Nocbl2:I don't like it.
Firstly, it's really short, second, it has a few grammatical errors. Plus, you fail to describe the scene they were in.
True, true. Give him a chance though, some of the earlier parts of Memoirs of an ODST were short, and just look at it now! Well, don't look at it here, because the amount of replies is pathetic, but at Bungie.net it's got over 420 replies! Small things can become big.
"This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.