The Survivors

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  •  08-03-2007, 2:15 AM 83207 in reply to 83206

    Re: The Survivors

    which chapter are you refering to?  *is confused...*



    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 2:29 AM 83216 in reply to 83207

    Re: The Survivors

    You know, I thought that you started out really good, but the last couple of chapters seemed to be sort of... blech to me.  If you know what I mean.
    I am the defender of the good, protecter of the righteous, guardian of the pine!
    Don't mess with the furry-tailed clan!
  •  08-03-2007, 2:29 AM 83218 in reply to 83207

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    All because I remeber learning that after a person talks and another one starts to talk its a new paragrapgh.
    Angatar, Iron-Power
  •  08-03-2007, 2:32 AM 83221 in reply to 83218

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    RougeSpartan414:
    All because I remeber learning that after a person talks and another one starts to talk its a new paragrapgh.
    um... huh?  I am confused.  Who is that post directed at?  *scratches head in confusion.*

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 2:36 AM 83227 in reply to 83221

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    You author right, thats what supposed to happen everytime a person talks after another right away.
    Angatar, Iron-Power
  •  08-03-2007, 2:39 AM 83230 in reply to 83227

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    um...  I don't think so...  but I could be wrong.  :(  That is going to bother me until I find out now.  :(  What I remember is that a new paragraph begins when you want the next sentence to be on a different topic.  But, like I said, I could be wrong.  ("  well, I have to go to bed, night all.  ("

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 2:59 AM 83233 in reply to 83230

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    Just so you know its both.
    Angatar, Iron-Power
  •  08-03-2007, 12:06 PM 83291 in reply to 83233

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    Chapter 7:  approaching the Mindful Warrior

    The next day we found a safe (ish) area to set up a make-shift camp for ourselves and after about 30 minutes of radioing the surviving marines found their way to it. We spent from about 10:00 until 12:00 making preparations, and the men were briefed on what we were going to attempt.  “Listen up Marines!”  Barked the Sergeant, “This is a volunteer op: If you don’t want to go, no one is making you.”  At this point he lowered his voice to almost a whisper.  “I can understand if you want to stay here, and I understand if you want to go.  Either way, you are all fine marines, and I am glad to have served with you.”  He saluted smartly, smiling as they returned the gesture.  “Now,” he said after a few moments of silence, “anyone who wants to get up close and personal with these hell spawn, raise there hand.”  I don’t recall seeing a single hand that wasn’t raised.  The Sergeant almost shed a tear.  “Very well, we leave tomorrow at 0600 hours.  Marines dismissed!”  

    He looked at me.  “I hope that you know what you are doing young man.  Like I said before, I will not put them into any unnecessary danger.”  I gave him an understanding nod, and went to find a place to sleep. 

    The next morning I woke up at about 5:30:  Just enough time to check my gear, and eat something. When it was ten minutes until we left the sergeant assembled the men one last time.  “Ok marines, this is your last chance to back out.  There will be no turning around once this ship leaves the ground.  Anyone want to take the last bus home?”  He looked around, no one had left: they all still wanted to come.  The sergeant smiled grimly at them.  “Very well then, marines, lets give these monsters a wake up call they won’t ever forget!  Into the drop-ship marines: go-go-go!”  We all got in, and were off the ground in about 3 minutes. 

    I felt the ground shake as we lifted off in the strange craft.  My stomach was queasy because this was the first time I had flown in this manner.  But I fought it off by thinking of how I was going to make these monsters pay for what they had done to me.  Although none of my companions seemed to have this problem, or perhaps they were just better at hiding it than I was. 

    We finally reached the huge ship after about half an hour of flying. (It took longer because the pilot was still learning the controls.)  I waited for us to be blown out of the sky, but as we got closer to the seemingly sleeping giant we were still in one piece.  Perhaps they really would be fooled after all!  I thought, almost out loud.  As I listened I could hear that we got hails on the ship’s radio, but didn’t dare answer for fear of being discovered not to be aliens like they were.  After a while the hails stopped, but we didn’t get blown up, so perhaps they thought that our radio was disabled. (Not the most unlikely of situations.  After all, things do get broken when you fight with them.)  We reached the hanger door, which had a shield on it.  We waited for them to open it, which they did almost immediately because another ship was leaving right as we got there!  Again, I was grateful that we didn’t have to communicate with them to get in!  For creatures that supposedly had a superior intellect they sure were stupid. 

    We set down inside the now open hanger, and when we saw that there weren’t any aliens in the hanger at the time, we all got out.  Silently we all checked our gear, and made sure our radios were set to the same frequency, so that if we got in trouble we could let the others know immediately.  When I had finished, I took a moment to actually look at my surroundings.  The strange purplish hue was everywhere.  It was as if the color had made the strange ship become something less harsh, more natural and kind.  But I knew better, things with the semblance of kindness can be just as deadly as those without it, more so in some cases.  Still, I stared in awe at the masterful craftsmanship that was this alien ship. 

    I still can’t remember what it was about that ship that I found so marvelous and wonderful, because I knew that it was a terrible thing that could destroy us all if given the chance.  I was given a reality check by the sound of gunfire, and grenades going off near me, and I joined the lopsided battle.  Fortunately we weren’t too badly out numbered, and we weren’t out gunned at all.  On the contrary we had the distinct advantage in that area, because of the forerunner suits.  (The sergeant later told me that they had encountered objects of a similar origin before, and had given the long forgotten race of beings that name.)  It didn’t take long for us to kill them, but just long enough for them to get back up just as the last one died.   So, we repeated the whole thing.  But this time no reinforcements came.  We snuck down corridors, and finally found what we were looking for.  The control room!

    (spaced out to make easier to read.

    Just so you guys know, that is the last chapter that I have finished, so it might be a little while until I get the next one up here, sorry.  But I will be working on it.



    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 12:09 PM 83293 in reply to 83291

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    Chapter 8:  The jaws of the beast

    I wouldn’t have taken us very long to get inside the room… except that it is very hard to break a lock when you have super-heated plasma and other things flying around you.  (Let me tell you it is not fun!)  We did finally get in however, but unfortunately, we weren’t alone.

    The first thing we saw, were the business ends of the weapons of the deck crew.  Crap, I thought to myself.  Why didn't I think of that!  I should have known there would be aliens on the bridge! I felt like an idiot for not expecting there to be anyone on the bridge.

    Well, it was too late by then, so we surrendered and let ourselves be taken to the brig.  I noted the path that we took to get there, so that if we got the chance, we might be able to find the bridge again.  I struggled around a little, almost for show, but it was no use; these aliens were several times stronger than humans.  When we got to the brig the aliens threw rather roughly us into the cells.  They had no regard for the wounded, and I heard the screams and moans of pain of some of the marines.  Things looked rather grim at this point.   I hadn’t counted on getting captured.  I guess that I put a little too much trust in the forerunner suits.

     After the aliens left, there wasn’t anyone in the brig but us.  I looked around my purple cell (which was actually rather large) for something that might help me escape, but to no avail, because, except for me, there was nothing in it.

     Fortunately the next few hours were rather uneventful, so I decided to bet out my book and read some more.  By this time I had gotten to Alma, chapter 14.  I read about 2 more chapters, but 3 verses in chapter 14 really stuck in my mind: verses 26, 27, and 28.  They talk about a group of righteous men who are put in prison, and are set free by the power of God.  They gave me comfort, even in this dreary place.  After I read, I slept a little, but not much because I didn’t want to miss a chance to escape.  More hours passed, and I read again, and slept a little more.  It was then that I thought to look around the door.

     I then got up and walked to the door, and saw that my comrades where doing to same thing as I just had.  I looked at the shield door that held me in, and tried to find a way to perhaps disrupt it, but again, I found nothing.  I would have tried the gauntlet weapon but when we were captured the aliens took them away.  I didn’t have long to think about what I was going to do however, because in the next few seconds several things happened at once.  I think that if I didn’t see things in slow-mo that I would have missed the whole thing.  I heard a noise, and saw the door opened and one of the bird-like aliens walked in, followed by one of the larger ape-like ones.  Then another shape slipped in the door just behind them.  I was surprised to recognize it as one of the marines!  He waited in the shadows as the large one went to the control panel for the cell doors.  When its back was turned he came up quietly behind the bird-like one and did several things.  He took a hold of the head, and snapped it, grabbing the body so it didn’t make noise as it dropped.  He then grabbed the shield that it wore on its scaly wrist, and put it on his own.  He then grabbed the alien’s weapon because his own had run out of ammunition.  When the large one looked up again, it was into a bolt from the alien gun.  The thing was blinded, and the marine took advantage of his enemy’s disability and circled it, continuing to fire.  In a matter of seconds it went down with a thud that shook the rest of the brig.  “Come on!”  He said, letting us out of our cells.  “They probably heard that, so we don’t have much time!  Get your gear and be ready to leave.” He said.  The Sgt. nodded in agreement, as did the rest of the marines. 



    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 12:09 PM 83294 in reply to 83293

    Re: The Survivors

    Reserved for chapter 9

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 12:10 PM 83295 in reply to 83294

    Re: The Survivors

    Reserved for chapter 10

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 12:11 PM 83296 in reply to 83295

    Re: The Survivors

    Reserved for chapter 11

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 4:06 PM 83417 in reply to 83296

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    Good story and I like how you reserved spots.
    Angatar, Iron-Power
  •  08-03-2007, 4:37 PM 83427 in reply to 83417

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    thank you.  ("

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
  •  08-03-2007, 11:35 PM 83601 in reply to 83427

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    chapter 8 posted.

    carefull... it^ will steal your soul...
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