i had to remember where you left off to find the chapter break. (might want to edit "chapter 2" somewhere in there.)

it was good. at first i thought the entire getting-ready-for-battle scene was a little too much, but then i re-read my previous comment and didn't think it wise to contradict myself. but yeah, other than stopping right in the middle of action, it was good. (i do that all the time)

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New story out! Halo: Below the Brine
(it's the best story you're not reading!)

Footbutt:

i had to remember where you left off to find the chapter break. (might want to edit "chapter 2" somewhere in there.)

it was good. at first i thought the entire getting-ready-for-battle scene was a little too much, but then i re-read my previous comment and didn't think it wise to contradict myself. but yeah, other than stopping right in the middle of action, it was good. (i do that all the time)

Yeah, thanks. I'm trying to pull off a "OMG they got past teh defenses!" so I wanted to get the less suspenseful parts out quick. The next chapter is going to be awesome.

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Tank > Banshee