The Final War (Chapter 7 Part 2)

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  •  06-24-2009, 7:06 PM 632965 in reply to 632887

    Re: The final war

    Its anti something...     but not air

    You'll find out in a few chapters


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    I make beef stew.
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  •  06-25-2009, 9:15 AM 633525 in reply to 632965

    Re: The final war

    no that gun is ani't get the hell out of my astroid belt (AGHAB)


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  •  06-25-2009, 1:58 PM 633865 in reply to 633525

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    Chapter 3:

            When Captain Anthony came to the command deck the next morning, he found Admiral Neher waiting for him. Admiral Neher was sitting in Anthony's command chair, and turned around when he heard Anthony come through the door. Anthony hated how Neher was flaunted his superiority whenever he could. He saluted Admiral Neher, but Neher didn't bother returning it. "There has been a change in plans, Captain Anthony," Admiral Neher said.

            "What plans?" Anthony asked.

            "Well, we were going to transport the cannon to Reach via a cargo ships, but there won't be any coming near this area for over a month," Admiral Neher replied, "We can't order one to come here faster, because it is a two month slipspace jump to Reach. So I decided to simply leave the cannon where it is, and have you take it there. You won't be missing anything here, seeing as Smith is going to get off at Reach, and take his research team will be coming with him."

            "Do you think that the ship will be able to jump properly with the cannon attached?" Anthony asked. He knew that slipspace had strange properties, and didn't want to risk the Destiny getting damaged.

            "Unlikely," Admiral Neher replied, "Smith assured me that that would be least of our worries."

            "If that's the least of our worries, then what is the most?" Anthony asked, noticing how Neher looked nervous upon saying the word worries.

            "Smith said that there are many things about the cannon he still does not understand," Admiral Neher said looking away for a moment, "He said that the cannon was attached to a large underground system of... structures. He doesn't know exactly what they did. His hypothesis is that they had some way of controlling and focusing the beam. In addition to that, there was a dome right near the base that contained a large amount a coolant material. Smith fears that without this massive coolant tank, the gun might overheat. We know that the gun works, but the question is if it will be as efficient as it should be. It’s none of your worries though."

            "When do you want the ship to leave?" Anthony asked.

            "Tomorrow morning," Admiral Neher said, "Smith needs to 'pack up some things'." Neher stood out of the chair and walked toward the door, "Have a good day, Captain Anthony."

            "And you too, Admiral," Anthony replied.

            "Oh, Anthony," Admiral Neher said when he reached the door, "When we get to Reach, you will be taking another research team back here to study the fixtures that used to be connected to the cannon. Plan on staying here for a while, because Smith said that there was a whole lot of work to be done down there." With that he walked out of the room.

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            That night, Anthony stood on the observation deck, looking out across the planet. Adam, the navigations officer walked up next to him. "Isn't it a little late to be up, Captain?" he asked, "You need to get some rest."

            "We got two months of cryo coming," Anthony replied with a grin, "I'm going to get all the rest I could ever want."

            "Ya, ya," Adam said, looking out at what Anthony was looking at, "What do you find so interesting?"

            "I'm just thinking," Anthony said, "There are only ten forunner excavations on the planet. I would have thought there would be more."

            "Why?" Adam asked, "Most planets have about seven."

            "The forunners used to live here," Anthony said, "I would imagine a planet where such a great civilization lived would be covered in buildings. But all we've found is a few structures. Do you think we're missing anything?"

            "I guess you’re right," Adam replied, "There is so much we've learned from the forunners, it’s a little hard to believe that we're missing most of it. Good night Captain." Captain Anthony stayed there ten minutes after Adam left, then went to bed.

     


    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-25-2009, 3:41 PM 633994 in reply to 633865

    Re: The final war

    i liked it but a few erorrs
    American railroads.....killing hobos scince 1826
  •  06-25-2009, 3:51 PM 634015 in reply to 633994

    Re: The final war

    I must say this fan fic is very good. But I recommend posting the chapters in your first post, easier for people to find them
    Design a Faction

    http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/795978.aspx
  •  06-25-2009, 5:35 PM 634155 in reply to 634015

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    Shadow Titan:I must say this fan fic is very good. But I recommend posting the chapters in your first post, easier for people to find them

    Ok, I'll do that. Thanks for the tip. I'll just post saying its updated whenever it is.

    I'll write another chapter tomarrow morning and post it.


    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-25-2009, 6:14 PM 634197 in reply to 634155

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    I have a few problems with this... How is Reach inhabitable? Why would they plan to re-colonise one of the furthest colonies in the Outer Rim? Doesn't make sense to me. Oh and, a Ship Making Factory? Not a way a soldier would talk. It would be a Shipyard.
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  06-25-2009, 6:32 PM 634215 in reply to 634197

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    go easy on him OB
    American railroads.....killing hobos scince 1826
  •  06-25-2009, 7:11 PM 634250 in reply to 634197

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    Offensive Bias:I have a few problems with this... How is Reach inhabitable? Why would they plan to re-colonise one of the furthest colonies in the Outer Rim? Doesn't make sense to me. Oh and, a Ship Making Factory? Not a way a soldier would talk. It would be a Shipyard.

    1. Why not? It was almost completely glassed over, but that doesn't mean its not inhabitable.

    2. They haven't recollonized it yet. It is just a research facility. They will eventually, but I don't see any reason why they wouldn't. Its a planet that people can live on. Why pass it up?

    3. Don't judge me. I'll change it just to make you happy.


    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-26-2009, 1:45 PM 634734 in reply to 634250

    Re: The final war

    update!!!
    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-26-2009, 2:44 PM 634790 in reply to 632471

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    I like it, but the cleaning process of the Planet has some flaws, I was planning on using a similar idea in FF, if you would like to see what I mean check it out when Chapter 4 is posted.

    I'm going to use actual science, mostly because I know alot about this particular subject. But just removing the toxins won't decrystallize the minerals, which means technically it would just be broken shards of crystallized minerals, which is still inorganic, and dangerous to life.


    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
  •  06-26-2009, 5:24 PM 635092 in reply to 634790

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    Would you beleive me if I told that the cleaning machine, also did that?

    cause I wouldn't.

     

    BTW there will be a chapter of epic awesomeness tomarrow. Get yourself excited, for the truth shall be revealed!


    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-28-2009, 11:49 AM 636950 in reply to 635092

    Re: The final war

    Chapter 5 update is complete

    Sorry its late, I was busy yesterday.


    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-28-2009, 11:20 PM 637992 in reply to 636950

    Re: The final war

    bump
    When life gives me lemons,
    I make beef stew.
    Gt: Mr Sticky100


    New FF: The Final War
    I would appreciate comments/critisism
  •  06-29-2009, 12:22 AM 638007 in reply to 631886

    Re: The final war

    Pretty sweet on the new chapter, sorry I was a little busy elsewhere.

    Except you spelled Sentinels wrong, that's pretty much it.


    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
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