I enjoyed reading this. It was filled with action and great descriptions, but the plot could have been better. All we read was that the Covenant could not reach the shelter, but why? Were there innocent people in there that they had to protect? Was there a valuable item they needed to protect? It would have made the story better if we knew exactly what the marines died for, and would have added a dramatic effect.

          There where a few spelling and grammar issues which could have been caught by either spell check or proof reading. You where also calling a weapon by its number, and not the name. This is not really a good thing to do in action scenes. Reading those numbers is like hitting a wall when it comes to the fluidity of the story. I did not know what weapons where being used because I do not know the weapons by their numbers so I could not picture that part in my mind.

          The descriptions where great, but could have been better in some areas. The Elite at the end just ran in and started slashing things, but with what? You never said he had an energy sword in his hand. However I did love how much detail you put into the gory parts and it really helped make the story more extreme.

          At the end of the story though, the man says he beat the Elite in close combat but he did not. The sniper is who beat him; the marine just filled him up with bullets afterwards. I do not know if this was intentional but it did not make much sense to me. All in all though it was a good read, and I highly recommend it.

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