Wolverfrog49:

Yeah, don't knock the guy. I was a terrible writer when I first started out too (Look at the early parts of Memoirs), all I needed was some encouragement and I got better.

 You keep at it Dave, don't listen to the people who put you down. Just do a bit of research on Halopedia, and bring out chapter one.

Want a luagh?

Take a look at my first piece!

Recon 2!

Ill post link later if you can not find it!

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Its lolable!

http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/399819.aspx

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Night Angel:

Wolverfrog49:

Yeah, don't knock the guy. I was a terrible writer when I first started out too (Look at the early parts of Memoirs), all I needed was some encouragement and I got better.

 You keep at it Dave, don't listen to the people who put you down. Just do a bit of research on Halopedia, and bring out chapter one.

Want a luagh?

Take a look at my first piece!

Recon 2!

Ill post link later if you can not find it!

You think yours is bad? Check out my old one.

http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/535750.aspx

The Chapters were so short with no detail, I laugh at it now.

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"Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."

Wow, you only started to wrote in 09?

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From Recon 2 to this:

http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/697536.aspx

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Night Angel:Wow, you only started to wrote in 09?

I had a different account that got banned.

I started this one in 07, got banned for a while, and then made a new one, then that one got banned and I realized this one was unbanned. I believe its name was Virtue or something like that.

I wasn't very active pre-release.

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"Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."

I see, anyway like i say, recon 2 to Shadows call in 3 FF's/Novels!

Anyway:

Have to go, sorry!

Its late and mums complaining saying i have been on all night!

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I started writing last November, so almost a year now.

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"This one has forgotten whether it's heatsink is over capacity. It wonders whether the criminal scum considers itself fortunate" ~ Blasto, the only Hanar Spectre.

Carrotslayer:

AUROOGHA!!! THE CANNON-BREACH ALARM JUST WENT OFF!!!!

Sorry, but I just had to correct some major cannon-breaches.

1. "Year 2882, 100 years after the Halo 3 event" Halo 3 was in 2552-2553 and if your ff is 100 years after halo 3 then something is wrong with the teachers who taught you how to count (or DIDN'T teach you how to count). Because if i'm right then year 2882 is 350 years from year 2552 and I have no reason to doubt myself.

2.  "The covenant were completely gone except for the elites." I don't think that the elites would wipe out every other race except humanity. It's just plain stupid. And at least the grunts and hunters were split up when it comes to alliances. Some went with the Elites and some others went with the Brutes.

3. "The elites started making new technology based off of the convenant." The covenant technology was from the Elites so I don't see why they would base their new technology on something from the other races.

4. " In desperation, the UNSC made the Spartan ||| Military Program," Haven't you read any halo-novells? From what I know the spartan III project was started after halo 3 (this far you're on the right track). But I believe they are in the novell "Ghosts of Onyx". And that's pretty short after halo 3 (at least I think so....), but I don't think that the spartan III project was started 300 years after halo 3. And those spartans weren't better than spartan II, they were created to be more "expendable".

5. "Now, the UNSC is in the biggest against the convenant they ever faced."  No cannon-breach here, only confusing grammar!

6. "Then everything went wrong." If your FF while go on like this then yes, it probably will.

If i'm wrong about something then I blame halopedia, which I couldn't find (have they shut down?).

1. Sorry I messed up there, at first I made my story 100 years after halo 3, but then i changed it. 

2.  Who said they did?

3.  The whole point of that is that in the story the vehicles will based off of the vehicles in the halo games, but better.

4. No I haven't read any halo novels. And this story isn't supposed to be based off the halo novels.

5.  I made a grammer mistake there its supposed to say, "Now, the UNSC is in the biggest war against the convenant they ever faced."

6. Ever hear the saying "if you don't have anything nice to say don't say anything at all."

And btw the way thanks to all the people who are being encouraging and not saying insults.

Good job on Chapter 1.

Except I don't see how they could be fighting for Harvest after it was glassed.

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"Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."

tmspartan:

Good job on Chapter 1.

Except I don't see how they could be fighting for Harvest after it was glassed.

Thanks about that. i changed it arond a bit so now its about arcadia.

dave889:

Carrotslayer:

AUROOGHA!!! THE CANNON-BREACH ALARM JUST WENT OFF!!!!

Sorry, but I just had to correct some major cannon-breaches.

1. "Year 2882, 100 years after the Halo 3 event" Halo 3 was in 2552-2553 and if your ff is 100 years after halo 3 then something is wrong with the teachers who taught you how to count (or DIDN'T teach you how to count). Because if i'm right then year 2882 is 350 years from year 2552 and I have no reason to doubt myself.

2.  "The covenant were completely gone except for the elites." I don't think that the elites would wipe out every other race except humanity. It's just plain stupid. And at least the grunts and hunters were split up when it comes to alliances. Some went with the Elites and some others went with the Brutes.

3. "The elites started making new technology based off of the convenant." The covenant technology was from the Elites so I don't see why they would base their new technology on something from the other races.

4. " In desperation, the UNSC made the Spartan ||| Military Program," Haven't you read any halo-novells? From what I know the spartan III project was started after halo 3 (this far you're on the right track). But I believe they are in the novell "Ghosts of Onyx". And that's pretty short after halo 3 (at least I think so....), but I don't think that the spartan III project was started 300 years after halo 3. And those spartans weren't better than spartan II, they were created to be more "expendable".

5. "Now, the UNSC is in the biggest against the convenant they ever faced."  No cannon-breach here, only confusing grammar!

6. "Then everything went wrong." If your FF while go on like this then yes, it probably will.

If i'm wrong about something then I blame halopedia, which I couldn't find (have they shut down?).

1. Sorry I messed up there, at first I made my story 100 years after halo 3, but then i changed it. 

2.  Who said they did?

3.  The whole point of that is that in the story the vehicles will based off of the vehicles in the halo games, but better.

4. No I haven't read any halo novels. And this story isn't supposed to be based off the halo novels.

5.  I made a grammer mistake there its supposed to say, "Now, the UNSC is in the biggest war against the convenant they ever faced."

6. Ever hear the saying "if you don't have anything nice to say don't say anything at all."

And btw the way thanks to all the people who are being encouraging and not saying insults.

Ok, sorry for my behaving earlier, I think I got a little bit carried away there ;) . And thanks to tmspartan who corrected me :D, and like some other dude said; the story has potential and I don't want to kill it in it's craddle. Anyhow:

1. Thanks for correcting. And yes, I did *** up the math too (but only a little bit).

2. I thought that when I saw "The covenant were completely gone except for the elites."  I automaticly thought that you meant that the Elites killed all the others.

3. Ok that sounds resonable.

4. You really should read them, they are very good (unfortunately I have only read one....).

5. Thanks for correcting!

6. Sorry for being rude, that was not my intention. Still, I had to get that of my mind.

But dave889, no hard feelings right? Are things ok between us?

dave889:

tmspartan:

Good job on Chapter 1.

Except I don't see how they could be fighting for Harvest after it was glassed.

Thanks about that. i changed it arond a bit so now its about arcadia.

Wait - Wasnt arcadia involved before Halo CE never mind after Halo: 3

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Carrotslayer:

dave889:

Carrotslayer:

AUROOGHA!!! THE CANNON-BREACH ALARM JUST WENT OFF!!!!

Sorry, but I just had to correct some major cannon-breaches.

1. "Year 2882, 100 years after the Halo 3 event" Halo 3 was in 2552-2553 and if your ff is 100 years after halo 3 then something is wrong with the teachers who taught you how to count (or DIDN'T teach you how to count). Because if i'm right then year 2882 is 350 years from year 2552 and I have no reason to doubt myself.

2.  "The covenant were completely gone except for the elites." I don't think that the elites would wipe out every other race except humanity. It's just plain stupid. And at least the grunts and hunters were split up when it comes to alliances. Some went with the Elites and some others went with the Brutes.

3. "The elites started making new technology based off of the convenant." The covenant technology was from the Elites so I don't see why they would base their new technology on something from the other races.

4. " In desperation, the UNSC made the Spartan ||| Military Program," Haven't you read any halo-novells? From what I know the spartan III project was started after halo 3 (this far you're on the right track). But I believe they are in the novell "Ghosts of Onyx". And that's pretty short after halo 3 (at least I think so....), but I don't think that the spartan III project was started 300 years after halo 3. And those spartans weren't better than spartan II, they were created to be more "expendable".

5. "Now, the UNSC is in the biggest against the convenant they ever faced."  No cannon-breach here, only confusing grammar!

6. "Then everything went wrong." If your FF while go on like this then yes, it probably will.

If i'm wrong about something then I blame halopedia, which I couldn't find (have they shut down?).

1. Sorry I messed up there, at first I made my story 100 years after halo 3, but then i changed it. 

2.  Who said they did?

3.  The whole point of that is that in the story the vehicles will based off of the vehicles in the halo games, but better.

4. No I haven't read any halo novels. And this story isn't supposed to be based off the halo novels.

5.  I made a grammer mistake there its supposed to say, "Now, the UNSC is in the biggest war against the convenant they ever faced."

6. Ever hear the saying "if you don't have anything nice to say don't say anything at all."

And btw the way thanks to all the people who are being encouraging and not saying insults.

Ok, sorry for my behaving earlier, I think I got a little bit carried away there ;) . And thanks to tmspartan who corrected me :D, and like some other dude said; the story has potential and I don't want to kill it in it's craddle. Anyhow:

1. Thanks for correcting. And yes, I did *** up the math too (but only a little bit).

2. I thought that when I saw "The covenant were completely gone except for the elites."  I automaticly thought that you meant that the Elites killed all the others.

3. Ok that sounds resonable.

4. You really should read them, they are very good (unfortunately I have only read one....).

5. Thanks for correcting!

6. Sorry for being rude, that was not my intention. Still, I had to get that of my mind.

But dave889, no hard feelings right? Are things ok between us?

Ya and thanks for pointing out the mistakes cause there were some pretty major ones in there. 

Night Angel:

dave889:

tmspartan:

Good job on Chapter 1.

Except I don't see how they could be fighting for Harvest after it was glassed.

Thanks about that. i changed it arond a bit so now its about arcadia.

Wait - Wasnt arcadia involved before Halo CE never mind after Halo: 3

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