Not wanting to sound like a complete ass, but I thought this was a joke at first. Once I realized otherwise I decided to look into it with an open mind and try to comprehend what was going on. There were so many things wrong with this it was not funny. Spelling, Grammar, Dialogue, the Hook, and the Plot are all horrible.

          Spelling and Grammar are essential when you are writing a story. You need to have good spelling, and good grammar. Without them you will just leave your readers with a headache instead of entertainment.

          Along with the spelling came the dialog. It was all bunched up together and made it hard to follow who was talking. I gave up after the second chapter. It was just too much for my head to try and follow.

          Even if it had good spelling there was an absence of a good hook. This hook is critical because it is what will hold the readers into the story and make them want to read more. Once you have the hook, you want to relate everything back to that hook so you keep your readers interested in your story.

          Something else which was absent was a good plot. The only thing I saw going on was a ship heading to Reach. I could not find a reason for them to go there and was completely lost. Maybe it had something to do with the spelling. You want your readers to know why you are doing something. They will get bored of just going to reach fairly fast.

          In all I would have to say only read this if you are feeling brave enough to try and comprehend the horrible spelling, grammar, dialog, lack of hook, and no good plot being started early.

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