I like it, but things start to get a little confusing when you bring up places. I've seen this in all fantasy novels, perhaps a map? Just an idea that might make everything a little more comprehendable.

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"Die?"Kurt laughed."Didn't you know?"he told the Elite. "...Spartans never die."

People say Halo fanboys are annoying. They obviously haven't met a CoD fanboy.

I can't make a map :/

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In every loss, in every lie.
In every truth that you'd deny!
And each regret and each goodbye
Was a mistake too great to hide.
And your voice was all I heard. That I get what I deserve.
-Never forget Offensive Bias.

I love how he copied my title with the "The Beginning of The End."

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Read my FF! Human-Covenant War: Without The Great Schism. It's an FF based upon how the war would have ended up if there was no Great Schism. There are a lot of twists and there is a lot of action!

Copied? I never even seen your FF.

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In every loss, in every lie.
In every truth that you'd deny!
And each regret and each goodbye
Was a mistake too great to hide.
And your voice was all I heard. That I get what I deserve.
-Never forget Offensive Bias.

Wow, i reaaaaaaaaalllly need to do another chapter.....

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Whats a better name?
Night Angel OR Daylight Devil?
PM me your answer!

WALL OF TEXT

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Diary of an Arbiter: Reposted
It's free, AND a good read.

lots of marines:

im so scared of genitals. they will use thier genital powerso on you

Nocbl2:WALL OF TEXT

Sorry?

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Whats a better name?
Night Angel OR Daylight Devil?
PM me your answer!

Night Angel:

Nocbl2:WALL OF TEXT

Sorry?

The. Story. Wall. Text. Big. Phat. Explosive.poo.

 

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Diary of an Arbiter: Reposted
It's free, AND a good read.

lots of marines:

im so scared of genitals. they will use thier genital powerso on you

It's not a wall of text. Please don't spam my novel thread.

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In every loss, in every lie.
In every truth that you'd deny!
And each regret and each goodbye
Was a mistake too great to hide.
And your voice was all I heard. That I get what I deserve.
-Never forget Offensive Bias.

I like it. Just saying.

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Diary of an Arbiter: Reposted
It's free, AND a good read.

lots of marines:

im so scared of genitals. they will use thier genital powerso on you

Nocbl2:

Night Angel:

Nocbl2:WALL OF TEXT

Sorry?

The. Story. Wall. Text. Big. Phat. Explosive.poo.

 

Still confused but nvm.

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Whats a better name?
Night Angel OR Daylight Devil?
PM me your answer!

Night Angel:

Nocbl2:

Night Angel:

Nocbl2:WALL OF TEXT

Sorry?

The. Story. Wall. Text. Big. Phat. Explosive.poo.

 

Still confused but nvm.

What he is saying is that the story is pretty much just a big paragraph, not enough spacing, etc etc. That's why he is calling it a wall of text. Oh and btw, it should be wall of words.

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Read my FF! Human-Covenant War: Without The Great Schism. It's an FF based upon how the war would have ended up if there was no Great Schism. There are a lot of twists and there is a lot of action!

The spacing is fine.

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In every loss, in every lie.
In every truth that you'd deny!
And each regret and each goodbye
Was a mistake too great to hide.
And your voice was all I heard. That I get what I deserve.
-Never forget Offensive Bias.

Offensive Bias:The spacing is fine.

I didn't mean it like that. I meant it like:

 

03 3m g3e s0 m4ny w0rd5!!!11!one!!111!!eleven111!!onehundredeleven! 

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Diary of an Arbiter: Reposted
It's free, AND a good read.

lots of marines:

im so scared of genitals. they will use thier genital powerso on you

Oh, that's alright then... Anyway, I have a new chapter for you all.

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In every loss, in every lie.
In every truth that you'd deny!
And each regret and each goodbye
Was a mistake too great to hide.
And your voice was all I heard. That I get what I deserve.
-Never forget Offensive Bias.