Needing help/suggestions

Last post 08-31-2009, 11:38 AM by Spartan R41. 5 replies.
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  •  08-29-2009, 5:03 AM 709939

    Needing help/suggestions

    Alrighty guys and gals, I've hit writer's block. Yay fun, right? I can't get anywhere on my FF, ODST: Hellbound, even though I know where I want to go with it. So I'll post what I have here, and then hope for some supportive suggestions on where the story should go. Here's the most recent, unpublished chapter:

    ODST: Hellbound, Chapters 4 (partial) and 5 (partial):

    “Alright Helljumpers- and Marines- We’ve had a rough day. I know that you’ve all gotten acquainted with one another and from the way it looks that it didn’t go so well, but that’s going to have to be put aside. We’ve got orders to head for Chicago by Warthog. Our first objective is to aid Marines at Zone 08. The Tactical Autonomous Robotic Defense System testing facility has been overrun by Covenant forces, and we’re to help take it back.

    “Secondly we have a mission straight from ONI, which is why we’re being joined by Lt. James. The Covenant have been told about some artifact called the ‘Key of Osanalan,’ and they’ve attacked Cleveland in search of it. After we clean up the TARDS facility, we’re to hop a Pelican to Ohio and do what we can there.”

    The Captain looked over the squad, seeing no confused faces. That was good; less explaining to do. “Those are our orders,” he said after a moment, “We head out at 05:00 on the 9th. Take this time to recuperate and relax, but I want no fighting between you all. Is that clear?”

    “Sir, yes sir,” The squad rang out, some less enthusiastic than others.

    James nodded, “Dismissed.” The squad went back to their activities. Richards and Riviera continued their Moons game, while Jan joined Hackett and Declan for a drink.

    Hays watched the Captain leave, then glanced to the squad. They seem to be fine now, she thought to herself, I’m sure they don’t need supervision. The kid has rank, after all. She downed her Golden Orbit before following Eric out of the Recreations room, leaving the squad to their downtime.

    Chapter 5

    November 9, 2552/Ft. Manning/Springfield, Illinois/04:23 CST

    The squad was active before 04:00, already suited up and prepping their Warthogs. They had three M12 Warthogs; enough to fit the entire squad and the two accompanying Elites. Esa and Nosu had been informally interrogated by Colonel Harbison, and had given separate but matching reports on the incident in St. Louis. Though she would never publicly admit it, the Colonel shifted most of the blame for the partial destruction of the Gateway Arch onto the Elites.

    Hackett was busy loading MedGel into the Warthog’s armored trunks. They had enough space to fit several rounds of ammo for the squad, as well as seven MedGel canisters each. She slid the supply drawer back underneath the turret platform, securing it in place. “We’re all set ta go, Sarge,” The Corporal said, wiping her brow, “We’ve got enough meds ta bring one-a us back from the dead.”

    “Well let’s hope it doesn’t come to that Corporal,” Hays smirked, “How are we on ammo?”

    “Full clips each and then some, twenty-four rockets and plenty of sniper rounds. We’ve got enough to take on a full Covenant army.”

    “Music to my ears, Corporal,” Hays said, “Report to Captain Rowas and Lieutenant James in the Armory.” Dana ordered, still upset about ONI nosing in on their operations- though it didn’t show on her face.

    “Yes, ma’am,” Hackett saluted before heading off to the Armory. Hays checked the fuel levels on the hydrogen engines, and then headed to the Motor Pool’s office to authorize the three M12’s for use.

    Rowas looked up as Hackett passed through the door. “The ‘hogs are ready to go sir,” she reported. The squad moved out, the Elites joining them as they arrived at the Warthogs. The aliens didn’t look too happy- most likely due to Colonel Harbison.

    “Your commander is an honor-less wretch,” Esa growled to Eric, “She would place the entirety of the war on our shoulders.”

    Eric glanced at the Zealot, a faint grin tugging at the corner of his mouth, “Well I’ll agree with you on her manners, but your Covenant has been slowly wiping us out.”

    “This is true, but we were always told that your kind fired first.” The Elite rebutted.

    “And you always believe everything your Prophets told you?” Esa remained silent, nodding in acknowledgement of the truth behind Eric’s words.

    “Richards, you’re gunning for me and Esa you’re riding shotgun. Riviera and Hackett, you’re with Hays. Nosu and O’Connor, you’re with James. Load up,” the Captain ordered, “We’ve got a long trip ahead of us.”

    The squad headed to the Motor Pool. “Shotgun!” Hackett shouted, grinning at Riviera as she hopped into the Warthog’s side seat.

    “Oh, you suck,” Riviera sneered, “I got a busted leg still, and you want me jumping around on the turret?”

    “Yeah, well who’s gonna heal your ** if I get shot up there?” Hackett pointed out with a smirk.

    “D*mn, you gotta point.”

    While Jan climbed into her the Captain leaned on the vehicles side. “You certified to drive one of these, Lieutenant?” he teased.

    “Well I stole one when I was ten, sir,” she replied snidely.

    Eric shook his head. “Look, I know you’re not getting the best greeting here—“

    “You think?”

    “—but we are a tight squad.” The Captain finished with a stern edge. “We’ve been through a lot together, and I can guarantee you that the squad won’t easily take orders from you.”

    Jan gave the Captain a confused look. “What, you think I want to take over?” when Eric didn’t respond she continued, “Look, I’m in this for one reason; to do my part. If the Navy wants to promote me up to a Lieutenant just because I’m some ‘wonder kid,’ then that’s their business.

    “I know I didn’t earn the rank, and so does the squad. I’m not going to pull rank for every tiny little decision to undermine the Sarge; I really could care less what you and your squad do, I just file reports.”

    James nodded, heading to his ‘Hog. ”I hope you also know how to fire that rifle of yours, Lieutenant.”



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    ODST: Hellbound

    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

    Halo: Archangel
  •  08-29-2009, 6:35 AM 709970 in reply to 709939

    Re: Needing help/suggestions

    Whenever I get writers block, I usually either read what I've wrote so far again, or switch over to a different story until the block goes. That's why I've got three ongoing fan fics.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  08-29-2009, 2:50 PM 710389 in reply to 709970

    Re: Needing help/suggestions

    Author: Just take a look at OB's thread and request help there!
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  •  08-29-2009, 7:36 PM 710704 in reply to 710389

    Re: Needing help/suggestions

    Thank you for spreading my thread. Have a virtua-cookie :D
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  •  08-31-2009, 11:37 AM 712523 in reply to 710704

    Re: Needing help/suggestions

    i'll admit, i got a good laugh at reading your acronym: TARDS.


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  •  08-31-2009, 11:38 AM 712524 in reply to 712523

    Re: Needing help/suggestions

    It's not mine. It's the actual facility name, and was most likely a joke by Bungie.

    Current Fan Fictions in the Library:

    ODST: Hellbound

    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

    Halo: Archangel
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