Pretty good chapter, Sanchez. Although, I have to say, Sanchez (the character) isn't too good at inspiring speeches...
I only saw one error, when they are talking about Zeus. Michael complains about the deployment and says,
"And we don't even no if the Covenant is even gonna show up? Geeze!"
'no' should be 'know'.
Other than that, good chapter. I'm not quite sure that the bit about Jonathon was put in well, it didn't quite flow well. If you had continued with more explanation of Sanchez's past it would have worked fine, though.
Good work, Sanchez. Keep it up.
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