Project Alpha priorty:Code name:Aramegedon...

Last post 05-24-2008, 3:55 AM by Captain Cazador- Soldato. 2 replies.
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  •  05-23-2008, 11:44 PM 235664

    Project Alpha priorty:Code name:Aramegedon...

    Sergeant Bruce Williams looked at his commander not because of her beauty and the feelings of love he had suppressed infront in him, but with the feelings of lost respect and disbelief in her. It was her fault they had been lost in the jungles of south america for two weeks with no map or link to command. It was her fault they've had been eating rats for the past weeks. It was her fault five of the remainning  marines stepped on a Frieden land mine and died, because she forgot to clear it. It was all of there their fault.

    After a series of crushing blows to the UNSC in the rain forest wars, the Frienden and Koslovic goal was clear. Nuclear holocaust. That grave word rang in the minds of the ONI brass. They sent legions, UNSC marines but were a kia at Fort bransworth. All execpt fire team Omega 03. Now with the knowledge of the nuclear bomb planted by the commies and just having escaped the massacare Fort bransworth. Team Omega 03 heads out to disarm the nuclear bomb and save earth form it's new hell.

    This is just intro, I'm not sure if I want to write more it sucks! Please comment and tell me how bad it is?


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  •  05-24-2008, 3:41 AM 235703 in reply to 235664

    Re: Project Alpha priorty:Code name:Aramegedon...

    Should make one more chapter and we'll see how it fares, it's ok so far.
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    ^Good job clicking that Edit button, Spartan.^

    Hope you are having a good time at Relic, Thunder!
  •  05-24-2008, 3:55 AM 235706 in reply to 235703

    Re: Project Alpha priorty:Code name:Aramegedon...

    The story seems good, but you do seem to have a problem with spelling and grammar, however, it isn't too bad.

    Keep going, and like Spartan 33 said, just do one more chapter and see how it goes.

     


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