Um, where to begin. Punctuation is needed desperately, your grammar was off a bit, you put no coma's at the end of quotes, and the fact that you used four lines of space was a little annoying, and it just made the prologue longer than it should've been

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When the pin is pulled, Mr. Grenade is not our friend

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New story- The Resistance
http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/627177.aspx