(FF) Halo: The Covenant War

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  •  07-24-2008, 4:25 PM 312177 in reply to 237256

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    That was intresting. It nice to see someone else who likes ODST's
  •  07-24-2008, 4:27 PM 312178 in reply to 312177

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    ya ODST's are the best

    and welcome to the forums



    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 5:54 PM 312267 in reply to 312178

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

     This is also the area I will be posting the next 10 chapters

    Here is the next chapter. This will mainly be an insight into LI's past. it will also introduce a main character (based after my idol Mariusz Pudzianowski)

     

    Chapter 12

    0920 hours, 22 March, 2536, UNSC Manila

    Li slowly walked across the Hangar bay of the Manila as the technicians worked on various vehicles. He could hear the whine of Pelican engines roaring to life in the area in front of him.

     As he neared the Pelican designated as Delta three he saw the new squad that would be working with Charlie, Alpha. A man named Marius Pudzianowski led the team.  He was a very strong man, the strongest in the Division. He was also a veteran like Li.

    In a deep commanding voice Marius said, “Li? Is that you man?”

    “Ya man its me. How ya doin man?”

    “Good. I’m glad I’ll be working with you.”

    Li nodded the heard something boom over the COM, “All personnel prepare to leave slipspace we are near Epsilon Aurigue.”

               

                Marius looked over at his squad and said, “Load up everyone we are about to leave.”

    Li saw this and told his squad to do the same. He looked around at the ship and could smell the stench of recycled air fill his nostrils. He had a bad feeling about the mission but he didn’t know why. He stepped into the back of the Pelican and placed his M113 Barrett Gauss Rifle on the holding rack above his head. He kept the S2 in its drag bag, and held onto his BR55.

    His squad followed and placed all their weapons on the racks. Then the back hatch of the Pelican started to close. Li then thought of the day his family died…

    1600 hours, 13 October, 2524, Cebu Philippines, Earth

    “Surprise!” Echoed through the room as around 100 people said it in the house.

    “Mom you didn’t need to do this.” Li said as his mom surprised him with a large party with his whole family and all of his friends.

    “Yes we did it’s your 18th birthday! Everyone should have a fun 18th birthday. Especially since you are going to the Naval Academy tomorrow.” His mom said to him.

    Li looked around at everyone and when he saw the person he was looking for everything around him meant nothing, Christina. The girl he was going to purpose to tonight at dinner. “Hey babe.” Li said as she approached him.

    “Hey Handsome. How are you doing on this beautiful day?”

    “Good. You?”

    “Fine now that you’re here.”

    Li chuckled to himself. “These are the good times.”

    2100 hours, 13 October, 2524

    Li smiled as he saw Christina walk out of her house in a beautiful burgundy dress with her long brown hair flowing behind her as if it had a mind of its own. He thought he was the luckiest man alive. Li opened the passenger side door to his car and couldn’t help but smile again.

    Christina looked at him weird, “Nope.”

    Li looked puzzled. What do you mean nope?”

    “Nope I’m driving that’s what I mean.”

    “What? I’m the man I’ll drive you.”

    “I know, but it’s your birthday so I’m gonna drive.”

    “Well I’m going to drive anyway.”

    “Okay.” She said as she gave in to Li.

    “Wait.” Li thought. “I have to ask you something.”

    “What is it?”

    Li got down on one knee and said, “ Will you marry me?”

    Christina said, “Yes!” as soon as Li stopped.

    Li stood up and hugged her. As soon as he did an explosion rippled through his area. He looked at Christina and realized it was near where his family lived. Then another explosion but this one was only a little ways away.

    Li shouted, “Run!” As soon as he did an explosion came from a vehicle 2 streets away and a fireball engulfed Christina’s house and her.

    0700 hours, 14 October, 2524

    Li awoke to the sound of gurneys going by and he looked up to see a green tent cover overhead. He got up and saw a massive hologram on a wall.

    It listed the names of those who died in the explosions. Li read the names he saw his family, his entire family was on the list. Then he saw the Sharp family, Christina’s family on there. He looked and saw Christina’s name. Li’s eyes burned with anger. He punched at the hologram and saw it just engulf his arm as he punched. Then he would pull it back and it would reappear. He fell to his knees and cried.

    A soldier walked by him and Li grabbed him by the arm and with out raising his head he said, “Who did his?”

    The soldier responded, “The URF.”

    0933 hours, 22 March, 2536, Pelican Delta three

    “Li are you alright?” Marius asked.

    Christina’s face flashed before his eyes. “Ya Marius I am.”

    “Good because we will be at the staging area in a few minutes.”

    Li nodded and looked out the mini window of the Pelican to see the rolling hills covered in trees. Every so often he would see a clearing.

    Li looked at Reece and for a second she looked like Christina. Then she looked like herself again. He shook his head thinking he was going crazy.

    Then the Pelican started to slow and descend into the large clearing now known as Staging area B-12.

    Li grabbed his gear like everyone else in the Pelican and stepped out of the back to see hundreds of regs (regular marines) walking around.

    Michael looked at him, “Where are the other ODST’s?”

    Li looked at him with a stone face and said, “ We are the only ones that are SpecOps here Michael. Deal with it.”

    “Okay Sarge.”



    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 6:55 PM 312348 in reply to 312177

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Anyone?

    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 7:33 PM 312415 in reply to 312348

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    very good

  •  07-24-2008, 8:16 PM 312463 in reply to 312348

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Master Gunnery Sergeant Sanchez:
    Anyone?
    Good job Sanchez. I like how you manage to keep the story always in line if you know what i mean. You dont sort of vear off onto other stuff.  Great job.
    I stand proud and dominant in the heat of a battle.



  •  07-24-2008, 8:19 PM 312466 in reply to 312463

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Spartan15:
    Master Gunnery Sergeant Sanchez:
    Anyone?
    Good job Sanchez. I like how you manage to keep the story always in line if you know what i mean. You dont sort of vear off onto other stuff.  Great job.

    You mean like going into like Zombies and Predators and stuff?



    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 9:41 PM 312622 in reply to 312466

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Master Gunnery Sergeant Sanchez:

    Spartan15:
    Master Gunnery Sergeant Sanchez:
    Anyone?
    Good job Sanchez. I like how you manage to keep the story always in line if you know what i mean. You dont sort of vear off onto other stuff.  Great job.

    You mean like going into like Zombies and Predators and stuff?

    Well i dont know but its good anyway.
    I stand proud and dominant in the heat of a battle.



  •  07-24-2008, 9:52 PM 312666 in reply to 312622

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    lol, thanks

    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 10:02 PM 312697 in reply to 312666

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Good job! *high fives Sanchez*

    SMRT Squad. Not that smart
    A grenade need not speak, for when he blows up, a blast will speak for him.
  •  07-24-2008, 10:07 PM 312712 in reply to 312697

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Thanks Mr. G, and does everyone like the new banner on the first page?

    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 10:09 PM 312724 in reply to 312712

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Master Gunnery Sergeant Sanchez:
    Thanks Mr. G, and does everyone like the new banner on the first page?
    It's cool

    SMRT Squad. Not that smart
    A grenade need not speak, for when he blows up, a blast will speak for him.
  •  07-24-2008, 10:24 PM 312781 in reply to 312724

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Mr. Grenade:
    Master Gunnery Sergeant Sanchez:
    Thanks Mr. G, and does everyone like the new banner on the first page?
    It's cool

    I think so too, lol



    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-24-2008, 11:00 PM 312893 in reply to 312781

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Chapter 13 should be up in a week

    Halo: TCW
    "As I walk through the valley of the shadow of death I have no fear because I am the meanest mofo in the valley
  •  07-25-2008, 12:34 AM 312987 in reply to 312267

    Re: (FF) Halo: The Covenant War

    Good chapter, Sanchez. It's good to see you getting back to writing. I really pity Sanchez. Proposes, then she's killed ten seconds later. That's painful...

    Errorwise, there were a few problems, but not too many.

    1. "Li nodded the heard something" You missed the 'n' on 'the'.

    2. "purpose to tonight" 'purpose' should be 'propose'.

    3. Just something you need to know about speech punctuation. When you end a bit of speech with "he said" or "he muttered", etc, end the speech with a comma, not a full stop.

    "Especially since you are going to the Naval Academy tomorrow,” His mom said to him. Not

    "Especially since you are going to the Naval Academy tomorrow.” His mom said to him.

    Simple error, everyone does it. But you need to keep that in mind.

    It was a good chapter, Sanchez. Keep it up.


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