Brilliant chapter with an emerging persona plot.

I'm sure everyone will agree that was one of your best chapters yet. No spelling mistakes, excellent grammar and superb layout along with proper terminology that made a wonderful read.

The drone scout idea was really good, and the implementation of conversed jokes really brings out the human trade marks in this story.

I guess Don will get his much wanted rocket launcher in the next chapter?

 Macaur is a stubborn brute...wonder who will get the honour and satisfaction of kicking his ass.

Keep up the fantastic work...and I'll keep leaving this thread with a content smile on my face.

Sparhawk:

Brilliant chapter with an emerging persona plot.

Thank you. I've been meaning to ask-what are you referring to by 'persona'? lol, I've always wondered that but not been bothered to ask.

Sparhawk:

I'm sure everyone will agree that was one of your best chapters yet.

Personally, I have to say that the Prologue was my favourite chapter, but there's a chapter later on that may be better...

Sparhawk:

The drone scout idea was really good

I thought so.

Sparhawk:

the implementation of conversed jokes really brings out the human trade marks in this story.

More conversed humour may appear eventually, possibly when they reach the town.

Sparhawk:

I guess Don will get his much wanted rocket launcher in the next chapter?

Not the next chapter, but eventually.

Sparhawk:

Macaur is a stubborn brute...wonder who will get the honour and satisfaction of kicking his ass.

I have two ideas for that. Most likely Malkovich. He's my favourite character in the story.

Sparhawk:

Keep up the fantastic work...and I'll keep leaving this thread with a content smile on my face.

I'll do my best.

EDIT: P.S., Sparhawk, Ryzza will be updating Confirmation in about two hours or so.

You always do your best.

Will read your next chapter, with much enthusiasm and diligence.

Sparhawk:

You always do your best.

Yes, yes I do. lol

Sparhawk:

Will read your next chapter, with much enthusiasm and diligence.

Will write my next chapter, with much enthusiasm and diligence.

Sgt. Sanchez:

Nice chapter dude, liked the description on the guy that was hit by the plasma

Thanks. I thought it was a good chapter, all bias aside.

And Sparhawk, I told you a character would die. Just didn't say if it was a named character...lol

ChucklesSpartan:

Chapter 6 was excellent....keep it up

Thanks.

Chapter 7 will probably be up tomorrow.

Chapter 7 is up. Enjoy.

If anyone knows anything about why problems occur when pasting from Microsoft Word, please go to the "Formatting" thread and help out. Thanks.

Malkovich is so going to kick that Kig-Yars ass for that...how ironic would it be, if he sniped the jackal right through the skull, lol.

*Cries over the death of the lieutenant, now there is but an empty void where my heart used to be...why'd he have to die....sulks some more*

Thou hath no spelling mistakes, thou also hath nice grammar and excellent, superb terminology.

OMG, some swearing..finally lol. It feels more realistic with some profanity now and then, it helps the story stay true and also adds in that extra helping of humour. Speaking of humour, you implemented some more jokes, utterly spicy.

This persona is, spicy, luscious, superb and miraculous. You combined a vast amount of good elements into this story to create a spellbinding, emerging, invigorating and intriguing read for the audience and myself.

Oh...how about some detail into if the sky is cloudy, full of enemy ships/fighter planes, dreary etc, to create more of a surrounding scene...apart from that everything was nearly impeccable.

You should be proud of yourself for a well done and well written story.

Have fun.

P.S. Was absorbed within your story, utterly wondrous.

Sparhawk:

Malkovich is so going to kick that Kig-Yars ass for that

That's presuming he survives to get the chance.

Sparhawk:

Thou hath no spelling mistakes, thou also hath nice grammar and excellent, superb terminology.

What are you, Old Testament-era? lol. But seriously, thanks.

Sparhawk:

OMG, some swearing..finally lol

I thought I'd put in some character for a certain person before he was brutally murdered.

But there will be much more swearing later, as the battles become more tense.

Sparhawk:

Speaking of humour, you implemented some more jokes, utterly spicy

Thanks. The Marines are now starting to get over what they've been through, so they're trying to cope with it, and that means making jokes. Basic response, from what I understand.

Sparhawk:

This persona is, spicy, luscious, superb and miraculous. You combined a vast amount of good elements into this story to create a spellbinding, emerging, invigorating and intriguing read for the audience and myself.

Thank you. But are you saying that you're not part of the audience?

Sparhawk:

Oh...how about some detail into if the sky is cloudy, full of enemy ships/fighter planes, dreary etc, to create more of a surrounding scene

I see your point. I'll try to implement that as I go along.

Sparhawk:

You should be proud of yourself for a well done and well written story.

Thank you very much.

Two bits of good news:

1. The story will survive for a while, there's quite a few plot points I need to complete, including an excellent climax which will have plenty of Sparhawk's coveted swear words.

2. Chapter 8 should be up either tonight or tomorrow.

Oh more swear words, nice lol.

I'm part of the audience...but I was the one speaking for the others and therefore had to separate myself.

Hunted will survive and continue to serve the Halo Wars forum with its bountiful story...I'm very content at the moment.

*He is happy and dancing among pansies with Hunter hand in tow*

Have fun...keep up the consistently brilliant work.

Sparhawk:

I'm part of the audience...but I was the one speaking for the others and therefore had to separate myself.

Oh, of course. Not representing your ego in any way, shape or form....lol

Sparhawk:

Hunted will survive and continue to serve the Halo Wars forum with its bountiful story...I'm very content at the moment.

I sure hope so, especially if it's after it's complete.

Sparhawk:

*He is happy and dancing among pansies with Hunter hand in tow*

*Hunter pushes his hand away and runs for the nearest location of sanity*

I will have fun writing this, and I hope you continue to enjoy reading it.

Nice...

I likee...

...Meow?

Good Chapter!.