(FF) A Survivors Tale

Last post 08-19-2009, 2:54 AM by Kuribayashi. 31 replies.
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  •  08-05-2009, 5:23 PM 683224 in reply to 683141

    Re: (FF) A Survivors Tale

    =D I still have to write it.... =(

    Dang HBOFF competition....


    Chuckles

    Anyone else here getting sick of tiny two-word posts that become huge because of the O.G. picture?

  •  08-05-2009, 6:00 PM 683245 in reply to 683224

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    I gave up on that competition weeks ago, I stand no chance.


    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  08-05-2009, 6:25 PM 683266 in reply to 683245

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    Offensive Bias:

    I gave up on that competition weeks ago, I stand no chance.

    Bah, I'm going to do it anyway.

    What I've done I thought was good.


    Vigil will never be defeated.
  •  08-05-2009, 9:37 PM 683481 in reply to 683266

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    Eternal Vigil:
    Offensive Bias:

    I gave up on that competition weeks ago, I stand no chance.

    Bah, I'm going to do it anyway.

    What I've done I thought was good.

    I'm just going for an Honorable mention at this point.

    The story I have created is by far my best, hopefully you guys think so as well once I'm done.


    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
  •  08-06-2009, 1:38 PM 684257 in reply to 683481

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    Same here.

    I'm going to have to smooth out the edges of mine if it's going to even have a chance though =D


    Chuckles

    Anyone else here getting sick of tiny two-word posts that become huge because of the O.G. picture?

  •  08-06-2009, 6:48 PM 684565 in reply to 684257

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    Chapter Two

     

    Cleaning The Mean Streets

     

     

    The Sniper team had gotten into position on the roof of a house. There were two snipers and two spotters. One of the spotters pointed out the area where the infantry would be moving up, and the other spotter was pointing out where the vehicles were going. The ultimate aim of this attack was to clear the area for a safe passage up to the bridge with a few hundred civilians. “Targets spotted near the cars. Engage and we’ll keep the big ones off your back, move into position when you’re ready.” The spotter clicked off the radio and pointed at the group of Ravagers poking around inside a broken down car. The spotter laughed as a grenade blew away two of them, the others squawked alarmingly and sprinted away from the car as more grenades detonated around it. A squad of men ran around a corner and fired at the three Ravagers. They fell in a splatter of green blood and dismembered limbs.

     

    A screech came from behind the sniper team. Before any of them could even turn, a scream came out from one of the Spotters. He was suddenly dragged off the roof, a large streak of blood showing his passage. The others tried to stand, but another man was dragged off the roof, a Sniper this time. The remaining Spotter and Sniper, Huri and Yasagato. Huri pulled out a rifle and aimed at the edge of the roof. A single claw dug into the shingles. And a large, muscular body leapt up. Yasagato felt around for his sidearm, he dropped it off the roof in panic. Huri fired three bursts from his rifle; the first burst caught the demon in the shoulder. The second missed and the third managed to make a mess of the creature’s stomach. Guts tumbled onto the roof and the demon fell off with a wet thud. Huri lowered the weapon and ran to the edge of the roof; he looked down and could see a horde of the demons feeding on the two bodies of the sniper team. Huri fired down at them, killing three and making the others pounce up at his position, jaws snapping and spraying foamy spit at him. Huri fell back in fright and crawled up to Yasagato. The radio crackled next to them. “We need Sniper support, what the hell are you doing?! We’re taking losses!” Huri chanced a look down onto the street. The soldiers were being torn to pieces as they tried to get to cover. A soldier was dragged behind a partially broken wall as he held his intestines and screamed for his mother. The scene was like one from Hell...

     

    A bang came from behind Huri. He turned and saw a demon hauling itself onto the roof; it gave an almost human groan and then stood before them. It raised its claws in an unmistakable posture of attack. It screeched and charged Huri and Yasagato. Huri raised the rifle, but not before he was knocked to the ground, the demon about to bite down on his Jugular. A loud bang came from the right, and the demons head exploded in a shower of gore. Huri was stunned. “Come on you idiot!” A hand raised him up from the roof. Yasagato sat and shook his head. “All we have are the sniper rifles, how are we supposed to fight them off with them?!” Huri looked around for his rifle. “It’s no use Huri... It got knocked off the roof.” Huri grabbed hold of the radio, as the snarls of the demons continued below them.

     

    “Goddamn it! What do I have to do to kill these assholes!?” Corporal Himachi fired his rifle and killed a confused demon. A squad to his left was swarmed in a tangle of black bodies. Himachi fired at them, but they didn’t seem to be affected by the bullets as their tails swung around hungrily. Raw chunks of meat and ragged cloth flew into the air as the demons ate.  “S*it!” Himachi turned and ran back to an armoured transport. It fired its heavy machine guns at the masses of demons as they charged down the street. A Sergeant waved Himachi over.

     

    “Corporal! I’m raising men to go and rescue our sniper team. The transmission was garbled but we managed to figure out they have men down and they’re trapped. Report to the Colonel over there, he’ll sort you out.” The Sergeant turned and ran over to a squad who were shouting into a radio. Himachi ran over to a team of six men and the Colonel. “Okay, this is all we have to send. Corporal, get in with the group, you’re going now. The Snipers are trapped on a building a mile down the street. They need your help. Relieve them and bring them back here. As soon as possible, we don’t know how long we can hold this position for, so be quick about it. SOLDIERS! MOVE!” Himachi and the others sprinted down a side street, in single file.

     

    Huri tried to climb down into the window. He almost lost his footing, until he was grabbed and dragged into the window. Yasagato clapped him on the back “You can screw yourself if you think I’m taking them on alone.” Huri just smiled and looked around. The room used to belong to a child. Toys littered the floor and the bed looked as though it had been run through with a chainsaw. Huri turned away from the sight on the wall. A miniature handprint, like that belonging to a child, was imprinted on the wall in blood. Huri opened the door and walked down the stairs, with Yasagato close behind. There were human bodies, tore apart on the floor. Huri gagged and held his hand over his mouth “Oh s*it! That f*cking stinks!” Yasagato cursed silently as he reached the bottom of the stairs. Then, a crash came from the kitchen, followed by the screeches of the damned, and their shadows as they played across the wall.

    New chapter, and it's also on the first page.


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  •  08-06-2009, 8:32 PM 684650 in reply to 684565

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    Hmmm extremely gory and creepy. Seems like a job well done.
    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
  •  08-07-2009, 2:52 PM 685396 in reply to 684650

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    Gory and Creepy eh? Exaclty what I was going for, thanks for the comment TM.


    Please read and comment my novel in the Liberry.
    Wuv u Chuckles :D
    Run for your life if you wanna get out alive. Or is it the other way around?
  •  08-07-2009, 3:01 PM 685405 in reply to 685396

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    Good job OB. Poor little child...

    I refuse to accept your sig, btw =]


    Chuckles

    Anyone else here getting sick of tiny two-word posts that become huge because of the O.G. picture?

  •  08-07-2009, 3:15 PM 685424 in reply to 685405

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    gory......creepy.......i love it hehe the disturbed guy i am
    Dulce et decorum est pro patria mori.

    it is sweet and honourable to die for ones country
  •  08-10-2009, 2:23 AM 688224 in reply to 685424

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    I have to portray this FF in a darker light than I did with my first Ravager FF. Thsi one portrays the monsters as savage creatures, killing without thought. This is the more violent side to the Ravagers that I wasn't able to portray right with my first one. I hope you all enjoy reading as much as I enjoy writing.
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  08-14-2009, 10:04 PM 694787 in reply to 688224

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    Hello, update is this: I have chapter three written on the Laptop. But, as some of you know, the Laptop is really badly damaged following a tea spilling accident. And it actually took me more time trying to open the site, then it did to write the chapter, and I realised how pointless it was of me to try and post the chapter, after spending ten minutes waiting for this page to load, so I'm sorry, but you will have to wait a decent while.
    SPQR! An ambitious historical project, coming soon. Check the Library for early version test writes. Recommended for anyone with a love of history.
  •  08-15-2009, 9:24 PM 696083 in reply to 694787

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    Chapter Three

     

    The Reporter

     

    The Reporter sprinted for his life. His cameraman and a fellow associate were running with him. Just seconds after reaching a military roadblock, it was savagely attacked. Soldiers were ripped to shreds in front of them and they were spattered with blood. They had just stared, shocked until the demons noticed them. “Faster! We’re almost out of here!” The cameraman, named Xao pointed to an alleyway too small for the demons to cross. He dropped the camera and picked up a little speed. The Reporter looked back and saw several of the creatures grouped around the camera, a few of them sniffed it, until a smarter one savagely kicked it and roared at the ones around the camera. Several of them gave a frightened moan and ran after the humans. And now he knew they could communicate, which was a very frightening prospect.

     

    Xao was panting like a wild thing. Every step was a burning ache in his legs. He suddenly realised he couldn’t make it. He looked back and saw the things gaining on him. They looked to have twisted, demonic smiles. He shook his head to clear sweat out of his eyes, and tried to pump his burning limbs faster. However, a weight was on his back suddenly, and he knew his time was up. He almost didn’t mind the sharp pain a the back of his neck which meant his death.

     

    The Reporter reached the inside of the alley. So did his friend. They looked back to see Xao struggling feebly against a demon tearing strips of skin off his neck with a powerful jaw. Suddenly, his friend screamed and ran at them. His nametag, reading “Hello, my name is Nakeda”. Nakeda tackled a demon to the ground. The shock of the attack meant the demon took some time getting up. Nakeda punched another, before a demon came behind him and raked massive claws down his back. He cried out and fell to his knees.

     

    The Reporter noticed a gun on the floor, with a severed hand still attached to it. The Reporter scooped it up clumsily and aimed it at the monster, just as it reared up over Nakeda. Nakeda stared it in the eyes, hatred, and fear and regret shining in his eyes, before the demon clamped its jaws around Nakeda’s head and jerked it to the right, followed by a brittle snap. The Reporter was shocked. He could have fired the weapon and killed them, but he hadn’t. Why not? He fell to the floor and crawled backwards into the alley as a large demon had tried to grab him. Its bulk was no use for it as the narrow passage blocked its entry. It stuck an arm through and roared at him. He dropped the gun and ran. He just ran.

     New chapter up, read comment, rate.


    Please read and comment my novel in the Liberry.
    Wuv u Chuckles :D
    Run for your life if you wanna get out alive. Or is it the other way around?
  •  08-15-2009, 9:39 PM 696115 in reply to 696083

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    Very nice, but it was kind of short.
    "Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."
  •  08-16-2009, 3:05 AM 696492 in reply to 696115

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    Only due to Laptop errors. The Laptop is working about... 80% better now, so I have the time I need now. Anyone else?
    Please read and comment my novel in the Liberry.
    Wuv u Chuckles :D
    Run for your life if you wanna get out alive. Or is it the other way around?
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