[FF] Halo 3: Insurrection (COMPLETE)

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  •  05-15-2009, 3:04 PM 589553 in reply to 589129

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Wolverfrog49:

    Yeah, sounds good. Shame about Finding Family though.

    I'm just writing the next part of this, hopefully it'll be good.

    bassically every chapter will take a week...lol see i go through and add the main points

    then surrounding detail

    character detail

    actoin sequences

    then go back for vocanulary wording

    then key phrases

    it all looks great when finished 



    FFTS

  •  05-15-2009, 3:06 PM 589561 in reply to 589553

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    how do i write a post

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    IM NOT RETARTED I JUS LIKE LIKIN WINDOWS
  •  05-15-2009, 5:35 PM 589877 in reply to 589561

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    yo wolver, i have a new story

    not as much Fan Fiction

    anyways, it meets vocab requirments

    crap, its one hell of a first chapter if you ask me



    FFTS

  •  05-17-2009, 6:18 AM 591422 in reply to 589553

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Part 15 - Onyx


    Spartan Fred-104 strode across the rough, earth-like terrain, holding a loaded MA55 Assault rifle in his hand. He was on the lookout for any of the powerful Sentinels that inhabited the place the were, or the "Micro Dyson Sphere" as Doctor Halsey called it.

    The camp the stranded UNSC personnel had set up was a few miles away, Fred had gone far in search for some kind of Forerunner artefact. At his side was Tom, one of the newer Spartans. The domed visor of his SPI suit reflected the artificial sunlight well, making him harder to see than the Spartan Iis in their heavy Mjolnir Mark VI.

    "You think we'll run into any trouble?" Tom asked worriedly.

    Fred frowned in concern. Before going through the slip space portal to this place, Tom had been a bright, confident young man ready for anything. He wasn't coping well though with being stranded in unknown territory.

    "The only trouble around here is us." Fred said bluntly, without glancing back Tom. He emphasised this point by smacking the rifle he held against the palm of his hand, producing a satisfying crack as he did so.

    "Well I'm just saying, that we're in danger out here exposed and I don't think we-" Tom was cut off when Fred turned around. The Spartan II put his hand on the Spartan III's shoulder in an assuring way.

    "Listen Tom, I know you don't want to admit it but you're not thinking straight. We will get out of here. I know what I'm doing lad, just trust my judgement."

    There was silence in the air for a few moments.

    "I hear you Fred." Tom said, averting his gaze to the floor.

    Fred turned around again, and carried on walking.

    "Fred, Tom, found anything?" A voice issued from Fred's Com link which could only be that of Chief Mendez.

    "Not yet sir, we're still looking....wait." Fred began, only to cut off when he saw something out the corner of his eye. Fast, and dangerous. Too late, Fred realised what it was.

    "Tom, find some cover! Sentinel!" He shouted, and to his relief the younger Spartan complied with his orders, taking shelter between two jagged rocks.

    There wasn't enough time for Fred to do the same though, and the Sentinel, now alerted to their prescence, turned upon Fred. The Spartan realised the danger he was in, and dove to the side moments before a powerful beam of heat and light would have smashed into him.

    The Sentinels on Onyx were different to the ones John had described seeing on the first Halo, Fred knew. They were bigger, faster, smarter, and worst of all, stronger.

    "Fred! What's going on?" Came the harsh voice of Mendez. As he ran, Fred struggled to gain breath the speak.

    "A Sentinel sir...Tom's behind cover...I'm in a bit of trouble."

    An understatement, Fred realised, as he saw two more Sentinels fly across the clearing and link up with the first. Which made it much more dangerous.

    "The other Spartans are on their way to your position Fred. Stay alive for the love of God, or so help me I'll give you a Court Marshal!"

    Evidently, Mendez wasn't concerned by the fact that Fred had been given a promotion of Lieutenant Junior Grade, and frankly Fred was releived he wasn't. It would have felt strange being called sir by his mentor.

    Just as Mendez finished speaking, a powerful laser shot the ground Fred was about to run across, heating it intensely. Fred was in pain, and felt blisters spring upon his feet, but he carried on running. Finally, he reached the rock he had been running towards, and dove for it, arcing his back as a laser passed just beneath it.

    With a thud, Fred landed hard upon the ground, and pressed his back against the rock, breathing heavily. The Sentinels had been trained for combat against the Flood, and whilst the ones outside had fully adapted to the Spartan strategy of shoot and run for cover, these ones hadn't. They were confused.

    The trio of Sentinels drifted over to the rock Fred was hiding behind, making confused beeps as they did so. On the other side of the grassy clearing, Fred met Tom's gaze and nodded at him. Thankfully, the Spartan III understood what he meant, and nodded back in confirmation.

    The Sentinels rounded the corner and gave out a triumphant cry as it saw it's foe. Fred heard a surge in the air as the machine's powerful cannons began to charge, and the shade around him was lit up by a translucent orange light.

    At the last possible moment, Fred unhooked a fragamentary grenade from his belt, and quickly pulled out the pin, discarding it. The Spartan jumped over the Sentinels with an acrobatic flip which would put an Olympian back on Earth to shame, and as he did so, he took the hand which held the ticking grenade and jammed it firmly into the small gap between two of the linked Sentinels.

    The Forerunner guardians turned in surprise, swinging around the discharged laser beam, but before the deadly light could touch Fred, the frag wedged inside the Sentinels exploded, destroying one in a blue explosion and buffeting away the other two.

    "Now!" Fred shouted, and Tom leaped out of where he had been hiding, running towards Fred. The two Spartans opened fire on one Sentinel, the metal projectiles of their MA5s slamming into the metal chassis of it. Soon, the red light of the Sentinel's one eye dimmed, and it crashed to the ground, broken.

    The final sentinel possessed the intelligence to know it was out gunned and outnumbered. Therefore, it fell upon the back up plan programmed into it and began to retreat, flying away much faster than a normal human could run.

    Thankfully, Fred and Tom weren't normal Humans.

    "The Sentinels must be coming from some place!" Fred shouted. "We're going to find out where.."

    Tom nodded, and the two Spartans ran off in pursuit of the damaged guardian, staying just far away enough to not be picked up by it's motion sensory equipment.

    They ran through the fields which wouldn't look out of place upon Earth, jumped through hills and crags in chase of it. After two hours of continuous running, the Spartans stopped and gazed in awe up at the sight which beheld them, stopping in their tracks.

    High above them, a high Citadel could be seen, hundreds of feet tall, with energised bridges leading towards separate towers. The citadel itself was a lot like other Forerunner structures, clean, pristine, and yet at the same time able to radiate intimidation to all that beheld it. At the front of the building, if that's what it could be called, large doors could be seen which were many times larger than Fred, and he was one of the tallest people of his race.

    However, the Citadel was not completely artificial. To the left of it was a huge sparkling lake, surrounded by grassy mores. Trees were dotted here and there around the place, and what looked like apples were growing upon them.

    Not for the first time since arriving, Fred suspected that the Dyson Sphere's design had been based upon Earth. But he disregarded that thought, deeming it as unlikely.

    Hundreds of Sentinels could be seen high above, drifting around. Fred had never seen so many in one place. The Citadel had serious security, plus magnificent Aesthetics too.

    A Sentinel factory wouldn't look like this, it was clearly designed for living, breathing organisms. Suddenly, Fred understood what they'd found.

    "Tom, radio for everyone else to get here. Yes, everyone, Halsey and Mendez included."

    "What should I tell them?" Tom asked.

    Fred paused, and searched for the right words. Once he had chosen them, he prepared to deliver them with appropriate gravity.

    "Tell them that we've found a Forerunner city."


    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  05-17-2009, 2:32 PM 591716 in reply to 591422

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    hey good read, nice read

    hows it goin man? 

    anyways i have a new story up

    its awomse lol



    FFTS

  •  05-17-2009, 2:52 PM 591737 in reply to 591716

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    i like it socom
    American railroads.....killing hobos scince 1826
  •  05-18-2009, 3:46 PM 592921 in reply to 591737

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    I really am at a lost of words. 5/5


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  •  05-18-2009, 7:04 PM 593240 in reply to 592921

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Apparently Part 15 contained some errors in the story involving the SIIIs. I've corrected this. So it's all k.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  05-19-2009, 11:56 AM 593931 in reply to 593240

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Wow, wonderful description of the environment, and the battle. I could imagine everything. There wasn't a detail left undone, and a 13 year old wrote this? I am astonished. Just that one chapter has me wanting more. Great job, I cannot fault it, five stars.


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  •  05-19-2009, 12:03 PM 593941 in reply to 593931

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Thanks OB. Is there perhaps the possibility that you may read more? By the way, how old are you?

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  05-19-2009, 12:10 PM 593953 in reply to 593941

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    14... I am 21 days away from my Birthday. Is there a possibility that you might read mine?
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  05-19-2009, 12:12 PM 593956 in reply to 593953

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Sure, but I'm just playing the new Halo Wars DLC at the moment.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  05-19-2009, 12:13 PM 593959 in reply to 593956

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Are you one of those guys with the Xbox Live (Obvious answer)?
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  05-19-2009, 12:24 PM 593970 in reply to 593959

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    Yeah, I've got live.

    "This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.
  •  05-19-2009, 12:34 PM 593982 in reply to 593970

    Re: [Story] Halo: Insurrection (Part Two now up)

    And umm, you wouldn't happen to have... CoD WAW?
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
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