With most positivenes, I have to say that the action in this story is at best...emerging, intricate and a spectacle to decipher.
I new that Richard Lewis's father was in the rebellion as a rebel sympathiser...or in this case someone of status. It's a twist that really makes the reader want to read on more.
I know this is war...but I'd never punch up an unarmed enemy women, because she's a women, I would find to do so as unethical and malicious, therefore as enemies and women beaters, Jack and Larry deserved their fate that consequently doomed them to forever oblivion.
I didn't spot spelling mistakes, no grammar problems and simple easy to understand and comprehend terminology.
Brilliant job with the most recent chapters.
Note, Maybe a bit more detail in the chapters, everything else was good.
Can't wait to see how the next branches of the story pan out.
The silver crest of the gleaming point of the tool wishes you freedom from a retched existence.