I don't know OB I think this story is really good, he might have a shot at winning.
"Devon turned and yelped as if more suppressed by Kylar’s sudden appearance rather than the sting in his neck."
I think you meant suprised and not suppressed.
An assassin, oh wait "Wetboy", story is interesting.
"Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."