[Original Novel] Ascendancy (Chapter One Available) ~ By Wolverfrog

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  •  10-06-2009, 10:41 AM 741656

    [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Chapter One Available) ~ By Wolverfrog

    An Original Novel? By Wolverfrog? Something's messed up...

    Blurb

    After centuries of dominance, ordinary humans finally discovered a technology which would weaken the power of the magicians. In a matter of weeks, the magicians were overthrown, and replaced by a human government named the Ascendancy. The Magicians were thrown into shanty towns, and became second class citizens, unable to perform but the most menial of spells. In case the Magicians got out of hand, the Ascendancy created a cult of enforcers known as the Moderators. For hundreds of years, the Magicians lived in fear of the Ascendancy and their Moderators, the repression field technology preventing them from fighting back. That is, until one day, a latent young Magician unlocks his power, and against all the odds, is somehow not affected by the repression field technology. He is the last true magician.

    Prologue

    Dawn ran through the sewer frantically, the hurried pacing of her leather boots causing the tainted water to splash into her face. She grimaced, disgusted. Her left palm still burned from earlier, the mark on her hand glowing an emerald green. Her green eyes shone through the darkness, making her easy to spot. That wasn't good. She could hear the shouts of the Ascendancy Moderators behind her, could hear them hunting her down.


    Dawn looked behind her and threw up a hasty barrier; feeling another rush of pain as she fought against the repression field. She broke through it, gasping in agony. Still, the pain was worth it, for a moment later, a blue glimmering shield appeared, blocking off the small, human sized tunnel. It was weak, and wouldn't hold the Moderators for long, but it gave her time, at least. Placing a bloodied right hand over her beating heart, she screwed her eyes in weariness. Would she be able to keep this up all day? She was only 18, and using magic earlier had drained her strength. Not to mention the fact that the Moderators had been chasing her through the city relentlessly ever since she killed that Ascendancy official.

    The young girl clenched her fists in anger, feeling her jagged fingernails cut into the soft flesh of her hands. But more wounds to add to the many already existing. The whole situation was so unfair! The creep had deserved to die, the way he'd forced himself onto her as she was buying bread in the lower district of Verity. Not that the Moderators saw it that way. To them, a rogue magician had taken advantage of close contact to bypass the repression field and kill a defenceless official of the Ascendancy. They'd been hunting Dawn down ever since.

    The magician shook her head wearily, and looked up. She couldn't stop now. Of course, she could cast a spell of healing on herself, but trying to break through the repression field again, when she had done it so much in one day; it would be too much for her. The Moderators would find her unconscious, and make sure she'd never wake up. So instead, she bit her lower lip hard, and kept on running through the sewers. The hem of her cloak was growing heavy as it absorbed the foul smelling water at her feet. Lovely.

    Behind her now, around the corner she'd just round, she could hear the Moderators. They'd ran into her barrier, it would seem. She paused for a second; tired and hopeful, perhaps they wouldn't be able to break through the crudely erected shield.

    "Elder Hale; b*tch has created a barrier." one of the Moderators growled, and Dawn heard a punch land futilely on the shield she had made. Perhaps the wouldn't be able to get to her after all. Maybe the pain she'd experienced breaking through the field would be worth it. The next order by the Elder Moderator eradicated this hope.

    "It can't be very strong, she's tired and the field would have already weakened her magic. Tyler, set a charge on it." the one named Hale commanded. Dawn's heart dropped down to her feet. She looked around the sewer helplessly, crying. The magician forced herself to move forward, wading through the water. If she could just get outside; she could lose them in the lake.

    As she pushed slowly forward, she heard an explosion behind her, and doubled her efforts to escape. Dawn moved too quickly though, and felt herself trip on the base of her robes. She landed face first in the four inch deep water, the foul water entering her mouth. She coughed in disgust, before vomiting violently.

    Before she could struggle up to her feet, she heard splashes behind her, and turned her head in fear. There they were. The Moderators. Elder Hale towered over her, sneering. He held a small gun in his hand; Dawn didn't know the name for it.

    "Lying where you belong I see; in a puddle of filth." the Elder Moderator growled, raising his pistol. He didn't fire. Dawn shrunk away, terror on her face. The group of Moderators laughed; four men and a women.

    "Please...please..." the magician pleaded of the Ascendancy law enforcers. Her begging only seemed to make them angrier, and one of them kicked yet more water onto her tear stricken face. She spluttered.

    "Please what? You killed one of the Ascendant; Magician." Hale spoke the word with disdain. "You know what the punishment is."

    She shook her head in denial, her voice cracking with fear.

    "No. No! Please, he was harassing me, I acted in self defence. Just let me go, or throw me in prison. I demand a trial! You have to give me one!" Dawn cried out, hysteric.

    "We don't have to do anything for you. Other than give you release from your unholy life." a young man who looked very much like Elder Hale spoke coldly, shaking his head. The young magician felt her chest rise and fall quickly, as she took shallow breaths.

    "Don't kill me! I've done nothing wrong!" Dawn shrieked, gathering the last of her will and throwing it at the Moderators, who sidestepped the weak attack with ease, laughing in mirth.

    "Oh, but you have magician. You have." Hale breathed, his gaze frosty and unforgiving. The Elder Moderator adjusted his gun so it was aimed at Dawn's head. She raised her arms to protect herself, knowing that the bullets would pass through them as easily as the cut through the air. The magician closed her eyes in acceptance, praying to God. The Ascendancy claimed that God didn't care for her kind. They were wrong, she knew it. Dawn would go to heaven like everyone else. She was a magician, not a Demon.

    She peered through her arms to see Hale's finger resting on the trigger. The Elder Moderator of the Ascendancy smirked, and then fired.


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  10-06-2009, 1:22 PM 741697 in reply to 741656

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    i'm gonna play the role of Aardy for a second:
    A few grammar mistakes, but none too awful.

    overall, in interesting read. i know there is still much to build upon and explain, but my ONLY word to you is "caution."

    make sure you have (well, you might already have) good reason to have certain things: like technology to block a magician's power while still having a "primative" gun seems the tiniest bit unbalanced, BUT you might already have explained that through the rest of the main plot.

    cheers, though. i'll keep reading.


    New story out! Halo: Below the Brine
    (it's the best story you're not reading!)
  •  10-06-2009, 1:46 PM 741718 in reply to 741697

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Footbutt:

    make sure you have (well, you might already have) good reason to have certain things: like technology to block a magician's power while still having a "primative" gun seems the tiniest bit unbalanced, BUT you might already have explained that through the rest of the main plot.

    It's Steampunk, like Northern Lights, or as you Americans know it as, The Golden Compass. They're really advanced in some ways, but in others, not so much.

    Thanks for reading though. I appreciate it. Stay tuned.


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  10-06-2009, 2:05 PM 741728 in reply to 741718

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Wolverfrog49:
    Footbutt:

    make sure you have (well, you might already have) good reason to have certain things: like technology to block a magician's power while still having a "primative" gun seems the tiniest bit unbalanced, BUT you might already have explained that through the rest of the main plot.

    It's Steampunk, like Northern Lights, or as you Americans know it as, The Golden Compass. They're really advanced in some ways, but in others, not so much.

    Thanks for reading though. I appreciate it. Stay tuned.

    gotcha. well . . . not really, but i understand about your explanation. i'm not familiar with any of those things, but i do have the gist. 


    New story out! Halo: Below the Brine
    (it's the best story you're not reading!)
  •  10-06-2009, 2:42 PM 741754 in reply to 741728

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    you know wolf, I would love to co-write a book with you, I suck at writing, but I love making ideas for things and whatnot, if you are interested sent me a friend request

    Rocking Thunder



    kiunk:
    go drown in a fire

  •  10-06-2009, 2:48 PM 741760 in reply to 741754

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Encrypted AI:

    you know wolf, I would love to co-write a book with you, I suck at writing, but I love making ideas for things and whatnot, if you are interested sent me a friend request

    Rocking Thunder

    Sure thing, but with this, along with my FFs, I don't know if I'd be able to fit a co-fic in.


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  10-06-2009, 2:50 PM 741763 in reply to 741760

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Wolverfrog49:
    Encrypted AI:

    you know wolf, I would love to co-write a book with you, I suck at writing, but I love making ideas for things and whatnot, if you are interested sent me a friend request

    Rocking Thunder

    Sure thing, but with this, along with my FFs, I don't know if I'd be able to fit a co-fic in.

    I never said you have to, but when you can just send me a message



    kiunk:
    go drown in a fire

  •  10-06-2009, 4:50 PM 741802 in reply to 741763

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    can some one tell me who this OB character is?

    Dark Reign, A Fan Fic of sorts, Check it out
  •  10-06-2009, 5:14 PM 741816 in reply to 741802

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    AudiA4:can some one tell me who this OB character is?

    Offensive Bias, an amazing writer.


    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
  •  10-06-2009, 5:17 PM 741820 in reply to 741816

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Why are you discussing OB in this thread Audi? Either comment on Ascendancy or go somewhere else.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  10-06-2009, 6:34 PM 741866 in reply to 741820

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    I find it to be a nice deviation from a Halo filled Library, these new fantasy stories have really sparked interest. Keep it up.
    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
  •  10-07-2009, 9:28 AM 742394 in reply to 741656

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Chapter One - Jared

    There was a loud, official sounding knock at the door, rousing Jared from his troubled sleep. He sighed, climbing out of his rough, cheap bed with it's thin mattress, and throwing on an old dirty gown, with patches visible. He stopped by a mirror to check his appearance. Tussled, brown hair, a layer of stubble, and bright green eyes. He brought up his palm to flatten his hair, and saw the flash of his dull green palm. All the traits of a magician. And yet he wasn't one.

    Jared sighed. He was one of the few born into magical families who had all the potential to be a magician, yet never unlocked their power. Of course, that didn't matter to the Ascendancy, in their eyes he was a hell begotten wrench. In reality, he had never so much as healed a bruise.

    There was a knock again, which irritated Jared. Who could be wanting to visit him at this time in the morning? The young man took a look at the rusty clock nailed into the wooden wall. Nearly noon. Okay, maybe not that early. Still, who would want to visit him at all? He was no one important, just another Prosaic, one who was a magician and yet wasn't a magician.

    "All right; I'm coming!" Jared yelled at whoever was standing outside the door.. He stooped low as passing through the low doorway of the shack, entering the small, box like hallway. The Prosaic fumbled about with his key, and opened the door. He blinked.
    Stood outside with grim expressions were two Moderators of the Ascendancy. What were they doing at Jared's shack? He couldn't have committed a magical crime, even if he wanted to. And the only reason the Moderators came calling was when a magical crime had occurred.

    The first moderator was male, and had short, blond hair, and blue eyes. He wore a high collared long coat, the uniform of the Moderators, with a shirt and pants made of a material Jared had never seen before.

    The second was female, with long, jet black hair which fell past her bare shoulders. She too wore a long coat, with subtle, feminine differences. She must have been freezing standing in the snow, and the expression she wore was just as icy as she must have felt.

    "Jared Meriwether?" the male Moderator asked solemnly. Jared narrowed his eyes.

    "Who wants to know?" Jared challenged, sticking his chin up defiantly at the other man. The Moderator stared into his green eyes with an expression of disgust.

    "Don't play the big tough guy with us Magician." the woman retorted. Jared clenched his fists..

    "I'm not a Magician, I'm a--" the young man was interrupted.

    "Prosaic, we know. But you're still s-blam!-. I'm Arden. My colleague is Caetlin." the man finished for him. Jared's gaze turned frosty.

    "This conversation's over." he said, beginning to close the door on the two Moderators. A boot wedged in the door, preventing him from doing so. Jared opened it again, sighing.

    "Listen, I haven't done anything wrong. Nothing magic related anyway." the prosaic insisted; looking behind the two agents of the Ascendancy. They had a horse and carriage with them, and expensive one. Jared could barely afford to keep the donkey in the back garden alive.

    "We know you haven't. But your sister did. She's dead, Jared." Caetlin spoke coldly, devoid of any sympathy. The words were like a blow to Jared's heart, and he gasped, ashen faced. The young man collapsed against the wall, eyes wide open.

    "Dawn? Dead? How did-- " Jared cried out in anger, his mind blurry. The Moderators smiled. Smiled! Bastards.

    "She was killed last night in the underground sewers." Arden explained, his face a blank slate.

    "Killed? By who? I'll kill them!" Jared shouted in his stupor.

    "Oh, I don't think you will, young Meriwether." Arden breathed, his eyes narrow. "We killed her."

    Jared opened his mouth, dumbstruck, before the words hit home. His sister, his baby sister, killed by these creeps.

    "Why did you--why would you ever..." Jared whispered, tears welling in his eyes. He was staring into the faces of his sister's killers, and couldn't do anything about it.

    "She killed a member of the Ascendancy. With magic. We hunted her down, and punished her. It was as simple as that. We have her body in the back of our carriage." Caetlin explained, and Jared looked at her with disbelief. How could they be so emotionless about the situation? How could they be so cold?

    "Why--why did she kill an Ascendant? How did she use magic strong enough to kill with the repression field active?" Jared asked, his voice breaking. He felt like he was about to throw up. For the first time since arriving, the Moderators seemed uneasy.

    "She was in. . . close contact to the man. That's how she bypassed the field." Arden blurted out, a little nervously. Jared narrowed his eyes.

    "Close contact? You mean--?"

    "She was being rap*d, young Meriwether, yes. But still, she used magic to kill another, and that is against the law." Arden reinforced. Jared's eyes widened in disbelief.

    "Rap*d? But, then she obviously would--how could you still kill her knowing why she'd done it?" Jared questioned, looking at her sister's murderers. It made it all the more painful he couldn't do anything about it.

    "Because that's our job. Good day Jared, the Ascendancy shall be holding a funeral at the end of the week at the local chapel. You should be grateful." Caetlin spoke briskly, and with that, she shut the door, leaving the young prosaic on his own in his shack, shell shocked.

    It was still sinking in. Dawn; his wonderful, understanding baby sister Dawn. His last living relation. Dead. Killed by the Moderators. Jared was all alone in the world now.

    He walked into the small kitchen, which doubled as a dining and living room. Reaching into the top cupboard, he brought out a bottle of grog, and poured himself a pint into a wooden flask nearby, sloshing it down. The alcohol didn't make the pain go away.

    Jared sat at the small wooden table of his kitchen for hours. He was meant to be in the lower district right now, working in the factory. Screw the job, nothing mattered to him any more.

    How had this all happened? Jared remembered Dawn, yesterday, leaving the house to go get some groceries. She's asked him if he wanted anything, he'd declined. Jared had been a little worried when she hadn't come home last night, she was by no means the strongest magician, and even the strongest were weakened by the repression field.

    The repressions field. The bane of every magician, and the saviour of every ordinary human. Hundreds of years ago, magicians had controlled the country Verity, with the commoners in fear of them. The ancient mages were powerful; unstoppable. They could halt bullets, kill with a word, affect events from a great distance. The Commoners, as the Ascendancy was known back then, were the lower class.

    All that had changed when one day, a commoner genius had invented a technology which could weaken the power of a magician to such an extent that it was nearly impossible for them to heal a flesh wound. Needless to say, in but a few weeks, the commoners overthrew the reduced magicians, casting them into poverty, and creating their own Government; the Ascendancy. Soon after that, they'd installed a gigantic version of the repression technology which effected the entire land; which was named the repression field.

    So now the Ascendancy was in power, with magicians being the s-blam!- of the land. They'd created a branch of the Government named 'The Moderators', who's job it was to hound the magicians and deal out punishment as they saw fit.

    The situation wasn't improving, for the magicians at least. And certainly not for Jared. As one of the Prosaic, he couldn't cast a single spell. His parents had been killed by Moderators in the last Magicians uprising ten years ago, leaving him at the age of 13 to look after his little sister Dawn, who was only 8 at the time.

    They'd survived though, just. By sticking together. And now, to have her taken from him like this; it was horrible. Jared felt like he'd let her down. Hot tears began to stream down his cheeks, falling into the wooden mug on the table.

    The Ascendancy was funding a funeral for Dawn. Bastards. How could they kill her, and then pay for her funeral as if everything was fine? No doubt the Moderators would be attending the funeral, feigning sadness. They'd make sure she was buried according to their standards; with a knife through her still heart.

    There was another knock at the door. Jared growled, and picked a knife up from near the sink. If it was those Moderators again, he'd sink the knife into the murderers. Jared stood up, knife in hand, and opened the door roughly, preparing to bring down the knife on whoever had knocked.

    He stilled his hand when he saw who it was. Not one of the Moderators. Sage Larkin, the priest of the Magician's Ghetto. The Sage blinked, amusement clear on his face.

    Larkin was old, one of the oldest Magicians in the Ghetto. He was a weak magician, in terms of power. He was wise though, and a close friend of Jared's. He'd practically been a second father to Jared and Dawn.

    "Expecting the tax collector?" Larkin asked wryly. In other cir-blam!-stances, Jared would have laughed; it was common knowledge that he and the tax collector shared no love. As it was though, Jared's eyes moistened, and he collapsed to the floor, weeping. He felt the elderly Sage bend down, and place a warm hand on his shoulder.

    "There there my boy, it's okay. I saw those two Moderators before. What did they want? You're not in trouble are you?" Larkin questioned, and Jared shook his head.

    "Not me; Dawn. She's dead. They killed her." the young Prosaic quivered, drying his eyes. It felt good to tell someone else. Understanding lit up Larkin's face.

    "Ah; I see. Why don't we head inside and have a cup of tea, put the kettle on? I find that usually calms me down."


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  10-07-2009, 4:49 PM 742626 in reply to 742394

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    good chapter. i enjoyed it. are you writing this on the fly? or have you gotten a real good direction on where to go? it seems you've got things covered: when you introduce something new, you give a brief synopsis, but not too short or long, so bravo on that....

    *holds up bowl*
    more please.


    New story out! Halo: Below the Brine
    (it's the best story you're not reading!)
  •  10-07-2009, 5:57 PM 742665 in reply to 742626

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    I've got a few documents with ideas for storylines and characters. Thanks for reading, although I think I should have made the moderators colder to be honest. I will in later parts.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  10-07-2009, 6:18 PM 742676 in reply to 742665

    Re: [Original Novel] Ascendancy (Prologue) ~ By Wolverfrog

    Woah, hold up. I just want to clarify (I am interested in reading by the way);

    Are we able to post stories we've written here that aren't Halo?


    Current Fan Fictions in the Library:

    ODST: Hellbound

    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

    Halo: Archangel
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