rtas I am cortana." said the AI. "hello." replied Rtas. "I know we all kind of gotten on a bad start at the beginning to 2 days ago of the human/covie war but now we can negotiate. If you even want to" she said with loneliness showing. Rtas sighed then he said "imp listening." the 2 talked for an hr and came to an agreement that she would help them kill the remaining covenant if they took her message to earth. "When will you be ready?" asked cortana. "Soon" replied Rtas as he left the room. He walked into a huge building and there he could see the scarabs were ready for combat. "Rtas we are almost ready for the assault." said an elite. "Good" replied Rtas. This shall be an easy fight. He thought. Then char, Drake and the elite battlefield master name sobek came in and char asked “what did the human AI wanted?” Rtas told them and sobek asked “why should we trust her?” “Because the arbiter said we should make friends with the humans now and since she’s their AI we might as well.” Said Rtas in a high tone voice and then said “I am in charge and whether you like it or not we do our part after she does hers.” “Rtas! Our banshees are ready for your disposal!” yelled an elite from up above. “Good!” yelled Rtas. He looked at the count down and said “soon! The covenant will be finished!” roared Rtas. After he roar the other elites roared loud that it had spread to the other elites in the area in which they also roared. Tonight after high charity is ours we will go to earth and kill the traitor that started this mess. The prophet of Truth. Rtas thought. He also knew he had to deal with the flood but that wont be to difficult.


    Chapter 8

    Preparation


    In shumana’s private quarters
    Date 6/7/52
    Time 5:50

    Brock walked in the room. He wore his Gold armor. He was ready to give his life. “My holiness, I am pleased to be ready to do what I can to defend you from your enemies once more.” Said Brock with faith. The prophet looked at him and smiled. “You are very great like I had foreseen.” Said the prophet with a grin. “Thank you. Your wisdom helps me fight very well in combat.” Said Brock. “May the great journey take you to a very rich place my friend.” Said the prophet. “I shall return when we have victory!” roared the chieftain as he left. The prophet was however not alone for he had 6 jackals with shields and energy swords. 4 Brute honor guards. And 2 hunters. There will be no victory not for us or the elites but the flood. Shumana thought. He turned to see the cruisers of the elites circle the city. Brock went to the nearest combat scarab and hopped on board. He was ready to prove his skills. He had 10 combat scarabs, 200 hunters, 500 drones, 400 grunts, 120 jackals, and 10,000 brutes including the 500 brutes piloting the banshees. And the 500 driving the wraiths. And about 1,000 driving Brute Choppers. It will be a well fought fight. He thought.
    Chapter 9

    Assault on the Streets

     

    In the streets of high charity.
    Date 6/7/52
    Time 6:01

    Sitting in a tower was a covenant jackal named buck. He was a sniper posted to snipe any infantry he seen. Where are they? He thought. But the answer came from a banshee bomb that disintegrated him. Banshees started flying in and ghosts started speeding in 8 scarabs walked over the buildings and a phantom flew in passing the other vehicles. It carried char, Drake, sobek, and Rtas. All armed with energy swords and grenades. Who were they after? They were after shumana. Coming from the north was Brocks forces as soon as the banshees from both sides engaged each other. As soon as the ground infantry of both sides engaged each other and as soon as ghosts and brute choppers engaged each other. The Fight had begun. Rtas watched from above as bodies flew. And banshees crash and burn. “Commander we are near the destination!” yelled the pilot. “You know you didn’t have to join us Drake.” Said Rtas with concern. “Yeah well I now have nothing to loose for I’ve lost a wife, a child, and a friend.” Said Drake with tears rushing down his mandibles. “I know how you feel my brother. I am sorry.” Said Rtas.  The chieftain Brock was busy crushing many elites and then saw the phantom heading for shumana. He then took and unpiloted brute chopper and drove back to shumanas room with haste!

     

    Chapter 10

    The Fall Of HC(high charity)


    High charity
    Date 6/7/52
    Time 6:20pm

    They jumped out the phantom and headed inside. As they went in they killed the brute guards silent and swiftly in the hallway with cortana guiding them and closing and locking the doors behind them and once they reached the prophets door Rtas and the other elites drew their swords. They went in and the prophets guards rushed at them. Rtas sliced his way through and so did the others and the prophet started chuckling. “in the name of all those who died for nothing cause of you! Your species sentence is death!”  yelled Rtas. “You will never go to the great beyond! never!” yelled shumanas. His chair blazed red beams at Rtas. Rtas dodged the shot but it had hit Sobek and Sobek went out cold. Dead. Rtas’s anger turned to fury as he lunged at the prophet and missed. And then the prophet shot again but this time missed. Rtas jumped onto the prophets chair and stabbed him in the heart. "you... you will never achieve victory over the covenant! never!" yelled the prophet's last breath. "we shall see about that!" said Rtas as he pulls out his energy sword from the prophet. Brock rushes in and stops staring at the prophet then at him.
    his hammer was damaged when he was breaking through the doors. so he threw it to the ground and pulled out his large blade that aint an energy sword but cuts like steel. "you have killed my friend  and my teacher so prepare to die!" roared Brock as he charged at Rtas . Rtas blocked the first hit but then was knocked to the ground by the brocks punched and when Brock raised his weapon Rtas closed his eyes and whispered "i'll be joining you now father."
    then he heard a crash. he open his eyes to see Drake and brock clashing at each other with swords. "get out of here!" yelled Drake. "no i will not allow it!" yelled Rtas. 'go! leave me!" yelled Drake. Rtas looked at Drake and then realized that he has to leave without Drake whether he liked it or not. "alright! may you go to see your wife and child!" yelled Rtas as he and Char leave. Drake grinned and fought the chieftain. they kept going til Brock stabbed Drake in the leg. then Drake pierced brock in the head. Brocks bodie then lie mottionles. Drake then heard flood coming. he crawled over to something that was covered in sheets, it was a bomb. he detinated it and before it went off he though. i will see you soon brother. Flood were now coming to the battle and Rtas could see the  Grave Mind was on its way. he knew it cannot be stopped by him or anyone right now. "pull them back to the ships! pull them back!" ordered Rtas. "fall back! fall back!" yelled Char. Rtttas then saw the explosion coming from where drake was. his eyes dropped a few tears. he whispered "good bye Brother." Cortana beeped on Rtas's HUD and said "my message is near the cruiser Vivec will you still take it to earth?" "sure. you have done well and for that it shall be done!" replied Rtas. Rtas then told the cruisers ship master to send someone to pick it up. Rtas then got on a phantom and once the were near the Shadow of Intent, cortana bleeps on speaker and says "Rtas! The grave mind had sent a copy of himself and it got on the cruiser vivec along with my mesage!" Rtas now was puzzled. why would the grave mind make a copy of him-. he now already knew the answer. Earth. once on board the carrier. they departed and Rtas then checked to see if Vivec was still incontrol. no answer. the cruiser then jumped to earth through slip space. He turned to high charity that also disapeared. Rtas then barked orders that most of the cruisers to go on a search for high charity and 7 come with him to earth. with that said before the carrier and its escorts slip spaced. Rtas thought to himself high charity may have fallen but earth must not. then they slipspace to earth unknown of what will happen next. The End

    Edit:the last chapter is on now. enjoy!


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  •  10-25-2008, 2:54 AM 394162 in reply to 394161

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    DRY:

    This is my First fan fic so dont get hatting on me if it sucks and i dont really know what to do for a prologue and i kinda am doing this as a story for an english assignment so give me a break ok. and pleas enjoy if u can and reply.

    Fall of High Charity

    Chapter 1

    Uprising

     

    On board the carrier ship

    Shadow of Intent

    Date 6/7/52

    Time 12:34pm

     

    It was extremely active around the prophet’s holy space city High Charity. It was a war zone. Yesterday at 4pm was when it started the uprising of the elites. It began with the brutes carelessly beginning to assassinate the elite councilors, and then it started an all out war in the city

    and near it. That was yesterday this is now. Sitting in his chair was Rtas 'Vadum , the commander of the elites in the sector. He was watching the battle between his cruisers and the covenants. His two mandibles that are not broken closed tight. 1 day ago he was a loyal special operations commander of the covenant. Now he is second in command of the elite resistance group.

    "Commander! A brute cruiser is coming from under us! What would you want us to do?" asked an elite warrior. "is the main glass ray operational yet?" asked Rtas. "yes Commander!" replied the elite. "Fire on that cruiser! Send them beast! To their grave! " ordered Rtas. "you heard the commander! Fire!" yelled the elite major who’s Rtas's second in command warrior.

    The elite major was 1nch shorter than ras and 1 year younger. "thank you char." Said Rtas with a grin. "my pleasure my old friend" said char as he walked towards the monitor screen to view the cruiser below them burn away from the beam. Char chuckled at the sight. "stupid brutes! They should have expected that when they came under the main ray in the first place." Said char with a grin.

    Rtas sat and watched his elites roar in victory but he didn’t join them for he knew it was only the beginning. "Rtas we got a transmission from a nearby brute cruiser!" yelled an elite. Rtas looked startled that the beasts actually tried to communicate. If they were expecting mercy from us than they thought wrong! But might as well listen to their pathetic surrendering speech Rtas thought. "Put it on!" ordered Rtas.

    The screen flickered on. On the screen was a huge brute in gold armor possibly the chieftain. "This is the chieftain of the cruiser juggernaut! I challenge u and your crew to combat! on the docking bays to see whos ship will be overwhelmed first!" Yelled the chieftain. Rtas could hear the brutes in the background growl. What a fool! Rtas thought. How could a chieftain take that suicide of an action?

    If he docks his cruiser next to the carriers docking bay he would be overwhelmed by our numbers! Well thats what he’ll get for being a dumb brute. "Challenge accepted!" Roared Rtas. "you will be a tasty treat when this is over!" growled the chieftain.

    The screen flickers off. Rtas got up and left to the docking bay along with a large amount of elites. Rtas was a bit confused. Why would a brute as stupid as they were do that kind of action? Rtas thought. It didnt matter cuz he knew that his crew of 1500 warriors can defeat these animals.

    Well Besides The Large Chat Block(which i had to Fix to even quote without my eyes bleeding)

    It Was Pretty Good I Commend You for this act. I look forward to the next chapter.

  •  10-25-2008, 2:57 AM 394163 in reply to 394162

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    wow i thought i was about to get FLAMED! *getting out of the bunker*
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  •  10-25-2008, 3:00 AM 394164 in reply to 394163

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    DRY:
    wow i thought i was about to get FLAMED! *getting out of the bunker*
    People Who Flame A Fan fic Shouldnt be allowed to Stay in the forums

     

    Try to Fix it so its not a text block and ill give you... a picture of a cookie.

     

     

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  •  10-25-2008, 3:09 AM 394165 in reply to 394164

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    wonder what will happen next
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  •  10-25-2008, 3:11 AM 394166 in reply to 394164

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    *crouches slowly toward the cookie and eats it slowly. then whispers* Thanx for the cookie.


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  •  10-25-2008, 3:12 AM 394167 in reply to 394166

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    u will get another chapter or 2 in the morning but i have work on the one i turn in for my english assignment.
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  •  10-25-2008, 3:37 AM 394170 in reply to 394167

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    chapter 2 is up there if anyone want to read.
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  •  10-25-2008, 4:27 AM 394179 in reply to 394161

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    well theres 4 chapters now. Have fun. well i amgoing to bed so i cant type more tommarrow then go and hang out with my gf and then post some more chaps. night ppl
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  •  10-25-2008, 4:34 AM 394183 in reply to 394166

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    DRY:

    *crouches slowly toward the cookie and eats it slowly. then whispers* Thanx for the cookie.

    Your Welcome and the story is Just fine Keep it up
  •  10-25-2008, 11:10 AM 394243 in reply to 394183

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    just some cannical issues I noticed. your saying R'tas was on a cruiser when the first of the elites were killed when he was on delta halo with the arbiter. Plus im not sure he had that ship to begin with.

    and the jackels, drones and grunts (I wont bother with the hunters for they were with the elites for a time) were on the side of the covie loyalists.

    other wise its okay


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    "Communsim is the very definition of failure!"
    "Better dead then Red!"
    "Liberty Prime online. Weapons are hot. Objective: To liberate Alaska and destory any and all red chinese communists!"
  •  10-25-2008, 11:30 AM 394249 in reply to 394183

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    thats good. :)
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  •  10-25-2008, 12:12 PM 394258 in reply to 394249

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    its AWSOME! good job...small grammar errors but in all it was good...
    we will always remember...
    Linda-058,dud_doodoo,
    ES,Thunder,Fenix

    Ryzza,sparhawk,bacon,vigil,Rotaretilbo
    mr.grenade,ARTEMIS,Arbiter,robborboy
    BBJynne,grey101,AI,AWSOME,Felix
    Oynx,rasq',oOffensive bias,NT,TN
    Legandary Halo,Boot,Aukele,Paragon
  •  10-25-2008, 12:18 PM 394260 in reply to 394258

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    dude the story starts the day after rtas gets the carriier. and there are jackals, hunters, drones, and grunts who are on the elites side and there are jackals, hunters, drones, and grunts for the brutes. so i dont see a big issue about. unless 10 ppl start complaining i am going to keep going. and thanks laxspartan007 even though i am still in danger of getting flamed! *goes back to bunker* let the flaming begin!


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  •  10-25-2008, 12:19 PM 394261 in reply to 394260

    Re: FF Fall of High Charity

    oh and sorry for the grammer i'll try better with next chapter.
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