hmm there were never this many ppl replying to a ff when i was here... it would have been nice to get some more feedback on my old ff but eh w.e i still think its pretty crappy.. but anyways.... nice story dude.. like everyone said a tad short.. so yeah like artemis its just a bit over par.. out 1-10 i would give you a 6 sry dude..i dont really care for short fan fics... but its pretty descriptive so its good :)

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