Grim Fandango: DFang: Grim Fandango: DFang:Start a new paragraph every time there's dialogue. here's an example.
John was already down there by the time the alert started, he had already loaded up when he saw Afanasi limping down towards his own drop ship.
“Aren’t you supposed to be in the med bay?” John spoke first. With a smirk, Afanasi retorted,
“he said all able bodied men, it’ll take more than a few plasma wounds to stop me.” John laughed,
“Well said Lieutenant.” And they boarded the pelicans together.
This is completely incorrect. It should be formatted and punctuated like this:
John was already down there by the time the alert started, he had already loaded up when he saw Afanasi limping down towards his own drop ship. "Aren’t you supposed to be in the med bay?”
With a smirk, Afanasi retorted, "He said all able bodied men. It’ll take more than a few plasma wounds to stop me.”
John laughed. "Well said, Lieutenant.”
And they boarded the pelicans together.
I just hit enter at the intervals, don't rail me for being lazy and rushing...Actually, that's a perfectly legitimate reason.
If you want to help, why would you rush? You do more harm than good giving people incorrect advice.
I was trying to give a basic example. He can take it from there. I don't need to baby people every step of their way.
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