[FF] Halo 3: Insurrection (COMPLETE)

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  •  04-07-2009, 9:16 AM 539792 in reply to 539788

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    lol been up since 2 30 this morning...lol wrote two chapter this morning

    perhaps u should allow me to help you with action seens

    i dont want to brag or anything but i thnk i may have a gift for such things

    as for philisophical mumbojumbo thats all u man haha ;D

    do not stop this story however, ur the first AND i mean the first to nail a halo 3 epiloug with such tenasity where the story is flawlessly created with underlying plots and a structual balance...(stops to catch breath) sorry bout that i tend to rant ;D



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  •  04-07-2009, 9:23 AM 539797 in reply to 539792

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    That would be great Socom, if I write a part with action in it a could perhaps Pm it to you and you could check it over? I don't know, whatever you feel like doing.

     Thanks for saying that, it's always nice to be praised. There is a much better Epilogue than mine on Bungie.net, in the Gallery forum, but he's only released it there, so meh. Thanks.


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  04-07-2009, 9:25 AM 539799 in reply to 539797

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    well ima let my FF sit for awhile and see whats happens so feel free to PM over any action seen questions ;D now if ull excuse me i gotta go to school

    lol

    ill be back on in six hours ;D



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  •  04-11-2009, 7:02 AM 544412 in reply to 515593

    Re: [FF] Halo: Insurrection (Part Six now up)

    A hefty bit of dialog, and not too much description. But there will be next chapter. Enjoy. Oh yes, at some point I shall edit all these into the first post. Sorry if it's inconvienent at the moment.

    Part Seven: Revelation

    Thel clambered over the rocky pass which linked the wilderness and the Citadel of Vadam, and arrived at the giant gates guarding it's citizens. As he neared the giant, ancient structures, two Elites stopped him, Majors.

    "Halt there stranger. What be your business in this holiest of Citadels?" One of them asked, his voice gruff.

    Thinking fast, the Arbiter responded.

    "I was attending morning worship brother, and it seems I forgot to thank the Deacon for his excellent sermon. My honour could not bear it if he thought me insolent."

    This was good enough for the guards, amongst the Sangheili, one's honour was a symbol of their power. One gave the signal for the gates to be opened. Just as Thel was about to pass through, the guard placed a hand on his shoulder, stopping him for a second.

    "Wait as second, your face looks familiar. Have we met?"

    "Nay brother, you must be mistaken." The Arbiter turned his head, and, shaking of the Elite's grip, entered hurriedly through the port cullis.

    He took a long look at the magnificent street before him. As brilliant as the day he had left. The gleaming marble reflected the violet rays of the sun, casting an iridescent glow upon the passers by.

    How easy it would be, the Arbiter thought to himself, to rejoin with his race and fall back into the daily routine he had frequented back when he had lived here, all those years ago. But that would be wrong. He owed that much at least to the Spartan.

    Saran didn't live far from where Thel was currently walking. If he could remember from his days as Kaidon, his old friend's manor was in the Council district. He wondered if Saran was still upon the Council, back in the day he had been a valuable asset at times to Thel, getting him out of many situations. The only reason he didn't sit at his side as a High Councillor was due to the fact that the Prophet of Regret, upon visiting once, had taken an immediate dislike to him.

    He set off slowly, basking in the warm glow of the burning star above him.

    **************

    "What the hell are you talking about Light bulb?" Johnson asked gruffly.

    "As I have just told you Sergeant, we are going to rescue John."

    Avery was surprised.

    "And how the hell is it that you know his name, eh? He never told anyone that, took weeks of coaxing on my part for him to even give me his serial number, never mind his name."

    Giving an ethereal laugh, the monitor drifted around, as it did when about to launch a lengthy explanation.

    "I know great many a things Avery. For aeons I have watched from across the stars, following the events of your race. I have seen countless empires fall, only to be replaced by an even stronger one. I have seen people killed, both innocent and evil, old and young. I have heard men and women pray for a better life, mourners weep as their loved ones pass away."

    "So what are you, like a God?"

    This brought about another chuckle.

    "God is but an organic concept, Sergeant, neither right or wrong. But, I suppose, to a certain degree, I have been watching over mankind. Indeed, if it so pleases you, think of me as a God.

    "At first, with malicious intent, I watched, and waited. I was still angry at the masters who had imprisoned me, and had no love for their legacy. But eventually I softened, saw the capabilities and potential you had. Love, loss, anguish, hate; these are but a few of the emotions I came to understand in the millennia I spent imprisoned, in fragments. And I realised I shouldn't have betrayed my masters as I had, I shouldn't have listened to the Gravemind, shouldn't have helped him."

    "What does this have to do with John?" Avery asked.

    "Everything." Came a simple word. "But for now, we must hurry, if we are to reach him in time".
    The Monitor again glowed blue, and the nexus of light once more engulfed them. In a split second, they were gone, leaving the peaceful vale as tranquil as ever.

    *****************

    Two loud knocks aroused Saran from his late slumber. He was not a particularly religious being, so had no desire to wake up at the early time a strict worship regime required.

    "I'm coming!" He called down the stairs as two more knocks sounded. Throwing on a silk robe, he quickly descended the marble steps, and opened the door. He was greeted by a surprise.

    "Hello Saran, it's me, Thel...may I come in?"

    *****************

    Saran and Thel were seated in the main lounge, reclining back in the two gravity chairs in the room. They were each drinking a piping hot mug of tea, one from one of the many crates of the human beverage which had been shipped to Sanghelios during the peace. It tasted good after the long journey.

    "So, mighty Arbiter, how have you been doing?"

    Thel smiled, it felt good to relax with an old friend and just be himself.

    "Like you don't know. On the walk here I've seen countless posters depicting me with a price upon mine head."

    "I mean what exactly has been going on whilst you have been away from us? We've all heard the Bards sing of your deeds, but how many are true? Did you really face down a one hundred foot tall Demon and live? And what of the Prophet of Truth? The Temples, constantly trying to stay in a good light, say that as he was about to activate The Ark, the Ancients let forth a bolt of pure energy which incinerated him where he stood? Is this also true?"

    "Nay my dear friend, nay. Merely exaggerations of much lesser acts. Although it is true that I met with the Demon, and he is...was, a good man. As worthy as any Sangheili I have met."

    "You mean he can't turn warriors to stone with a quick glance."

    "He was but a man Saran, a great one."

    Saran took another sip of tea, and reclined back further in his chair.

    "So, now what will you do?" He asked.

    "Well, I was hoping I might stay here for a short while, reminisce about old times."

    Puzzled, Saran sat up.

    "I meant about the Demon, Thel."

    "I don't see what you mean. The Demon is long dead."

    "You mean you haven't heard?"

    Thel placed down his tea on the floor, and also sat forward.

    "Heard what, dear brother?"

    "The Demon crashed. Here, on Sanghelios! In Vadam of all places! They took him into custody, A'trinr's guards. He was going to be used as a bargaining tool with the Humans, but then High Councillor K'zath took over, and sentenced him to death. In two days!"

    "Surely you are lying!" Thel had stood up by now, and looked poised to run straight down to the dungeon.

    "It's the truth. A public execution is to be held, where K'zath will go through the usual process of asking him to beg for mercy, and then kill him."

    Saran turned around to pick up his steaming cup.

    "But, there is nothing we can do." He turned around slowly. "Everything must die sooner or later."

    "I cannot abandon him Saran. I can't." Thel said slowly, remembering how many times the Spartan had saved his life.

    "Why not?"

    "I can't explain it. Just believe me on this."

    Saran gave a long sigh.

    "Well, we can't do anything for now, the Demon is kept under lock and key all day by no less than five dozen Honour Guards."

    "Very well Saran, I shall wait until the day of the execution. But then I will free him, even if my own life must be forfeit."

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  04-11-2009, 9:31 AM 544477 in reply to 544412

    Re: [FF] Halo: Insurrection (Part Six now up)

    Amazing story!!!!

    I don't care about what anyone else says. I would go through 10 pages of crap to read this story!! GOOD JOB!! keep it up


    Even the greatest warrior quails in fear at my name
  •  04-12-2009, 3:15 PM 545802 in reply to 544477

    Re: [FF] Halo: Insurrection (Part Six now up)

    dont worry about puting them all on the first page, you get used to searching for them.

    anyways great so far :P


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  •  04-12-2009, 3:46 PM 545816 in reply to 525162

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Wolverfrog49:Yeah, I started spacing things out a while ago, as I found it harder to read bunched together text on the internet rather than in, say, a book. Sorry for the angry esque comment before Socom, but you've gotta admit, you do tend to praise no fan fic but your own. And I suppose that's okay, I'm just used to the Gallery forum on Bungie, where us writers stick together, offer tips, give praise when needed, form private groups. I was sort of naive to expect the Libary to be the same.

    He praises mine... At least... I think so. I've been thinking about joining Bungie.Net. But, I have heard bad things about those Forums. Apparently, there are noobs everywhere.


    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  04-12-2009, 5:20 PM 545908 in reply to 545816

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Offensive Bias:

    Wolverfrog49:Yeah, I started spacing things out a while ago, as I found it harder to read bunched together text on the internet rather than in, say, a book. Sorry for the angry esque comment before Socom, but you've gotta admit, you do tend to praise no fan fic but your own. And I suppose that's okay, I'm just used to the Gallery forum on Bungie, where us writers stick together, offer tips, give praise when needed, form private groups. I was sort of naive to expect the Libary to be the same.

    He praises mine... At least... I think so. I've been thinking about joining Bungie.Net. But, I have heard bad things about those Forums. Apparently, there are noobs everywhere.

     

    Oh my, yes, in every dark, festering corner of it. But you do get little gems every so often, The Gallery and the Septagon are sane enough. The best feature of it is private groups though, it's nice to be in a forum soley comprised of Fan Fiction writers, or Forgers, things like that. If you do join though, remember this. Never, ever, go in the Halo 3 forum. A part of you will wither and die. Anyway, here's Part Eight.

    Part 8 - Judgement

    Two days later...

    "Demon! Wake up, it's time."

    An escort of Elite Honour Guards were descending down the steps to his cell, garbed in full golden armour. They were there to take John to his death.

    "No last meal?" John asked, confident as ever, not worried by what lay before him.

    One of the Elites sneered, and deactivated the barrier. Making sure his brothers were behind him, he moved into the room and cautiously attached energy manacles to his wrists, holding him in place.

    "I hope you won't struggle Demon. It would tarnish the little honour you possess."

    He was led quietly out of the cell, and slowly ascended up the staircase. Flickering torches on the walls lit the way. It was all very medieval looking.

    It seemed that John's time was up. His only wish now was to go out with a bang.

    *********

    "Please Thel, there must be another way." Saran pleaded to the Arbiter, as the great Elite prepared to leave for the execution hall.

    "Nay brother, there isn't, I must do this. I'm sorry." Came a calm reply.

    Thel Vadam was garbed in ceremonial Sangheili armour, white with silver t-i am not good with computer!-s, and an intricate headpiece. It was the traditional attire one wore for such an event.

    "Then let me come with you!" His friend pleaded for the fifth time. Thel let out a long sigh.

    "I could not in good conscience allow you to risk your life on the behalf of me Saran, you have a good life here, don't throw it away so carelessly. Fear not, if I and the Spartan make it out alive, we shall come here before departing."

    Saran paled noticeably, his face lit by the dim candle on the mantelpiece.

    "The Demon? In my house? But, Thel, I-"

    "He is not a cyborg Saran, nor a Demon. He is a man with a great heart, and as powerful a warrior as any of our kind."

    A long, awkward pause followed, and both the Elites could think of nothing to say. Finally, Saran broke the silence.

    "Thel, I would like you to take my sword with you. It has been passed down through my family for generations, and it is an ancient and divine weapon, hand crafted by a skilful forger, much more powerful than the ones they mass produce in the factories these days."

    Saran walked over to a display case in the corner of the room, and slowly unlocked it. He bent down, and picked up a metallic, curved device.

    "Here," The Elite said, passing it gently over to the Arbiter. "It has saved my life on many occasions, may it do the same for you."

    "Saran...I don't know what to say..." Thel whispered, marvelling at the fine crafting of the weapon. He traced the runes on the side with his long, tapered finger.

    "Through battle and hardship, this blade shall find it's mark, if thy heart is pure..." He translated out loud.

    "Treat it well Thel, and it shall do likewise to you."

    Holding the blade firmly in his hand, the Arbiter activated it. Suddenly, with a sharp, sliding crack, a beam of pure violet light emerged, hanging in the air like some lit up angel. The hum it made filled the room with joy.

    "Thank you Saran. I know how difficult it was for you to part with this."

    "It was nothing. Now go, I'm sure your friend needs help, his execution is in five hours, after all."

    "Goodbye Saran, you've been such a good friend all these years."

    "Don't get me started off Thel, just go." The Elite replied with a dismissive wave. Both knew that this might be the last time they saw each other.

    "Farewell."

    Thel left through the back door, and made for the Citadel.

    *************

    A large crack of light shot through the air of the Elite structure, and with a large bang, Sergeant Johnson and Mendicant Bias fell to the floor.

    "That took a bit of effort. The further you get from a teleportation matrix, the harder it is to travel." The Monitor said, drifting off the floor.

    "Where are we now?" Avery asked, taking a good look around.

    "About five miles west of the Great Citadel of Vadam, where John is being held. To be precise, we are inside a factory of sorts.

    Johnson took a cigar from his belt, and began chewing it. He was dismayed to find out he only had seven left, barely enough to last him the week.

    "Oh yeah? And what kind of factory is it?" He queried.

    "My analysis indicates that we appear to be inside a Scarab factory, one which produces the mining models."

    "A Scarab? Are there any that are functional?"

    The light around the Monitor pulsed with increasing frequency, as it scoured through the records it had hacked into.

    "One seems to be working, a few corridors away. It seems like there are no hostile units around it either, other than Engineers. Ah, my masters created their species a long time ago, back in the golden age. It is good to see them still around, further existence of the Forerunner's legacy."

    "You think we could take it?" Johnson asked the Monitor.

    "I believe we could Sergeant. Why? Do you have a plan in mind?"

    Avery smiled knowingly.

    "You could say that Light bulb. You could say that."

    "Then follow me, I shall lead you to the vehicle."
    They moved around a twisting, confusing corridor, occasionally hearing an Elite bark out an order.

    "So." Johnson said as they ran along. "Why exactly are the Elites the bad guys again?"

    "No time for that now Sergeant, the execution is in less than five hours."

    Johnson gave a grunt of acceptance, and followed without further comment. Soon, they reached the Scarab. Five Engineers hung in the air. Johnson raised his battle rifle to shoot them down.

    "Wait Sergeant, there is no need to resort to violence."

    "But they're gonna raise the alarm!" He protested.

    "Just let me talk to them" The Monitor spoke, as he drifted off to their level.

    Mendicant made a series of pulses, and after a few seconds, the Engineers responded with what seemed to be joy. They moved around the Monitor, clapping happily with their long tentacles. After a few more pulses, they seemed to give recognition to a command, and began to descend down to the Scarab, and vanished down below to the control area.

    Johnson hopped aboard.

    "What was all that about?" He asked the Monitor, who seemed happier than usual.

    "Both I and the Engineer's ancestors are constructs of my masters, so we got along fine. I managed to convince them with little effort to help you man the Scarab. They'll be loyal to you now."

    "Well ain't that nice?" Johnson mused, walking down to the control room. The Engineers were working away at the console. One made a series of motions, and suddenly, the Scarab came to life.

    "Are you ready Sergeant?" Mendicant queried.

    "As ready as I'm ever going to be." Came the reply.

    ***********

    The Arbiter arrived in the hall, and mingled in with the rest of the crowd. Up on a pedestal, he could see the new Kaidon, K'zath, sitting eagerly, awaiting the execution. To the right of him was a High Councillor. The left seat was still empty, no one had been found to fill in the vacant seat yet.

    Patiently, Thel waited for the Spartan to appear. That would be when he would strike.

    ***********

    John was led further up the corridor, and eventually, reached a large door. An Honour Guard marched stiffly over to a console, and with a hit of a button, the door slid open. With an needed shove from one the Elites, John was tossed out into a large Colosseum like structure. Up high, he could see High Councillor, or Kaidon K'zath smiling smugly down at him.

    Judgement day had come.


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  04-12-2009, 5:31 PM 545922 in reply to 545908

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Wolverfrog, can I say that at first, I got a bad impression of you. But after seeing this, those feelings have vanished. You are truly worthy of the Library and I wish you the best of luck on this FF, I know I will be reading it. The only things I ntoiced wrong were about one spelling mistake in every chapter. Nothing major. I also nominated you for FF of the month.
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  04-12-2009, 9:03 PM 546181 in reply to 545816

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Offensive Bias:

    Wolverfrog49:Yeah, I started spacing things out a while ago, as I found it harder to read bunched together text on the internet rather than in, say, a book. Sorry for the angry esque comment before Socom, but you've gotta admit, you do tend to praise no fan fic but your own. And I suppose that's okay, I'm just used to the Gallery forum on Bungie, where us writers stick together, offer tips, give praise when needed, form private groups. I was sort of naive to expect the Libary to be the same.

    He praises mine... At least... I think so. I've been thinking about joining Bungie.Net. But, I have heard bad things about those Forums. Apparently, there are noobs everywhere.

     a little slow arnt we OB? me and wolve are good chums now ;D

     



    FFTS

  •  04-12-2009, 9:05 PM 546185 in reply to 546181

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Socom427:
    Offensive Bias:

    Wolverfrog49:Yeah, I started spacing things out a while ago, as I found it harder to read bunched together text on the internet rather than in, say, a book. Sorry for the angry esque comment before Socom, but you've gotta admit, you do tend to praise no fan fic but your own. And I suppose that's okay, I'm just used to the Gallery forum on Bungie, where us writers stick together, offer tips, give praise when needed, form private groups. I was sort of naive to expect the Libary to be the same.

    He praises mine... At least... I think so. I've been thinking about joining Bungie.Net. But, I have heard bad things about those Forums. Apparently, there are noobs everywhere.

     a little slow arnt we OB? me and wolve are good chums now ;D

     

    But I thought we were... Good chums?!?!?! JK.

    So Socom, new chapter up of my FF. I'm a little sad no one commented on it :(

     


    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  04-12-2009, 9:06 PM 546187 in reply to 546185

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Offensive Bias:
    Socom427:
    Offensive Bias:

    Wolverfrog49:Yeah, I started spacing things out a while ago, as I found it harder to read bunched together text on the internet rather than in, say, a book. Sorry for the angry esque comment before Socom, but you've gotta admit, you do tend to praise no fan fic but your own. And I suppose that's okay, I'm just used to the Gallery forum on Bungie, where us writers stick together, offer tips, give praise when needed, form private groups. I was sort of naive to expect the Libary to be the same.

    He praises mine... At least... I think so. I've been thinking about joining Bungie.Net. But, I have heard bad things about those Forums. Apparently, there are noobs everywhere.

     a little slow arnt we OB? me and wolve are good chums now ;D

     

    But I thought we were... Good chums?!?!?! JK.

    So Socom, new chapter up of my FF. I'm a little sad no one commented on it :(

     

    haha i shall read but u gotta read mine first! all ive seen from u was spam! lol

    i am disapointed u didnt nominate me...perhaps i will be next month ;(



    FFTS

  •  04-12-2009, 9:08 PM 546192 in reply to 546187

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Socom427:
    Offensive Bias:
    Socom427:
    Offensive Bias:

    Wolverfrog49:Yeah, I started spacing things out a while ago, as I found it harder to read bunched together text on the internet rather than in, say, a book. Sorry for the angry esque comment before Socom, but you've gotta admit, you do tend to praise no fan fic but your own. And I suppose that's okay, I'm just used to the Gallery forum on Bungie, where us writers stick together, offer tips, give praise when needed, form private groups. I was sort of naive to expect the Libary to be the same.

    He praises mine... At least... I think so. I've been thinking about joining Bungie.Net. But, I have heard bad things about those Forums. Apparently, there are noobs everywhere.

     a little slow arnt we OB? me and wolve are good chums now ;D

     

    But I thought we were... Good chums?!?!?! JK.

    So Socom, new chapter up of my FF. I'm a little sad no one commented on it :(

     

    haha i shall read but u gotta read mine first! all ive seen from u was spam! lol

    i am disapointed u didnt nominate me...perhaps i will be next month ;(

    I would have nominated you last month. If it means a lot to you, I'll change my vote? Lol.

    Spam? Where? *Hides Spam*


    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  04-12-2009, 9:10 PM 546197 in reply to 546192

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    holds ADVERTISMENT in OB's face

    oh missing something? lol



    FFTS

  •  04-12-2009, 9:44 PM 546266 in reply to 546197

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Socom427:

    holds ADVERTISMENT in OB's face

    oh missing something? lol

    Oh... That Spam? I thought you meant the *Voice changes to American* All brand, delicious Wal-Mart brand of Spam! *ADVERTISE*

    Socom, you'd better appreciate the fact that I have quoted all of your chapters, and I am correcting all of your errors and writing things I liked in them. You'd better thank me for it. It's taking me forever.


    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
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