[FF] True Sangheili (Part 20 is available!) ~ 3 May

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  •  07-25-2009, 12:45 PM 668169 in reply to 668007

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Personally, I believe this is an average story, it's okay. Everything is adequate to me
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  •  07-25-2009, 12:47 PM 668174 in reply to 668169

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    It will get better Grenade. All my stories start off adequate. I dislike jumping into the action. I felt a bit...meh doing that in Insurrection.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  07-25-2009, 12:49 PM 668177 in reply to 668174

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Wolverfrog49:It will get better Grenade. All my stories start off adequate. I dislike jumping into the action. I felt a bit...meh doing that in Insurrection.
    Okay then 


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  •  07-25-2009, 4:08 PM 668421 in reply to 668177

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    I like it, when will there be more?

    Get on my horse
  •  07-25-2009, 9:32 PM 668704 in reply to 667159

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    thats preety good better than some other fan fic ive read its niceto finally see others appreciate the grunt as much as i do those little methane breathing badasses

     

  •  07-26-2009, 9:34 AM 669116 in reply to 668704

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Part two - Warrior

    "That plasma rifle at your belt, Sorran. Bring it out." Zharn commanded, and Sorran obeyed, grasping to delicate looking blue handle.

    "Excellent." Zharn congratulated as if the Sangheili Minor had actually accomplished something. "Now, I'm sure you know how the plasma is channelled, being a Scribe."

    "Magnetic coils embedded within either side of the weapon direct the plasma into a desired path." Sorran recited from a text he had read once in a book about Covenant weapons.

    "Good." Zharn simply said, and strode over to Sorran, looking at the way he held the rifle. He nodded appreciatively. "Now, the plasma rifle is capable of sustained fire, but the hotter it comes, the more inaccurate it is too. Keep that it mind. The most talented warriors fire short bursts, then take cover whilst it cools down."

    "I understand Major." Sorran replied, inclining his head.

    "I would certainly hope so. Now, look forward. I have set up deployable shield barriers in the distance. Your challenge for today is to bring every shield down with your rifle. Should one pop up before you are finished, you must start again. Begin."

    Sorran brought the plasma rifle up at arms length, took aim, and fired. There was no recoil whatsoever as three super heated bolts of plasma surged out of the tip of the rifle, and crashed into the foremost shield. The shield rippled, and turned a deep red. The Sangheili Minor fired again, and the shield depleted.

    "Well done." Zharn said. "Now you must take down the other nine, before the first can pop up again.

    Sorran concentrated, and managed to take down a further five. But just as soon he took the sixth down, the first one popped up again. Sorran swore, and Zharn chuckled. The Minor waited a minute for them to all pop up again, and once they had, attempted the challenge again. He got seven this time, but once again, the first regenerated.

    "This is impossible!" Sorran cried after the seventh try.

    Zharn laughed now, openly.

    "Yes Sorran, it is impossible. With one plasma rifle anyway. This task was so you would learn to efficiently use the rifle, rather than accomplishing it."

    Sorran looked at the crimson Sangheili, shook his head, and lowered the rifle to his side.

    "You've had me waste my time and temper upon an impossible task?" The Minor asked in disbelief. "That's low Zharn."
    The Major merely laughed once again, and told Sorran to holster his rifle. Zharn drew out from his person two sharp, steel blades. Sorran recognised them as holding the shape of the Energy Sword, reserved usually for only the highest ranking Sangheili. Zharn passed one over to him.

    "Zharn, I don't think I'm allowed to use this." Sorran protested, holding out the blade as if it were a deadly plague. Zharn looked puzzled for a second, then his face displayed recognition.

    "Nay, do not worry Sorran. What you are holding now is not a pure energy blade, but a metallic representation of it, crafted with the same element we use to create Hunter shields. Even the lower ranking Sangheili are permitted to use it. Whilst you may be hard pressed to cut through shields with it, it is most effective against anything else. I will teach you how to handle it."

    Over the next few hours thus, Sorran learnt the correct usage for the blade, uppercuts, lunges, parries, and as the sun began to set, he felt he had become a lot more proficient at fighting.

    "You've made remarkable progress today." Zharn praised, nodding as he did. "Of course, it is never too hard to train a Sangheili to fight: deep within every one of them is a warrior. But yes Sorran, you have exceeded my expectations. Tonight, the Deacon of this outpost is holding a sermon. I usually attend them. Will you be coming?"

    Sorran thought for few moments, then nodded.

    "I'd be glad to Zharn. But first, is there anywhere we can get food for our bellies? I have not eaten all day."

    Zharn chuckled, and beckoned for Sorran to follow him.

    "I think we can find something brother."

    *****

    "Praise be the Forerunners, divine as they are!" The Unggoy Deacon leading the sermon called, and the assembled group repeated the line.

    Sorran took a quick look around the room. Nearly everyone on the outpost was here, be them Unggoy, Kig-Yar, Sangheili, or Brute.

    Sorran didn't like the Brutes. Very few Sangheili did. They felt that their position was being usurped by the savages, and the the Prophets showed them more favour than they should. They were a lot like a pack of the wolves native to Sangheilios, in that they worked together to kill, and constantly relayed information to one another. They were more like animals than people.

    As we were all praying on our knees, Sorran felt closer to the Gods than he had ever felt before. He never usually attended sermons, except when a friend would drag him along, and so this was a new experience to him.

    As the Deacon was handing out bread from a basket, a religious custom for which the meaning escaped Sorran, the doors to the makeshift chapel burst open, and everyone turned to see a black armoured Sangheili stand in the door way, dripping wet from rain. He must have not had his shields active.

    Zharn stood up, and addressed the Sangheili.

    "Ahkrin! I did not expect you to be back so soon, what news have you for us?"

    Ahkrin as he was called strode down the red, gilded carpet in the chapel, wheezing as he did so.

    "Forgive me my brother, I have just ran over sixty miles without rest. Allow me a moment to catch my breath."

    A single phrase was being muttered around the room -- Stealth Sangheili.

    Sorran had heard of the Stealth Sangheili before; they had a vital, but reluctant task. Rather than fight in battle, their jobs were to observe the enemy, and report back. Many Sangheili thought this to be a task without honour. Even so though, it was needed.

    Ahkrin grabbed onto a nearby pole, and breathed short and shallow for a few moments, then stood up.

    "Humans are on the way here. With an army to rival ours." Ahkrin relayed to Zharn, prompting much chatter, especially amongst the Grunts.

    "Then we shall crush them like the bugs they are!" Zharn cried inspiringly, clenching his fist as he did so. Ahkrin shook his head.

    "You speak too soon brother." The black armoured Sangheili replied. "This is not just a normal human attack; I spied Demons with the army too."

    The clamouring escalated, and even the Sangheili were exchanging nervous looks now. Sorran knew why, he had heard tales of these Human Demons back when he lived upon High Charity. Apparently, they were over 10 foot tall and could smite a Sangheili with a single touch. They were supposedly invincible.

    "Enough!" Zharn shouted, and the room was instantly silent. "We shall not flee from these infidels, nor the Demons they collaborate with! We shall stand, and fight, and win. How long will they take to arrive?" The Major once again directed at Ahkrin.

    "I cannot say for sure brother, but they had tanks with them, as well as larger, even slower vehicles. I think we have a few days to prepare ourselves." Ahkrin replied.

    "Then prepare ourselves we shall! I shall contact the Immortal Repentance, asking for reinforcements. The rest of you, suit up, and be ready for a fight."


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  07-26-2009, 10:09 AM 669127 in reply to 669116

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    This = win.
    Spess mehrens
  •  07-26-2009, 4:40 PM 669553 in reply to 669127

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Dang, good work lol. The suspense is killing me! I can't wait to read about the fight :D.

    Read my FF! Human-Covenant War: Without The Great Schism. It's an FF based upon how the war would have ended up if there was no Great Schism. There are a lot of twists and there is a lot of action!
  •  07-28-2009, 3:31 PM 672014 in reply to 669553

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    This is indeed a wonderful FF, and I'm interested to see where it goes. You mentioned trouble coming up with a title. One that seemed to fit for me would be "A Warrior's Blood", as the Minor is a new warrior, and blood is sacred to the Sangheili.

    Some problems that I saw;

    • Instead of the date in the Prologue being 2552, it would be the "9th Age of Reclimation" for the Covenant.
    • Grunts would be accustomed to fire, as Balaho has naturally occurring pillars of fire. 
    • The Elites wouldn't really be concerned for the Grunts
    • Spartan-II's are generally 6-8 feet tall, averaging around 7. 10 feet is a big person, Elites themselves only average 8'6", 7'2" while hunched over.
    Other than those, the story was great, and has my interest.

    Current Fan Fictions in the Library:

    ODST: Hellbound

    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

    Halo: Archangel
  •  07-28-2009, 4:02 PM 672091 in reply to 672014

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Spartan R41:
    • Instead of the date in the Prologue being 2552, it would be the "9th Age of Reclimation" for the Covenant.
    • Grunts would be accustomed to fire, as Balaho has naturally occurring pillars of fire. 
    • The Elites wouldn't really be concerned for the Grunts
    • Spartan-II's are generally 6-8 feet tall, averaging around 7. 10 feet is a big person, Elites themselves only average 8'6", 7'2" while hunched over.

     

    1) Yes, you're right. I shall change that.

    2) If that's true, than why in Contact Harvest does Dadab feel thankful for the warmth the Covenant brought with them? Also, fire on a methane rich planet?

    3) Sorran is like the Arbiter in that aspect, one of the more caring Elites. Zharn is your typical Elite.

    4) Haha, yes, I knew this. It was an exaggeration on the Elites' part, you know how tales get told again and again, each time adding something new? I thought about adding that they could shoot laser beams from their visor, but decided against it. Instead I put that they could smite a Sangheili with a single touch.

     Anyway, thanks for reading it! I really do appreciate it, and the fact that you gave suggestions was great. Thank you.


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  07-28-2009, 4:27 PM 672134 in reply to 672091

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Wolverfrog49:
    Spartan R41:
    • Instead of the date in the Prologue being 2552, it would be the "9th Age of Reclimation" for the Covenant.
    • Grunts would be accustomed to fire, as Balaho has naturally occurring pillars of fire. 
    • The Elites wouldn't really be concerned for the Grunts
    • Spartan-II's are generally 6-8 feet tall, averaging around 7. 10 feet is a big person, Elites themselves only average 8'6", 7'2" while hunched over.

     

    1) Yes, you're right. I shall change that.

    2) If that's true, than why in Contact Harvest does Dadab feel thankful for the warmth the Covenant brought with them? Also, fire on a methane rich planet?

    No, what I meant was that they wouldn't be afraid of it. I know pillars of fire seem odd, but that's what the Bestiarium said.

    3) Sorran is like the Arbiter in that aspect, one of the more caring Elites. Zharn is your typical Elite.

    Ah, I see. Not uncharacteristic, it just struck me as odd.

    4) Haha, yes, I knew this. It was an exaggeration on the Elites' part, you know how tales get told again and again, each time adding something new? I thought about adding that they could shoot laser beams from their visor, but decided against it. Instead I put that they could smite a Sangheili with a single touch.

    Ah, I gotcha; classic fishing tale? You could add how they're 'Faceless, soulless monsters."

     Anyway, thanks for reading it! I really do appreciate it, and the fact that you gave suggestions was great. Thank you.

    Not a problem. I'd be interested to see what you think of ODST: Hellbound, my FF.


    Current Fan Fictions in the Library:

    ODST: Hellbound

    The Interrogation of Ellen Anders

    Halo: Archangel
  •  07-28-2009, 4:35 PM 672149 in reply to 672134

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    I love it. GRUNTS FTW!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Tank > Banshee
  •  07-28-2009, 6:25 PM 672217 in reply to 672149

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Short, but hopefully sweet.

    Part Three - Besieged

    "Sorran! We need to destroy their turrets! Lead a squad of Unggoy and destroy them, quickly!" Zharn shouted down at me from the rooftop, where he was currently engaged fighting three humans in black armour, with blue mirrored visors. Sorran nodded, and ran over to a squad of Grunts, signalling for them to follow him.

    The humans were cunning, Sorran had to admit. Whilst they had all thought that the human army was still a few hours off, as their scouts relayed, the scum had dropped in these armoured soldiers via metal pods which fell from the sky. It had surprised everyone, and the humans had the advantage, for now.

    Sorran ran down a side passage which would emerge on the other side of the heavy turrets which were pinning the other Covenant forces down. The Unggoy followed, armed with needler rifles.

    As the Sangheili Minor ran, he encountered two humans, who quickly shouted unintelligible words in response to his appearance. Before the first could draw out his weapon, Sorran fired four rounds from his plasma rifle into the humans head, and the soldier fell to the ground

    Sorran's shields flared as the other human had drawn out his weapon, and fired. Bursts of fire echoed from behind the Sangheili's back, as the Unggoy sprang into action. The human cried out in pain as the thin, crystalline shards of a needler punctured through his skin. A moment later, the shards exploded, splitting the armoured soldier into multiple sections.

    Sorran looked down at the bodies with melancholia, so much life, wasted. His first kill too. Whilst most Sangheili remarked that the first kill was always the most exhilarating, Sorran only felt sick. What right did he have to judge whether or not another living creature should live. He would have stayed there all day, contemplating this terrible act, had the lead Unggoy not spoken.

    "Noble one, we must take out those turrets or many shall fall!" It squeaked, and Sorran looked up, nodding. Yes, he had a duty to the Covenant. Grief was not an option.

    "Yes, you are right of course. Come, we must hurry on." Sorran replied, taking care not to step on the bodies as he moved through the tunnel. The Grunts had no such inhibitions, and happily trampled over the still corpses.

    They emerged out of the tunnel a moment later, into the bright light. gunfire echoed in Sorran's ears, and he looked up to see four humans operating turrets. Sorran signalled to the three Unggoy, and they began firing. The humans swore in shock and clambered off the turrets, firing. One round caught a Grunt before he knew what hit him, and he went sprawling to the ground. It made Sorran angry; a warrior had died under his command. Sorran drew out his metal blade, and leaped onto the ledge, stabbing the sword into the nearest human. It fell to to floor, convulsing.

    The rest of the humans panicked and began firing upon Sorran, but the rounds simply bounced off his shields. Sorran brought the blade down on the neck of another human, and the head hit the ground, accompanied shortly after by the limp body. The other two were drawing back now, and one tripped over. Sorran quickly pounced on the screaming savage, and ended it's life.

    The final soldier threw down it's weapon, and began to run. Sorran wasn't about to let it escape. He drew back the blade, and then threw. The sword arced towards the human, and lodged in it's back. The black armoured figure fell, and Sorran walked over and picked up his sword.

    A voice sounded in the Sangheili Minor's ear, and he recognised it as belonging to Zharn.

    "Excellent work Sorran! You have struck a mighty blow! These humans were no match for our warriors, we are disposing of the rest with ease. Come, return to the Forerunners above, what is that?"

    I felt it too. A tremor in the ground. The Grunts below squeaked in terror and looked at the ground. What was it? An Earthquake? No, there was a noise too. Turning slowly, Sorran looked out towards the horizon. What he saw terrified him.

    "Tanks!" Zharn shouted over the intercom. "By the prophets, get down Sorran!"

    Sorran tried to run. But there wasn't enough time. He was standing on the very edge of the outpost, and so he was targeted first. Before he could even open his mouth to cry out, an explosion smashed into the ground beside him, fired from one of the tanks in the distance. His shields were of no use, as the heavy round punched straight through them. The blast sent him flying, down to the rough ground below, ten metres from the Outpost gates.

    His vision flickered, and he realised with dread he was blacking out. Zharn was calling faintly in his ear.

    "Sorran! Sorran...Sor-"

    The world went quiet as Sorran's hearing gave out, and his eyes shut close.

    He opened them in what seemed like only a few moments, but already human soldiers were within the walls of the outpost. The world went black again.

    Sorran's sight restored, blurry and fuzzy. This time, the buildings in the distance were in flames. Sorran tried to move his head, but couldn't. In the corner of his eye a figure caught his attention. This human stood taller than the rest, garbed in green, full body armour.

    "Demon..." Sorran managed to whisper, before he blacked out for the final time.
    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  07-28-2009, 6:47 PM 672234 in reply to 672217

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    pretty good, and thats rare coming from me since i hate nearly all fan fics churning out of this site. a few grammar errors, but besides that, a good story =)

    he better not be a pushover, i want to see him beat down a spartan, and tear his bloody head off afterwards =D


    Originally Anguished Prophet, but they thought it would be best to cut out the end of it.
  •  07-28-2009, 7:22 PM 672283 in reply to 672234

    Re: [FF] True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one)

    Good job wolverfrog
    A grenade need not speak, for when he blows up, a blast speaks for him
    The assassin returns in Klone 666 2.0
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