Not much can be said about a story at such an early point in existence. However the prologue was riddled with errors which need to be resolved before any thought goes into continuing. There where many grammar issues, and very sparse spelling ones. There was also a feeling that the characters where heartless drones. The overall story lacked emotion and atmosphere which is what makes a story.

          The grammar issues caused me to re-read parts of the story to fully grasp what was going on. This is never a good thing because you want your readers to be able to just read through your story comfortably and naturally. Another widely accepted rule involves numbers below one-hundred. If the number is a two digit number you want to spell it out. This will help make your story seem more professional. You also want to consider using more vocabulary in your narrative. The lack of a diverse vocabulary made the story get dull and diluted the effect. Another thing you want to do is try to separate your dialog. This way it is easier to follow along with who is talking and you do not get confused.

          The lack of a setting dramatically dulled the intensity. You wanted to get an action packed prologue, but instead got a slew of lifelessness. A good setting will make a good story. Without the setting the story has no mood or atmosphere and is essentially dead right then and there. It will also give us more insight as to what the characters are going through and help put us in their shoes.

          The emotion really died down when describing who was talking in the dialogue. You generally used two words over and over. When the character is mad and screaming, use yelled instead of said. Adding in these diverse words will keep the story fluid and it will flow naturally between dialogue and narrative.

          Along with the lack of a diverse vocabulary was a lack of emotion. It seems like you where attempting to induce emotion by adding swear words. This just does not work and tends to be problematic. Having too much swearing is redundant and gets old fast. Try to use the swear words as you see fit, not because you think it adds emotion. Speaking of emotion, what caused the man to commit suicide? Giving us insight as to the problems this man was facing would greatly increase the intensity of the prologue.

          All in all however it seemed like a joke to be honest with you. All the mentions of April Fools Day just did not fit into the story. It was not that realistic. Another thing that did not make much sense was the man dieing with a smile on his face. He has just seen his sergeant get shot in the head, and he was just shot in the stomach, so why would he be smiling. Would he not have been traumatized by this event? It is still early in the story so you can fix all of this if you want to. Right now I would recommend fixing it before continuing because as of now it is not that good of a story.

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