(FF)Ghost Squad

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  •  10-16-2008, 9:21 PM 388220

    (FF)Ghost Squad

                                                       

    [EDIT] I see this story is a epic fail, so I will be writing a new one with the same name but different plot 

    Prolog

    Jackson rushed to the wall as a plasma motar screamed through the black sky into his squads postion. He rallied Marcus,Larkin and Jones, but Miranada and Ben were killed on impact. Another motar hurled above their heads and into one of the other ODST squads drop zone.

    "Jackson status report!" a voice said in his Comm. "Sir!, Two KIA, and Steves squads down!, and Motars are pinning the squad down!" he yelled over another motar shot. "Echo Squadron is en-route to the Wraiths postion!, hang tight!" the voice roared again in the Comm. "Jones! get your sniper and head upstairs!,"Jackson ordered and then turned to Lark and Marcus "You two! with me!" he said as he kicked the door down and went inside. Marcus slung back his BR55 and broke the window, allowing him good accuarcy. Larkin cocked his M7S and proceeded to the other side of the window, breaking that side too.

    "Sir, brute squad with buggers inbounds!" Jones yelled form upstairs. Jackson sighed and cocked his own BR55 "This is going to be a long day.." he said as he went upstairs...

    Chapter 1-Dropzone 101

    Jackson got to the 2nd floor and saw Jones with a sniper, firing at the brute squads, at a opening in the room. He slide to the wall as spikes ran through the opened wall. "Anything new? He asked as he grabbed his BR55 form his side and began to suppresse the brute squads.

    "No wraiths, but I spotted a phantom inbounds to us..." He answered as he sniped a brute minor. Jackson shot a few burst rounds into a brutes head destorying its shields "How long we got?" Jackson said. "'Bout..... three or four minutes.." Jones estimated, and held back agansit the cover of the wall as he reloaded.

    "Brutes trying to flank us!" Marcus yelled form bellow. "I'll take care of it!" He yelled back and flung the BR55 agansit his back. He began to sprint to the otherside of the room where a broken window stood, but the house shook and he triped. "Marcus report!" He screamed as the house rumbled again. "Phantoms!, they brought the big guns!" Marcus said as Jackson got to the window and saw another phantom. "Larkin! help me on the other side!" He ordered and he threw a grenade at an appoarching brute squad. A brute cheiftan dropped out of a phantom and pointed his finger at Jackson. Suddenly a group of what they call "buggers"(drones) came out of the Phantom and at Jackson. "Larkin!, upstairs!" he yelled as he managed to drop three of the drones, and told Jones to turn around. Larkin arivived with his M7S and sprayed a fury of bullets into the drones.

    "Jackson, another squad is en-route to your postion, LZ clear yet? asked a voice in the comm. A drone almost got to Jacksons face if it hadnt been for Larkin who shot it with his M7S. "Uhh, no sir, were justing getting started" he replied as he slammed another magazine into the rifle and took postion.

    "Sir?, should I head back downstairs?" asked Larkin. "Yea," he said as he cocked his rifle "And tell Marcus to meet me up here, I got a plan....


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  •  10-16-2008, 9:23 PM 388228 in reply to 388220

    Re: Ghosts...

    cough cough "knock off of the warrior heir or something like that" cough cough
  •  10-16-2008, 9:27 PM 388238 in reply to 388228

    Re: Ghosts...

    Well it was...different.
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  •  10-16-2008, 9:30 PM 388250 in reply to 388238

    Re: Ghosts...

    pretty good
    we will always remember...
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  •  10-16-2008, 9:53 PM 388305 in reply to 388250

    Re: Ghosts...

    cool,

    This kid is gonna be a hero someday.......i think(kid from the story)


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  •  10-16-2008, 9:55 PM 388307 in reply to 388305

    Re: Ghosts...

    sweet cant wait to read more

    Give me more rawr!

    sorry about that forgot my medication


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  •  10-17-2008, 9:50 PM 389181 in reply to 388307

    Re: Ghosts...

    new chapter


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  •  10-19-2008, 12:25 PM 390286 in reply to 388220

    Re: Ghosts...

    Chapter 2 is up..
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  •  10-19-2008, 12:53 PM 390296 in reply to 390286

    Re: Ghosts...

    It was okay...I think you need to put some more detail into your chapters.  Was this your first FF?

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  •  10-19-2008, 12:55 PM 390298 in reply to 390296

    Re: Ghosts...

    Spartan_Warrior:
    It was okay...I think you need to put some more detail into your chapters.  Was this your first FF?

    I dont think it was. It was like bias said different


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  •  10-19-2008, 12:57 PM 390301 in reply to 390286

    Re: Ghosts...

    looks GREAT!
    we will always remember...
    Linda-058,dud_doodoo,
    ES,Thunder,Fenix

    Ryzza,sparhawk,bacon,vigil,Rotaretilbo
    mr.grenade,ARTEMIS,Arbiter,robborboy
    BBJynne,grey101,AI,AWSOME,Felix
    Oynx,rasq',oOffensive bias,NT,TN
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  •  10-19-2008, 1:00 PM 390305 in reply to 390298

    Re: Ghosts...

    Darth Yam Head:

    Spartan_Warrior:
    It was okay...I think you need to put some more detail into your chapters.  Was this your first FF?

    I dont think it was. It was like bias said different

    Well, it defenently wasn't the greatest thing I've ever read, but it was semi-entertaining, I guess.



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  •  10-19-2008, 1:15 PM 390311 in reply to 390296

    Re: Ghosts...

    Spartan_Warrior:
    It was okay...I think you need to put some more detail into your chapters.  Was this your first FF?

    Non-ODST FF. my other one failed when my checker went missing and I started playing the LFFs. So then i couldnt care for my FF so i made a non-related ODST or basicly anything else thats in the UNSC Corps FF


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  •  10-20-2008, 4:11 PM 391172 in reply to 390311

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    Re: Ghosts...

    ... I like it. You should try to fix your spelling/grammar. You miss spelled some words wrong repeatedly. But it was a pretty good story so far, keep it up.

    P.S. His ability is accuracy.


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  •  10-20-2008, 4:29 PM 391201 in reply to 391172

    Re: Ghosts...

    I dont have a checker =(

    also new chapters are up


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