i'll read it

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Yay! I figured out the name change, also, I like the story, keep it going

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You get hit with a heavy object.
-2 DXT
-5 STM
-200 INT
You are dead.

lol.

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[url=http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/255446.aspx]The Great War[/url]Ch.5 is up
[url=http://www.halowars.com/forums/224551/ShowThread.aspx#224551]Caba's Journey[/url]Done
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Omega 505: Enforcer to the Corleone name:

Yay! I figured out the name change, also, I like the story, keep it going

just curious what do you guys think the story is? Want to know if i'm getting the whole story across 

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A troubled 18 yr. old who ran away to th army to escape his parents.

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[url=http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/255446.aspx]The Great War[/url]Ch.5 is up
[url=http://www.halowars.com/forums/224551/ShowThread.aspx#224551]Caba's Journey[/url]Done
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hmmmm okay that's around there i'll hint some more into it in chap. 2

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Part of chapter 2 is up

going to take a break see ya later 

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another part of chap. 2 is up not sure about it though

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i'm sorry for what is it now...posting four times in a row but i need ideas to help this continue.

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Not sure I can help much with ideas, but reviews I can do.

Excellent story, I like the way you convey to the reader Lewis' feelings, past experiences, etc. without losing any quality in the story. I have trouble doing that. You're doing good, keep it up.

Like I said, I don't have any ideas for it, but I'll let you know if I think of any.

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Officialy offline as of April 4 Australian time.

wow thanks

another part is going up this afternoon 

i'll still take any suggestions or opinions 

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Mr. Bacon:

wow thanks

another part is going up this afternoon 

i'll still take any suggestions or opinions 

No problem. Looking forward to the next addition.

Like I said, I'll let you know if I think of anything to add.

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Officialy offline as of April 4 Australian time.

a little tid bit is up

more will be put up later when i find the right wording for them 

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some more is up

i will gladly accept any suggestions, advice, opinions etc. 

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another bit is up

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